FYI, the convention on Wikiversity is for lower-cased headings. For example, use:
==Cats and dogs==
==Cats and Dogs==
-- Jtneill - 22:50, 21 October 2016 (UTC) Talk - c
This chapter could be improved by linking the first mention of key words to corresponding Wikipedia articles e.g., anxiety. -- Jtneill - 08:08, 23 October 2016 (UTC) Talk - c
, avoid having a single sub-section within a section; either add another sub-section or merge the content into the higher level section. -- User:Sebastian Kelly Jtneill - 21:53, 23 October 2016 (UTC) Talk - c
Overall, this is a basic, but sufficient chapter.
For more feedback see
these copyedits and the comments below. Feel free to make ongoing changes to the chapter if you wish to address any of these comments or make other improvements.
Theory coverage is basic - applying general/common motivational theories.
The Overview suggests application of a range of generic motivation theories to postpartum return to work - but isn't there any psychological theory or research work specifically in this area? (at least comment, if there isn't).
Maslow's hierarchy - hmmmm - returning to work, yes, might be part of putting bread on the table (lower-level need) - but mightn't it also be about fulfilling higher needs (e.g., for self-esteem, intellectual stimulation, connecting to a higher purpose etc.)? (This point in indicated more strongly, later on, but the theoretical connection isn't made)
Hormones - how does this relate to return to work motivation??
Research is described in basic terms.
Was the best research about this topic reviewed?
Some statements are unreferenced (e.g., see the
tags) The Reeve (2015) textbook is over-used as a citation; preferably consult and cite primary, peer-reviewed sources.
http://onlinelibrary.wiley.com/doi/10.1111/j.1465-7295.1999.tb01441.x/full When describing important research studies, provide some indication of the nature of the method.
When discussing important research findings, indicate the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship.
Written expression is problematic.
Write for an international, not just an Australian, audience - the chapter needs some significant rewriting to appropriately address a wider audience.
For academic writing in psychology, such as this book chapter,
write in third person rather than first (e.g., avoid "I', "we", "our") or second (e.g., "you", "your" etc.) person perspective. Some paragraphs are overly long. Paragraphs should communicate a single key idea in about three to five sentences.
Avoid one sentence paragraphs. A paragraph should typically consist of three to five sentences. Structure and headings
Avoid sections with only one sub-section. A section should have no sub-sections or at least two sub-sections.
Each section should start with at least one introductory paragraph before branching into sub-sections.
Add bullet-points for See also and External links.
Some images are used. Integration with other chapters
Some integration with other chapters is evident. Learning features
Some use of
interwiki links to relevant Wikipedia articles - more could be added. Quiz questions are used effectively to encourage reader engagement.
Address an international audience
Not covered in the chapter Spelling
Spelling could be improved - see the tags. Grammar and proofreading
The grammar of some sentences needs to be improved for the written expression to be of professional standard (e.g., see the
tags). Check and correct the use of
ownership apostrophes (e.g., individuals vs. individual's vs. individuals'). Check and correct the use of abbreviations (such as "e.g.," and "i.e.,"). APA style
Check and correct the use of
APA style for direct quotes. Check and correct the
APA style for how to report numbers (Numbers under 10 should be written in words (e.g., five); numbers 10 and over should be written in numbers (e.g., 10)). Use APA style for table and figure captions.
The APA style for the reference list is very good; remove issue numbers for paginated journals.
Jtneill - 04:07, 18 November 2016 (UTC) Talk - c
Overall, this is an excellent, creative all-round presentation.
Excellent Selection and organisation
Well selected content - not too much or too little.
Combines theory and research.
Addresses a self-help theme.
References are included. Conclusion
Take-home messages / key points are well summarised.
(Voice synthesised) audio is clear and well-paced.
Varied intonation and different voices add interest and engagement. Visuals
## The animated combination of images and text is effective in communicating the message and attracting and sustaining viewer attention.
The presentation was not made publically available. Otherwise, excellent.
The presentation was not made publically available.
Rename the title so that it includes the subtitle (and matches the book chapter).
Add a link to the book chapter.
URL would be en.wikiversity.org
Some inclusion of additional, relevant information in the description. Audio recording quality
Excellent Image/video recording quality
A copyright license for the presentation is correctly shown in at least one location. Creative Commons.
The copyright licenses and sources of the images used are not indicated.
Jtneill - 09:57, 23 November 2016 (UTC) Talk - c