Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2016/Regret

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Hello! I found an article that applied Erik Erikson's life stages to Holocaust survivors. I think it may be applicable to your chapter! Hopefully it helps :) Here is the link for the article: http://www.tandfonline.com.ezproxy.canberra.edu.au/doi/pdf/10.1080/10911350903275069?needAccess=true Good Luck :) --U3096943 (discusscontribs) 08:51, 8 October 2016 (UTC)Reply[reply]

Hello, this reference might be handy, it further distinguishes between inaction regrets/action regrets, and supports something called 'regret regulation theory'

Morrison, M., & Roese, N. J. (2011). Regrets of the typical american: findings from a nationally representative sample. Social Psychological and Personality Science, 1-8. doi: 10.1177/1948550611401756

http://spp.sagepub.com/content/early/2011/02/28/1948550611401756.full.pdf+html Arlo Porter (discusscontribs) [User: Arlo Porter]


Hi, interesting topic you've made a good start. I noticed that you sometimes use quotes from other articles in your chapter. When referencing a quote you should provide the specific page number it came from, example: "The sky is blue" (God, 2004, p.3). If they aren't quotes it might be best to remove the quotation marks. All the best :) --U3117275 (discusscontribs) 16:08, 12 October 2016 (UTC)Reply[reply]

Hi, I made some general edits in terms of grammar on your page so it coincides with the APA format guidelines. In one part you discuss evidence regarding a specific brain region being associated with feeling remorse and regret over behaviour. It might be helpful if after you have mentioned what the evidence says, to expand and draw conclusions from the evidence and relate it back to the subject of your chapter. Its a really interesting topic and your book chapter is coming along great! Good job and all the best :) U3115468 (discusscontribs) 02:55, 16 October 2016 (UTC)
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Hey, I watched this interesting TED talk on regret you could potentially add to your see also section/external links? https://www.ted.com/talks/kathryn_schulz_don_t_regret_regret--U3117592 (discusscontribs) 07:53, 18 October 2016 (UTC)Reply[reply]


Possible theories for end of life regret[edit source]

Erik Erikson had some interesting ideas on why people feel the way they do at the end of their life.

Check out Erikson's stages of psychosocial development: Wisdom: ego integrity vs. despair (maturity, 65 – death). https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Erikson%27s_stages_of_psychosocial_development#Wisdom:_ego_integrity_vs._despair_.28maturity.2C_65_.E2.80.93_death.29

http://link.springer.com/article/10.1007/s10804-007-9026-3


All the best, --Muzz2016 (discusscontribs) 01:30, 23 September 2016 (UTC)Reply[reply]

Hi, I have found a useful article for you but upon checking your reference list, I noticed that you have already found it. However if you specifically see the discussion of the article (specifically pages 793 & 794) you will find some good information for your chapter. These pages discuss that some of the end of life regrets include "specific sins and shortcomings of their lives" I hope this helps, all the best!! --LeoDean1993 (discusscontribs) 10:11, 28 September 2016 (UTC)Reply[reply]


Heading casing[edit source]

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-- Jtneill - Talk - c 23:43, 29 September 2016 (UTC)Reply[reply]

Grammar/Australian spelling[edit source]

Hello, hope your well :) I have read over your chapter and its coming along well! I hope you don't mind but I have corrected some grammatical errors in your chapter. I just want to let you know to be aware that you have used american spelling for a few words - e.g 'emphazised' as opposed to 'emphasised' Australian spelling uses 's' instead of 'z'

It states in the marking criteria; Spelling and grammar (5%): Professional spelling and grammar: Australian spelling Correct grammar

I have edited your chapter to be consisted with Australian spelling :) Great to see your progress & good luck !! --U3121176 (discusscontribs) 06:32, 16 October 2016 (UTC)Reply[reply]

Numbered lists[edit source]

See Help:List for how to do numbered lists. I changed the first list. -- Jtneill - Talk - c 05:28, 19 October 2016 (UTC)Reply[reply]

Images[edit source]

Hey, I was thinking for your 'Physiology of regret' section it might be helpful if you include a visual of the orbitofrontal cortex. Wiki Commons have a few.. https://commons.wikimedia.org/wiki/File:Cortex_frontal_lateral.png or https://commons.wikimedia.org/wiki/File:Prefrontal_cortex.png these two have labels on a few of sections so they may not be the best idea, or there is this one https://commons.wikimedia.org/wiki/File:MRI_of_orbitofrontal_cortex.jpg which is more specific, but perhaps less clear.. I feel you need a visual/diagram though. Good luck!--CeeJay95 (discusscontribs) 09:02, 19 October 2016 (UTC)Reply[reply]


Hello there!

Found your chapter really interesting.

A suggestion I have would be to include a bit of research findings in your section on regret regulation. I was looking into it and there are ALOT of studies (recent) that have been done in this area. Thought it might compliment your theory discussion quite well! Here is one you might find helpful: https://www.researchgate.net/profile/Daniel_Vaestfjaell/publication/283425347_Regulation_of_Experienced_and_Anticipated_Regret_in_Daily_Decision_Making/links/5639e9bb08aed5314d239f7a.pdf Hope this helps :) --Jazznicol (discusscontribs) 06:39, 20 October 2016 (UTC)Reply[reply]

A few tweaks[edit source]

Hey There are a few relatively minor things to fix up, but I think the content is looking really good.

  • Be careful of your direct quotes, they should have page numbers and I suspect they should always be in double quotes (I haven't double checked). See http://blog.apastyle.org/apastyle/direct-quotations/
  • Your overview should establish some focus questions and a problem statement--why should the reader be interested in your article. There are marks for this..
  • In the third paragraph of the overview, you talk about something being good and bad which is possibly subjective? It might be worth pointing this out a little more clearly (it's illegal to drink and drive... etc).
  • In major themes:
    • A couple of the paragraphs are fairly short, so I don't think the key points are fully explored. You mention cognitive dissonance and cultural difference, which you consider major themes but then they're only a few sentences long.
    • In the cognitive dissonance paragraph, you mention omission but then the second sentence doesn't clearly follow on from that.
    • The cultural differences paragraph is duplicated in two places in your article.
    • It might be worth making the title for major themes a little clearer, perhaps "Consistent themes in regret research," or maybe something less boring than my suggestion. But "major themes" by itself sounds a little weird and you're not drawn to read the paragraph.
    • You mention education, career, romance etc. It could be good to link to other articles or explain why it's those areas that are consistently identified.
    • Major themes could come after regret theories
  • The regret theories and physiology of regret are good. I added a few citation needed things, when you're introducing the topic.
  • Regrets online
  • Regrets between people
    • Check your citations and paragraph lengths
  • I marked a few citation issues too in your article.

Sorry.. I know there are quite a few points, but I think each fix shouldn't take too long and hopefully you'll get more marks for it.

TristanMM (discusscontribs) 08:11, 20 October 2016 (UTC)Reply[reply]

Structure[edit source]

Avoid having a single sub-section within a section; either add another sub-section or merge the content into the higher level section. -- Jtneill - Talk - c 08:00, 23 October 2016 (UTC)Reply[reply]


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Theory[edit source]

  1. Theory is well explained and integrated with research.
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  1. Research is very well selected and reviewed.
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  1. The chapter is well developed and well written.
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