Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2016/Restricted interests and anxiety in children with autistic spectrum disorders

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Hi there! I think your topic is really interesting and am looking forward to seeing where you take it and reading the finished chapter :)

I found this article that explores whether the relationship between restricted and repetitive behaviours and anxiety in ASD is mediated by reactions to sensory stimuli - http://www.sciencedirect.com.ezproxy.canberra.edu.au/science/article/pii/S1750946713001979 (study 2 is the relevant part of the article).

Hopefully you find it useful for your book chapter :).--U3100368 (discuss • contribs) 02:41, 30 September 2016 (UTC)

Hi. Your book chapter is really interesting and you have quite a lot of content already. I notice you have not put in prevalence material yet. I came across an article which might be of interest. It utilises Medicare data to consider the prevalence of ASD in Australia. The article also makes an interesting point about age at diagnosis with ASD. According to the article children can be diagnosed reliably at 2 years, but the most frequent age was 5 years, and the average was around 4 years, meaning that some children are encountering delayed diagnosis.

https://www.mja.com.au/journal/2015/202/6/mapping-diagnosis-autism-spectrum-disorders-children-aged-under-7-years-australia

Hopefully this article is of use. --U985072 (discuss • contribs) 08:51, 3 October 2016 (UTC)

Edited a table

Hey there,

I noticed in your source code for your harmful and helpful table, that it looked like you'd tried to center the harmful and helpful cells. I added some code to the cell that contained the bolded harmful word, which centered it. If you don't like, the syntax can be removed through the edit source button.

Hope this was helpful, --Muzz2016 (discuss • contribs) 04:32, 6 October 2016 (UTC)

Hi, Well done on your chapter it's really good! I like how in depth it is, you've got really good information and references. I did notice it is really long, you've got about 1200 words to cull (if UG)! As it is motivation and emotion, your areas to reduce might have to be defining ASD and also the comorbidity part. You can assume it's a reasonably intelligent layperson, so probably don't need as much info in these areas. Good luck! It's a really good chapter and I know it'll be hard reducing it because it's all really good research! :) --U3083764 (discuss • contribs) 11:05, 12 October 2016 (UTC)

Heading casing

FYI, the convention on Wikiversity is for lower-cased headings. For example, use: ==Cats and dogs== rather than ==Cats and Dogs== -- Jtneill - Talk - c 00:13, 22 October 2016 (UTC)

Chapter review and feedback

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Overall Overall, this is a strong chapter which incorporates a balanced, critical overview of relevant theory and research and makes effective use of the wiki environment. The consideration of pros and cons to RI is excellent. The chapter is over the maximum word-count. One way to reduce word count would be to abbreviate the material about ASD and to link to further information, to allow a greater focus on addressing the central topic (i.e., Autism, RI, and anxiety). For more feedback see these copyedits and the comments below. Feel free to make ongoing changes to the chapter if you wish to address any of these comments or make other improvements. Theory Clear Overview. Excellent, knowledgeable coverage of theory which integrated with discussion of research. Abbreviate the background material about ASD and provide links to further information. Perhaps consider adding more examples or case study material which illustrate the pros and cons. The Conclusion offers a succint, balanced summary and emphasises solutions. Research The chapter is exceptionally well references. When describing important research studies, provide some indication of the nature of the method. When discussing important research findings, indicate the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship. Written expression Written expression is a generally very good, although tends towards being somewhat verbose. Some paragraphs are overly long. Paragraphs should communicate a single key idea in about three to five sentences. Probably abbreviate Restricted Interest to RI and Restricted Interests to RIs; same with AD. The chapter successfully addresses the topic and book theme. Write for an international, not just an Australian, audience. Structure and headings Each section should include at least one introductory paragraph before branching into sub-sections. See earlier comments about heading casing The chapter is well-structured. Layout Add bullet-points for See also and External links. There is some use of images or tables. Limited integration with other relevant chapters. Learning features Excellent use of interwiki links to other book chapters and to relevant Wikipedia articles. Interwiki links should only need be added for the initial mention of a keyword; use plain text for the keyword subsequently. Quiz questions could be used to encourage reader engagement. Spelling, grammar, and proofreading are excellent. APA style Restrict the number of citations within brackets to the top three sources. Use APA style for table and figure captions. Excellent APA style for references.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 09:09, 14 November 2016 (UTC)

Multimedia feedback

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Overall Overall, this is a solid presentation. Structure and content Overview Goes pretty quickly into definition of RI - ideally, take more time to set the scene - e.g., maybe provide some examples Use the Overview to set up the problem to be solved (the question i.e., the subtitle for the book chapter). Tell the listener what they will find out about if they watch this presentation. Selection and organisation Good coverage of theory and research, but could be simplified/abbreviated. Well structured. Balanced perspective; excellent positive focus. Citations and references are included. Conclusion Well-synthesised conclusion. Communication Audio Audio is clear and well-paced. Image/Video Zoom in to title slide at beginning Visuals are text-heavy - consider abbreviating and using larger font Consider including more images, figures, and/or tables. Consider using smaller font size for citations to help the main points stand out whilst still including citations. Production quality Overall, effective, basic Prezi production. Meta-data Well titled. A link to the chapter is provided but it is not obvious. Fill out the description field (e.g., brief description of presentation, link back to the book chapter, and possibly include references, image attributions, and/or transcript). Audio recording quality Good Image/video recording quality Effective use of simple tools. Licensing A copyright license for the presentation is correctly shown in at least one location. Creative Commons. The source of the images is indicated.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 03:47, 21 November 2016 (UTC)