Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2016/Smiling, laughter, and happiness

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Comments[edit source]

Hi, watched this super interesting TED talk on smiling a while ago, not sure if it will be relevant but its a great video --U3117592 (discusscontribs) 12:53, 17 October 2016 (UTC)

Heading casing[edit source]

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FYI, the convention on Wikiversity is for lower-cased headings. For example, use:

==Cats and dogs==

rather than

==Cats and Dogs==

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 12:15, 25 November 2016 (UTC)

Chapter review and feedback

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Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this is a very basic chapter. It has three notable problem areas (areas for improvement:
    1. The grammar, spelling and quality of written expression is well below professional standard.
    2. The chapter should focus more strongly throughout on the core question: "What is the effect of smiling and laughter on happiness?" and not on tangential matters such as "What are the benefits of happiness?".
    3. The chapter makes little use of the potential of the wiki environment (e.g., consider adding interwiki links, images etc.)
  2. For more feedback see these copyedits and the comments below.
  3. Feel free to make ongoing changes to the chapter if you wish to address any of these comments or make other improvements.

Theory[edit source]

  1. The Overview could be improved by focusing more on the core question (the subtitle) and less on other questions.
  2. Abbreviate the general material about happiness and provide references and links to further information. This would allow more space to address the focus of this chapter - the contribution of smiling and laughter to happiness.
  3. Examples or case studies could be helpful.

Research[edit source]

  1. The Reeve (2015) textbook is over-used as a citation; preferably consult and cite primary, peer-reviewed sources.
  2. Some statements are unreferenced (e.g., see the [factual?] tags)
  3. When describing important research studies, provide some indication of the nature of the method.
  4. When discussing important research findings, indicate the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship.

Written expression[edit source]

  1. Written expression
    1. The quality of written expression is not of an acceptable, professional standard. To help guide areas for improvement, please see where clarification templates such as [Rewrite to improve clarity], [explain?], [say what?], [vague], [grammar?], and [spelling?] may have been added to the page.
    2. Avoid directional referencing (e.g., above, below, as previously mentioned).
    3. Obtaining (earlier) comments on a chapter plan and/or chapter draft could have helped to improve the chapter.
  2. Structure and headings
    1. Each section should start with at least one introductory paragraph before branching into sub-sections.
    2. See earlier comments about heading casing
  3. Layout
    1. No images or tables were used. Frowny.svg
  4. Integration with other chapters
    1. Add interwiki links links to a wider range of other relevant chapters.
    2. No integration with other chapters is evident. Frowny.svg
  5. Learning features
    1. Add Interwiki links (to relevant Wikipedia articles) to make the text more interactive.
    2. Quiz questions could be used to encourage reader engagement.
  6. Spelling
    1. Spelling could be improved - see the [spelling?] tags.
  7. Grammar and proofreading
    1. Check and correct use of punctuation, particularly commas, semi-colons, and ownership apostrophes.
    2. Check and correct the use of [1]abbreviations (such as "e.g.," and "i.e.,")].
  8. APA style
    1. Check and correct the APA style formatting of in-text citations.
    2. Check and correct the APA style for how to report numbers (Numbers under 10 should be written in words (e.g., five); numbers 10 and over should be written in numbers (e.g., 10)).
    3. The reference list is not in full APA style.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 12:15, 25 November 2016 (UTC)

Multimedia feedback

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Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this was an insufficient presentation because it wasn't streamable online and hence hasn't been watched or marked and no feedback is provided.

Structure and content[edit source]

Communication[edit source]

Production quality[edit source]

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 12:29, 25 November 2016 (UTC)