Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2016/Political orientation and motivation

Citation style

Check/correct APA citation style e.g., (Duarte, Crawford, Stern, Haidt, Jussim and Tetlock, 2014.) -> (Duarte, Crawford, Stern, Haidt, Jussim, & Tetlock, 2014) -- Jtneill - Talk - c 22:46, 21 October 2016 (UTC)

Heading casing

FYI, the convention on Wikiversity is for lower-cased headings. For example, use: ==Cats and dogs== rather than ==Cats and Dogs== -- Jtneill - Talk - c 22:48, 21 October 2016 (UTC)

Comments

Hi I was having a read through your chapter and it looks great - my only suggestion to make it a little more visually appealing and interactive would be to inset another image or two or maybe even put in a case study? Just a suggestion, otherwise great job :)--Mckeak (discuss • contribs) 22:50, 22 October 2016 (UTC)

Wiki links

This chapter could be improved by linking the first mention of key words to corresponding Wikipedia articles e.g., anxiety. -- Jtneill - Talk - c 10:46, 23 October 2016 (UTC)

Chapter review and feedback

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Overall Overall, this is a well-developed chapter which could be improved by making greater use of the interactive potential of the wiki environment. The chapter could also be improved by being written so that it will "age" better - i.e., there is an overreliance on current political examples. For more feedback see these copyedits and the comments below. Theory The warning note in the Overview seems unnecessary, is not supported by citations/evidence, and potentially implies an author bias. At best, it seems to be a side-issue (not directly relevant to addressing the question). The chapter is theory-rich. The use of examples is helpful, but be careful not overly rely on a changing present political state - the chapter will hold up better over time if these are referred to as historical events. Research Several interesting/useful studies are cited. When describing important research studies, provide some indication of the nature of the method. When discussing important research findings, indicate the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship. Written expression Overall, the chapter is well-written. Referencing contemporary events is engaging, but limits the future usefulness of the chapter e.g. "now" won't mean the same thing in 10 years time - so strive for developing a description of the topic which will remain just as relevant in the future (there is nothing in the topic/question that is time-specific). This is where links to relevant articles e.g., Brexit could be particularly useful. Write in third person rather than first person (e.g., avoid "I', "we", "our", "your" etc.). There is considerable preamble type text that can be eliminated (e.g. see my copyedits) - also consider using an active rather than a passive voice. Avoid directional referencing (e.g., above, below, as previously mentioned). Avoid sections with only one paragraph. A section should have at least two paragraphs. Avoid one sentence paragraphs. A paragraph should typically consist of three to five sentences. Some clarification templates have been added to the page. Avoid colloquialisms e.g., "forever" is a long time - be careful. Layout See earlier comments about heading casing There is minimal use of images or tables - add APA style captions. Learning features Add Interwiki links (e.g., to relevant Wikipedia articles and other Wikiversity book chapters) to make the text more interactive. Quiz questions could be used to encourage reader engagement. Spelling Use Australian spelling (some general examples are hypothesize -> hypothesise; behavior -> behaviour). APA style Check/correct APA style for direct quotes. Check and correct the APA style formatting of in-text citations. Check and correct the APA style for how to report numbers (Numbers under 10 should be written in words (e.g., five); numbers 10 and over should be written in numbers (e.g., 10)). The reference list is not in full APA style.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 22:53, 10 November 2016 (UTC)

Multimedia feedback

The accompanying multimedia presentation has been marked according to the marking criteria. Marks are available via the unit's Moodle site. Written feedback is provided below, plus see the general feedback page. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below. If you would like further clarification about the marking or feedback, contact the unit convener.

Overall Overall, this is a basic, but sufficient presentation. Structure and content Overview Too brief Use the Overview to set up the problem to be solved (the question i.e., the subtitle for the book chapter). Tell the listener what they will find out about if they watch this presentation. Selection and organisation Too much content is presented - be more selective - e.g., work backwards from 3 take-home messages to work out what content needs to be presented - and then focus on only that which is essential to conveying these messages. Get more quickly to the heart of the matter - motivations Theory was pretty well covered, but be more selective, summarise, and synthesise in relation to the question - What motivates people to support conservative or liberal ideology? No coverage of research. Research was well covered. Include citations and references. Conclusion None provided. A Conclusion slide summarising the take-home messages / key points could be helpful. Communication Audio Audio narration is well-paced. Some words could be more clearly pronounced. Consider using greater intonation to enhance engagement.[1] Visuals The text based visuals are clear and easy to read. Consider including more images, figures, and/or tables. Production quality Overall, basic production. Meta-data Rename the title so that it includes the subtitle (and matches the book chapter). Link to chapter provided. Fill out the description field (e.g., brief description of presentation, license details, and possibly include references, image attributions, and/or transcript). Audio recording quality Poor due to white noise. Consider using an external microphone to improve audio recording quality. Image/video recording quality Effective use of simple tools. Licensing A copyright license for the presentation is not indicated (i.e., in the meta-data or the visual presentation).

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 02:33, 22 November 2016 (UTC)