Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2016/Sleep and depression

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--U3166203 (discuss • contribs) 21:57, 23 October 2016 (UTC)==Comments==

Hi! Just came across an interesting TED talk about Sleep, its a bit lengthy but if you watch from about 17 minutes it's about sleep and mental health, however it is all pretty interesting :) https://www.ted.com/talks/russell_foster_why_do_we_sleep?language=en --U3117592 (discuss • contribs) 04:17, 4 October 2016 (UTC)

Hey I really like the chapter you have chosen, I would love to read about the cycle of depression and sleep and how it can become hard to escape - might be somehing to consider if you need some extra topics to write about! --Sebastian Kelly (discuss • contribs) 02:21, 20 October 2016 (UTC)

Hey there, great work on your chapter, its looking great. Here is an article that you might find helpful. It discusses how REM sleep in depressed individuals differs from that of non-depressed people. It also includes some theories that you might find useful. Good luck! Riemann, D., Berger, M., & Voderholzer, U. (2001). Sleep and depression—results from psychobiological studies: an overview. Biological psychology, 57(1), 67-103.--U3119842 (discuss • contribs) 13:14, 21 October 2016 (UTC)

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FYI, the convention on Wikiversity is for lower-cased headings. For example, use: ==Cats and dogs== rather than Hey there!! Really loving your book chapter and how it is progressing. I found this article about a study with postpartum women that had a lack of sleep and how that affected there mood and depression levels. Though this may be interesting for your book chapter for you to have a look at :) good luck!! https://www.researchgate.net/profile/Gunnar_Bondevik/publication/26702622_Sleep_and_depression_in_postpartum_women_A_population-based_study/links/0c96052d44cbdb319c000000.pdf. --Lizzy94 (discuss • contribs) 04:31, 22 October 2016 (UTC)U3083568 {discuss • contribs) 15:128, 22 October 2016 (UTC)==Cats and Dogs== -- Jtneill - Talk - c 21:04, 21 October 2016 (UTC)

Wiki links

This chapter could be improved by linking the first mention of key words to corresponding Wikipedia articles e.g., anxiety. -- Jtneill - Talk - c 08:07, 23 October 2016 (UTC)

Structure

User:U3121176, avoid having a single sub-section within a section; either add another sub-section or merge the content into the higher level section. -- Jtneill - Talk - c 21:43, 23 October 2016 (UTC)

References

User:3166203 and interesting article for your section about REM sleep and depression http://onlinelibrary.wiley.com/doi/10.1111/j.1365-2869.1993.tb00092.x/epdf--U3166203 (discuss • contribs) 21:57, 23 October 2016 (UTC) another source for REM sleep: http://www.sciencedirect.com.ezproxy.canberra.edu.au/science/article/pii/S0925492799000256 --U3166203 (discuss • contribs) 21:59, 23 October 2016 (UTC) sleep deprivation resource https://www.researchgate.net/profile/Anna_Wirz-Justice/publication/16012887_Sleep_sleep_deprivation_and_depression._A_hypothesis_derived_from_a_model_of_sleep_regulation._Hum_Neurobiol_1205-210/links/5501c50e0cf24cee39f9111d.pdf--U3166203 (discuss • contribs) 22:02, 23 October 2016 (UTC)

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Overall Overall, this is a solid chapter which could be improved by . For more feedback see these copyedits and the comments below. Feel free to make ongoing changes to the chapter if you wish to address any of these comments or make other improvements. Theory Overview Solid. Body Abbreviate the general theoretical material and provide references and links to further information. This will allow more space to apply the theories to the specific topic in more detail (e.g., starting with "Theory linking sleep and depression"). The question (and answer) to "So how does this relate to sleep?" needs to be more front and centre. Somewhat grapples with chicken and egg causality - does depression cause sleep problems, is it the other way around, or is the relationship bidirectional? Examples or case studies would be helpful. Conclusion Clear and succint. Addresses self-help theme. Research Several very useful/relevant research studies are described. They tend to be described one after the other. To improve the review of research, look for patterns and themes and try to synthesise the findings in order to convey a greater depth of understanding. Consider reporting on meta-analytic findings. When discussing important research findings, indicate the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship. Written expression Written expression The chapter successfully addresses the topic and book theme. Structure and headings Each section should start with at least one introductory paragraph before branching into sub-sections. Avoid sections with only one sub-section. A section should have no sub-sections or at least two sub-sections. Layout Tables and/or Figures are used effectively. Tables and Figures should be referred to in the main text. Integration with other chapters Some integration with other chapters is evident. Learning features Excellent use of interwiki links to relevant Wikipedia articles. Quiz questions are used effectively to encourage reader engagement. APA style Check and correct the APA style for how to report numbers (Numbers under 10 should be written in words (e.g., five); numbers 10 and over should be written in numbers (e.g., 10)). Capitalise the first letters of table captions. Check and correct the use of "&" vs. "and" (Use ampersand (&) inside brackets and "and" outside brackets). The reference list is not in full APA style.

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Overall Overall, this is a very well prepared and executed presentation. Just over the 3 minute maximum time limit. Structure and content Overview Establishes the problem. What will be covered in the presentation? Selection and organisation Abbreviate the preliminary content - addressing the topic starts ~1:15 After this point, content is well selected. Combines theory and research. Addresses a self-help theme. Uses examples. Uses meaningful examples. Include citations? Conclusion Take-home messages / key points are well summarised. Communication Audio Well narrated. Audio is clear and well-paced. Varied intonation added interest and engagement. Visuals The animated combination of images and text is effective in attracting and sustaining viewer attention. Production quality Overall, very well produced. Meta-data Well titled. Link to and from the book chapter provided. Good use of the Description field to provide relevant information. Audio recording quality Reasonably good, but remove the background music - it makes it more difficult to concentrate on the narration and visuals. Image/video recording quality Excellent Licensing A copyright license for the presentation is correctly shown in at least one location. Creative Commons. The copyright licenses and sources of the images are indicated.

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