Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2016/Prenatal depression

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Book chapter template[edit source]

Hey :) just noticed that you haven't added the multimedia link to your page. James has given us the syntax to make the template for the book chapter and it helps a lot. the link to the syntax is: https://en.wikiversity.org/wiki/Template:Motivation_and_emotion/Book_chapter_structure--JazNF (discusscontribs) 05:24, 12 October 2016 (UTC)

Comments[edit source]

Hey - I will let you know if I find any interesting articles, our chapters are at each end of the spectrum! Motivation and emotion/Book/2016/Postpartum return to work motivation please feel free to look at my references for any overlap in infom--Sebastian Kelly (discusscontribs) 02:14, 20 October 2016 (UTC)

Image ideas[edit source]

Hi. A great topic. Found some images on wiki commons: https://commons.wikimedia.org/wiki/File:Mother_and_Baby_on_Mother%27s_Day.jpg (mum and baby) https://commons.wikimedia.org/wiki/File:Human-Male-White-Newborn-Baby-Crying.jpg (crying baby). Hope this is helpful and good luck! --U113403 (discusscontribs) 12:07, 21 October 2016 (UTC)

Heading casing[edit source]

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FYI, the convention on Wikiversity is for lower-cased headings. For example, use:

==Cats and dogs==

rather than

==Cats and Dogs==

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 00:10, 22 October 2016 (UTC)

Few last minute suggestions[edit source]

You could provide some internal links to other wiki pages for words like depression to assist the research of others. Including images within the large paragraphs of text will help to break it up for the reader I have also made some very minor spelling/grammar edits which you are welcome to reverse. --Jessann95 (discusscontribs) 01:53, 23 October 2016 (UTC)

external link[edit source]

Hi there, I have added an external link to PANDSI (post- and antenatal depression support information). They are a great organisation. --JazNF (discusscontribs) 07:00, 23 October 2016 (UTC)


Chapter review and feedback

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Overall[edit source]

  1. For more feedback see [ these copyedits] and the comments below.
  2. Feel free to make ongoing changes to the chapter if you wish to address any of these comments or make other improvements.
  1. Overall, this is a basic, but sufficient chapter.
  2. Overall, this is a solid chapter which could be improved by .
  3. Overall, this is a strong chapter which incorporates a balanced, critical overview of relevant theory and research and makes effective use of the wiki environment.
  4. Overall, this is a fantastic chapter which makes effective use of the wiki environment and provides an integrated, indepth, but very readable synthesis of psychological theory and research on the topic.
  5. By my calculation, the chapter is over the maximum word count.

Theory[edit source]

  1. In the Overview, establish why the topic is important.
  2. The Overview establishes the importance of the topic.
  3. Engaging Overview - perhaps it could be improved by outlining the major theories/research - or stating the chapter's focus questions - or explaining what will be covered.
  4. Abbreviate the general theoretical material and provide references and links to further information. This would allow more space to apply the theories to the specific topic in more detail.
  5. Examples or case studies would be helpful.
  6. Several helpful examples or case studies were provided.
  7. The case study(ies) is(are) helpful.
  8. The Conclusion is weak; offers a succint summary and emphasise take-away messages that relate to the book theme.
  9. The Conclusion offers a succint summary and emphasises solutions.

Research[edit source]

  1. What is the prevalence of prenatal depression? (not stated in the chapter?)
  2. The Psychological Theories section considers some generic psychological treatment approaches, but doesn't explain any theory about why women may be particularly vulnerable to PD during pregnancy.
  3. Some statements are unreferenced (e.g., see the [factual?] tags)
  4. Why is massage therapy suggested as a key treatment for PD? (Explain). Is this treatment approach for depression particularly unique to PD - or common to different depressions?
  5. When describing important research studies, provide some indication of the nature of the method.
  6. When discussing important research findings, indicate the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship.

Written expression[edit source]

  1. Written expression
    1. Some clarification templates have been added to the page.
    2. Some sentences are overly long.
    3. Write for an international, not just an Australian, audience - e.g., review external links
    4. The chapter addresses the topic and book theme but lacks practical take-home messages.
  2. Structure and headings
    1. See earlier comments about heading casing
  3. Layout
    1. No images or tables were used.
  4. Integration with other chapters
    1. Some integration with other chapters is evident.
  5. Learning features
    1. Add Interwiki links (to relevant Wikipedia articles) to make the text more interactive.
    2. Quiz questions could be used to encourage reader engagement.
  6. Grammar and proofreading
    1. Check and correct the use of ownership apostrophes (e.g., individuals vs. individual's vs. individuals').
  7. APA style
    1. Put in-text citations in alphabetical order.
    2. The reference list is not in full APA style.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 02:40, 18 November 2016 (UTC)


Multimedia feedback

The accompanying multimedia presentation has been marked according to the marking criteria. Marks are available via the unit's Moodle site. Written feedback is provided below, plus see the general feedback page. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below. If you would like further clarification about the marking or feedback, contact the unit convener.

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Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this is a basic presentation.

Structure and content[edit source]

  1. Overview
    1. Use the Overview to set up the problem to be solved (the question i.e., the subtitle for the book chapter) - rather than just define terms.
    2. Tell the listener what they will find out about if they watch this presentation.
  2. Selection and organisation
    1. Why is Erikson's 6th stage selected as the best theory for understanding PD? (justify)
    2. What are the take-home messages from research about PD?
    3. Theory and research are not well integrated.
    4. Perhaps consider using more illustrative examples.
    5. Citations and references are included.
  3. Conclusion
    1. A Conclusion slide summarising the take-home messages / key points could be helpful.

Communication[edit source]

  1. Audio
    1. Audio is clear and well-paced.
    2. Consider using greater intonation to enhance engagement.[1]
  2. Video
    1. Visuals are clear and easy to read.
    2. The combination of images and text is effective.

Production quality[edit source]

  1. Meta-data
    1. Rename the title so that it includes the subtitle (and matches the book chapter).
    2. Fill out the description field (e.g., brief description of presentation, link back to the book chapter, license details, and possibly include references, image attributions, and/or transcript).
  2. Image and video recording quality
    1. Effective use of simple tools.
  3. Audio recording quality
    1. Quality is poor due to distortion and volume.
    2. Consider using an external microphone to improve audio recording quality.
  4. Licensing
    1. A copyright license for the presentation is shown.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 10:47, 19 November 2016 (UTC)