Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2016/Recycling motivation

Multimedia link

Hi- just noticed that you have not added the link box to your page yet. If you do want to add it, this is the code you can put into edit source to get the format that James wants. Here is the code:

[Link to multimedia will go here Multimedia presentation (3 min)]

for the whole format of the page, James has put the code up on moodle: http://learnonline.canberra.edu.au/mod/forum/discuss.php?d=410261 --JazNF (discuss • contribs) 05:44, 30 August 2016 (UTC)

Headings

Hi - great job on adding some headings, I've helped a bit with adding the heading formatting. Jtneill test1 (discuss • contribs) 09:19, 10 August 2016 (UTC)

Great progress

Fantastic to see this developing. ---- Jtneill - Talk - c 10:01, 17 August 2016 (UTC)

Hi there, chapter content is looking great! I wish i was as organised as you, ahaha! i feel as if shuffling around some of the content in your sentences may be beneficial. In my experience, the easiest way to do this is to read each sentence on its own, and see if it makes sense out of context. I hope that helps :) Well done! :) HomerIncognito (discuss • contribs) 06:42, 13 September 2016 (UTC)

Heading casing

FYI, the convention on Wikiversity is for lower-cased headings. For example, use: ==Cats and dogs== rather than ==Cats and Dogs== -- Jtneill - Talk - c 12:48, 15 September 2016 (UTC)

Checking whether you've received this feedback, User:U3108945. -- Jtneill - Talk - c 22:53, 21 October 2016 (UTC)

Feedback

Hi, Well done on your chapter, you've made recycling interesting! :) I like how you've compared other nations/areas around the world, and also the use of the case study the whole way through. Only thing I noticed was in the case study sentences, eg. "Matthew’s girlfriend Julia doesn’t want to take out the recycling". There are a few contractions that you might want to change, just because it's still an academic piece of writing. (I think it reads better how it is, but better to be safe!) Otherwise great job :)--U3083764 (discuss • contribs) 02:05, 22 October 2016 (UTC)

--Jazznicol (discuss • contribs) 04:16, 22 October 2016 (UTC)

Feedback

Hi! I hope you don't mind but I corrected a few grammatical errors I saw, but apart from this, this is a great chapter! Really informative. There were a few spots at the beginning of paragraphs to where you make a statement without a reference. Just in case, it might be case to find a reference for these, otherwise great job! :)

Chapter review and feedback

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Overall Overall, this is a promising, but somewhat disjointed chapter. A lot of theoretical territory is covered, but probably too much - a stronger chapter could be more selective on focus more exclusively on key theories and related research. For more feedback see these copyedits and the comments below. Feel free to make ongoing changes to the chapter if you wish to address any of these comments or make other improvements. Theory Include more motivational theory in the Overview. Abbreviate the general background info about recycling practices and add links to further information. This would allow more space to focus on motivational theories and research which related to the target behaviour. Focus on a smaller range of theoretical perspectives in a more integrated way; currently, the chapter presents as something of a smorgasbord of only loosely interrelated theoretical elements. The Conclusion offers a succint summary and emphasises solutions. The case study and examples were helpful. Research Several very useful/relevant research studies are described. They tend to be described one after the other. To improve the review of research, look for patterns and themes and try to synthesise the findings in order to convey a greater depth of understanding. When discussing important research findings, indicate the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship. Written expression Written expression Avoid one sentence paragraphs. A paragraph should typically consist of three to five sentences. Write for an international, not just an Australian, audience. Layout Tables and/or Figures are used effectively, but check figure numbering. Integration with other chapters Add interwiki links links to a wider range of other relevant chapters. Learning features Add Interwiki links (to relevant Wikipedia articles) to make the text more interactive. Quiz questions are used effectively to encourage reader engagement. Spelling Use Australian spelling (some general examples are hypothesize -> hypothesise; behavior -> behaviour). APA style Put in-text citations in alphabetical order. Check and correct the APA style for how to report numbers (Numbers under 10 should be written in words (e.g., five); numbers 10 and over should be written in numbers (e.g., 10)). Direct quotes need page numbers. The reference list is not in full APA style.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 11:57, 11 November 2016 (UTC)

Multimedia feedback

The accompanying multimedia presentation has been marked according to the marking criteria. Marks are available via the unit's Moodle site. Written feedback is provided below, plus see the general feedback page. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below. If you would like further clarification about the marking or feedback, contact the unit convener.

Overall Overall, this is a creative attempt at an engaging presentation, but it is very difficult to follow (cognitive overload) because the viewer needs to simultaneously process audio dialogue and indirectly related text and images. Structure and content Overview None provided. Use the Overview to set up the problem to be solved (the question i.e., the subtitle for the book chapter). Tell the listener what they will find out about if they watch this presentation. Selection and organisation Audio conveys an engaging example - but probably this would work better as a shorter (or series of shorter snippets), interspersed with explanation of relevant theory/research Visual conveys theory/research - but it was very hard to digest this information whilst listening to the audio Citations and references are included. Conclusion None provided. A Conclusion slide summarising the take-home messages / key points could be helpful. Communication Audio Audio dialogue is clear and interesting, but distracts from the images/text. Image/Video Visuals are well prepared clear and easy to read. The combination of images and text is effective. Production quality Overall, creative production, but has gone over the top to present too much information - look to simplify and present less but more effectively, perhaps working backwards from the key take-home messages. Meta-data Rename the title so that it includes the subtitle (and matches the book chapter). Add a link to the book chapter. Minimal but sufficient use of the Description field. Audio recording quality Excellent Image/video recording quality Effective use of simple tools. Licensing The stated license in the description doesn't match the selected youtube license.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 23:02, 21 November 2016 (UTC)