Hi! i was just looking at your chapter plan so far and thought that you could possibly improve it by adding a section on the relationship between norepinephrine and mental illnesses. I found an interesting source suggesting that norepinephrine plays a large role in relapse for people with addictions. Anyway, i hope you find this useful!
España, R. A., Schmeichel, B. E., & Berridge, C. W. (2016). Norepinephrine at the nexus of arousal, motivation and relapse. Brain Research, 1641(Part B), 207-216. doi:10.1016/j.brainres.2016.01.002
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Avoid one sentence paragraphs. A paragraph should typically consist of three to five sentences.
In general, avoid starting sentences with an author name, unless the author is particularly pertinent. Instead, what is of far more interest to the reader, is the content/key point, with the citation included in brackets at the end of the sentence.
Once an abbreviation is established (e.g., NE), use it.
Too much content to fit in the timeframe to address the topic. NE is first mentioned at 2:37 in a 3 minute presentation. And the relationship between NE and motivation isn't really discussed at all - the emphasis is on arousal.
Consider using more images (e.g., inverted-U relationship).
The presentation is well structured (Title, Overview, Body, Conclusion).
The presentation uses text-based slides with narrated audio.
The narration is well-paced and there the amount of text per slide is appropriate. However, the script is too long and runs over time - be more selective and focus more on the relationship between NE and motivation.