Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2017/Norepinephrine and motivation

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Feedback[edit source]

Hi! i was just looking at your chapter plan so far and thought that you could possibly improve it by adding a section on the relationship between norepinephrine and mental illnesses. I found an interesting source suggesting that norepinephrine plays a large role in relapse for people with addictions. Anyway, i hope you find this useful!

España, R. A., Schmeichel, B. E., & Berridge, C. W. (2016). Norepinephrine at the nexus of arousal, motivation and relapse. Brain Research, 1641(Part B), 207-216. doi:10.1016/j.brainres.2016.01.002 --Eadams1994 (discusscontribs) 05:21, 21 October 2017 (UTC)

Heading casing[edit source]

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FYI, the convention on Wikiversity is for lower-cased headings. For example, use:

==Cats and dogs==

rather than

==Cats and Dogs==

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 14:46, 4 December 2017 (UTC)

Chapter review and feedback[edit source]

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Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this is a very good chapter.
  2. For additional feedback, see these copyedits.

Theory[edit source]

  1. Theories are reasonably well described and explained.
  2. The focus on this chapter is more on arousal and motivation, with an assumption that NE regulates arousal. More information about how NE affects motivation would have been helpful.
  3. There are several helpful examples and an excellent focus on practical intervention.

Research[edit source]

  1. Good coverage of relevant research is provided.
  2. When describing important research findings, indicate the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship.
  3. Greater emphasis on major reviews and meta-analyses would be helpful.

Written expression[edit source]

  1. Written expression
    1. Avoid one sentence paragraphs. A paragraph should typically consist of three to five sentences.
    2. In general, avoid starting sentences with an author name, unless the author is particularly pertinent. Instead, what is of far more interest to the reader, is the content/key point, with the citation included in brackets at the end of the sentence.
    3. Once an abbreviation is established (e.g., NE), use it.
  2. Layout
    1. See earlier comments about heading casing.
  3. Learning features
    1. Adding more interwiki links for the first mention of key words would make the text more interactive.
    2. Minimal use of images.
    3. No use of tables.
    4. No use of quizzes.
    5. No use of case studies.
  4. Spelling, grammar, and proofreading.
    1. Check and correct use of affect vs. effect.
    2. Check and correct use of commas.
  5. APA style
    1. Citations
      1. Use ampersand (&) inside brackets and "and" outside brackets.
      2. In-text citations should be in alphabetical order.
    2. References are not in full APA style e.g.,
      1. Check and correct capitalisation.
      2. Check and correct italicisation.
      3. See new doi format.
      4. Do not include issue numbers for journals which are continuously numbered within volumes.

Multimedia feedback

The accompanying multimedia presentation has been marked according to the marking criteria. Marks are available via the unit's Moodle site. Written feedback is provided below, plus see the general feedback page. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below. If you would like further clarification about the marking or feedback, contact the unit convener.


Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this is a basic, but sufficient presentation.
  2. Content beyond 3 minutes was ignored for marking purposes.

Structure and content[edit source]

  1. Too much content to fit in the timeframe to address the topic. NE is first mentioned at 2:37 in a 3 minute presentation. And the relationship between NE and motivation isn't really discussed at all - the emphasis is on arousal.
  2. Consider using more images (e.g., inverted-U relationship).
  3. The presentation is well structured (Title, Overview, Body, Conclusion).

Communication[edit source]

  1. The presentation uses text-based slides with narrated audio.
  2. The narration is well-paced and there the amount of text per slide is appropriate. However, the script is too long and runs over time - be more selective and focus more on the relationship between NE and motivation.

Production quality[edit source]

  1. The presentation is over the maximum time limit.
  2. Add a description to the meta-data
  3. Audio recording quality was a quiet with white noise in the background - review microphone set up (maybe an on-board microphone rather than a headset microphone was used).
  4. Use the full chapter title and sub-title in the name of the video because this helps to match the book chapter and to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation.
  5. Audio record quality was poor to mediocre.
  6. Video recording quality is very good.
  7. Category probably should be Educational.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 21:29, 4 December 2017 (UTC)