Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2016/Time perspective and happiness

Comments

Hi, Great idea for a chapter, I look forward to seeing how it comes together. The concept of delayed gratification, specifically as it relates to experiments like the Stanford Marshmallow experiment, I find extremely interesting. I have placed a couple of links to JA that I think would be of benefit. https://www.apa.org/helpcenter/willpower-gratification.pdf https://www.ncbi.nlm.nih.gov/pmc/articles/PMC3135702/ Good Luck with it :)--U3090066 (discuss • contribs) 16:43, 9 October 2016 (UTC)

Heading casing

FYI, the convention on Wikiversity is for lower-cased headings. For example, use: ==Cats and dogs== rather than ==Cats and Dogs== -- Jtneill - Talk - c 00:20, 22 October 2016 (UTC)

Remove bold from headings

Just use the default heading styles. -- Jtneill - Talk - c 00:20, 22 October 2016 (UTC)

Wiki links

User:U3120378, this chapter could be improved by linking the first mention of key words to corresponding Wikipedia articles e.g., anxiety. -- Jtneill - Talk - c 21:44, 23 October 2016 (UTC)

fixed typos

Hi, just catching up on feedback and know this is a little late but hopefully will help before marking?? Have only fixed a couple of very minor typos (eg: changed 'wre' to 'were'). Really like the placement and selection of pictures. Overall this chapter gave a good overview, but perhaps could have drawn on a few more references to flesh it out a bit? Was easy to read and follow and generally looks great though! Congratulations!! --U944295 (discuss • contribs) 13:59, 3 November 2016 (UTC)

Chapter review and feedback

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Overall Overall, this is a basic chapter which could be improved by providing a more indepth review of relevant research literature. For more feedback see these copyedits and the comments below. Feel free to make ongoing changes to the chapter if you wish to address any of these comments or make other improvements. Theory The Overview is basic but sufficient. To improve, consider possibly including focus questions and/or a case study. The chapter doesn't discuss happiness as a construct - what is it? The chapter provides a basic description of Zimbardo's time perspective. However, it lacks sufficient consideration of how TP relates to happiness. For example, it could be helpful to discuss the optimal time profile in more detail and how it can help facilitate a balance between shorter- and longer-term happiness. The Conclusion could be improved by emphasising practical, take-home messages. Research The chapter considers a limited range of relevant research and thus lacks a sufficiently in-depth research review. Was the James (1890) source directly consulted? If not, don't cite it (or use a secondary citation). Some statements are unreferenced (e.g., see the tags) When describing important research studies, provide some indication of the nature of the method. When discussing important research findings, indicate the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship. Written expression In general, the chapter is well written. Obtaining (earlier) comments on a chapter plan and/or chapter draft could have helped to improve the chapter. The chapter addresses the topic and book theme but lacks sufficient depth and practical take-home messages. Structure and headings Each section should start with at least one introductory paragraph before branching into sub-sections. Layout Figures are used effectively. Figures should be referred to in the main text. Integration with other chapters Limited integration with other chapters. Learning features Add Interwiki links (to relevant Wikipedia articles) to make the text more interactive. Quiz questions could be used to encourage reader engagement. Grammar and proofreading Check and correct the use of abbreviations (such as "e.g.," and "i.e.,"). The grammar of some sentences could be improved (e.g., see the tags). APA style Use APA style for table and figure captions. Direct quotes need page numbers. subjects -> participants The reference list is not in full APA style.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 12:05, 18 November 2016 (UTC)

Multimedia feedback

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Overall Overall, this is a basic presentation that errs by covering too much content, too fast, and by not directly addressing the topic - TP and happiness. Structure and content Overview Too brief - and fails to latch on to the core question which is the subtitle of the book chapter. Use the Overview to set up the problem to be solved (the question i.e., the subtitle for the book chapter). Tell the listener what they will find out about if they watch this presentation. Selection and organisation Too much content is presented - be more selective - e.g., work backwards from 3 take-home messages to work out what content needs to be presented - and then focus on only that which is essential to conveying these messages. Basic coverage of theory. Basic coverage of research. Citations and references are included. Conclusion Too brief/general - drill down to some practical, take-away messages. Communication Audio Audio narration is too fast to easily comprehend - consider slowing down. See this article for more information about speaking rates. Leave longer pauses between sentences. Consider using greater intonation to enhance engagement.[1] Visuals Add title slide Visuals are clear, creative, interesting, and easy to read. Some spelling errors. Production quality Overall, basic production using PowToon. Meta-data Not submitted via Moodle Add a link to the book chapter. Fill out the description field (e.g., brief description of presentation, link back to the book chapter, license details, and possibly include references, image attributions, and/or transcript). Audio recording quality Low volume Image/video recording quality Excellent Licensing A copyright license for the presentation is not indicated (i.e., in the meta-data or the visual presentation). The copyright licenses and sources of the images used are not indicated - there may have been copyright violation unless you own the copyright to the images used.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 03:08, 23 November 2016 (UTC) Hi my old book chapter, I think this book chapter, the author has put lot of efforts on the five features of time perspective but seems like some parts of the chapter are not properly edited. And the relationship between time perspective and happiness didn’t display in a clear way too. And I think it would be a good idea to narrow down the question based on the five time perspective and balanced time perspective. In this way, to answer what is the relationship between happiness. --Rachel Zeng (discuss • contribs) 08:05, 22 October 2017 (UTC)