Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2018/Growth mindset development

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Heading casing[edit source]

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FYI, the convention on Wikiversity is for lower-cased headings (or sentence casing). For example, use:

==Cats and dogs==

rather than

==Cats and Dogs==

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 02:50, 18 November 2018 (UTC)

Chapter review and feedback[edit source]

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Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this is a basic chapter.
    1. The chapter could benefit from further development of the Overview and Conclusion - it should be possible to only read these sections and get a good sense of why the topic is important and what is known/recommended.
  2. For additional feedback, see comments below and these copyedits.

Theory[edit source]

  1. Basic coverage of theory is provided.
  2. There is too much general theoretical material about emotion. Instead, summarise and link to further information, to allow this chapter to focus on the specific topic.

Research[edit source]

  1. Very basic coverage of research.
  2. Some statements are unreferenced (see the [factual?] tags) and some are incomplete (e.g., missing year).

Written expression[edit source]

  1. Written expression
    1. Use third person perspective, rather than first person (e.g., "we") or second person (e.g., "you") perspective.
  2. Layout
    1. The chapter uses a basic one-level structure - consider expanding to a two-level structure. Remove repeated heading.
    2. See comments about heading casing.
  3. Learning features
    1. Adding interwiki links for the first mention of key words would make the text more interactive.
    2. Basic use of one image.
    3. No use of tables.
    4. Basic use of quizzes.
    5. No use of case studies or examples.
    6. There is no evidence of integration or awareness of other related book chapters.
  4. Spelling, grammar, and proofreading.
    1. Use Australian spelling (e.g., hypothesize vs. hypothesise; behavior vs. behaviour).
    2. Use serial commas.
    3. Spelling can be improved (e.g., see the [spelling?] tags).
    4. Check and correct use of commas.
    5. More proofreading is needed to fix typos and bring the quality of written expression closer to a professional standard.
  5. APA style
    1. Numbers under 10 should be written in words (e.g., five); numbers 10 and over should be written in numbers (e.g., 10).
    2. Refer to each Table and each Figure at least once within the main text.
    3. Citations
      1. Use ampersand (&) inside brackets and "and" outside brackets.
    4. References are not in full APA style e.g.,
      1. Check and correct italicisation.
      2. Do not include issue numbers for journals which are continuously numbered within volumes.

Multimedia feedback

The accompanying multimedia presentation has been marked according to the marking criteria. Marks are available via the unit's Canvas site. Written feedback is provided below, plus see the general feedback page. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below. If you would like further clarification about the marking or feedback, contact the unit convener.


Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this is a basic, but sufficient presentation.
  2. Overall, this is an excellent presentation that makes effective use of simple tools.

Structure and content[edit source]

  1. Good use of example (John), however it takes a large part of the presentation just to use this example to describe a fixed mindset (not exactly the topic).
  2. The example helps to illustrate some aspects of theory.
  3. There is no review of research.
  4. Many of the comments about the book chapter also apply to this section.
  5. The presentation is well structured.
  6. Add and narrate a Title slide, to help the viewer understanding the focus and goal of the presentation.
  7. Add and narrate an Overview slide, to help orientate the viewer about what will be covered.
  8. Add a Conclusion slide with a take-home message(s).

Communication[edit source]

  1. Well paced but doesn't really cover all the marking criteria.
  2. The presentation is easy to follow and understand.
  3. The visual communication makes effective use of animated images and text.

Production quality[edit source]

  1. Use the full chapter title and sub-title on the opening slide and in the name of the video because this helps to match the book chapter and to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation.
  2. Audio and video recording quality was excellent.
  3. A copyright license for the presentation is not provided.
  4. A link to the book chapter is not provided.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 02:59, 18 November 2018 (UTC)