Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2016/Parkinson's disease treatment motivation

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Hi - I think the medications used in Parkinson's disease (levodopa/carbidopa) that you mentioned are usually taken up to five times a day in most people. Do you think this need to regularly take medications could affect people's quality of life and adherence to treatment? --U3100675 (discuss • contribs) 08:49, 14 October 2016 (UTC)

FYI, the convention on Wikiversity is for lower-cased headings. For example, use: ==Cats and dogs== rather than ==Cats and Dogs== -- Jtneill - Talk - c 08:59, 14 September 2016 (UTC)

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Hi, your book chapter is great! I especially like the use of coloured templates to break it up and seem more inviting. Also, your video multimedia of the tremors example is an excellent way to portray what they are really like in affected patients. Good luck! U3115468 (discuss • contribs) 22:43, 14 October 2016 (UTC)

Hi there! I noticed that in your reference list you have Kalat (2016), while in-text you have Kalat (2014). Also, you haven't included the location and publisher information for this in the reference list. I'm not sure if you need to reference the chapter within the textbook as it is not written by a separate author. I hope this makes sense. I've also made a few minor edits to your reference list: I added the doi for the article "Parkinson’s disease: clinical features and diagnosis"; I italicised the journal name and volume number for the article "Drug adherence in Parkinson's disease"; and I fixed a typo (changed Newyork to New York). Your chapter looks really great by the way; I like how you have highlighted key terms by bolding them, and also how you have broken up the text with lots of colourful boxes and images. --U3100368 (discuss • contribs) 13:10, 16 October 2016 (UTC)

Hi. Great chapter, very well thought out and interesting to read. I made a small spelling correction to your YouTube link (i.e. changed Pakinson's to Parkinson's). Also, there are some good quotes on Parkinson's that you might want to include in your chapter, maybe before the overview to grab attention. http://www.brainyquote.com/quotes/keywords/parkinson.html U109993 (discuss • contribs) 20:22, 20 October 2016 (UTC)

Wiki links

Check use of wiki links for the first time key terms are used - e.g., I had a quick look, but didn't see links to the Wikipedia articles about PD and dopamine on first use of these key terms. -- Jtneill - Talk - c 21:06, 21 October 2016 (UTC)

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Overall Overall, this is a strong chapter which provides a clear description of PD treatment with an emphasis on strategies to enhance self-efficacy and hope, although I'm not quite sure whether the question "How does motivation to decrease PD symptomatology affect the efficacy of treatment?" is actually answered. The questions are answered are what is PD, how is PD treated, and what can be done to enhance the general self-efficacy and hope of people with PD. Key to any piece of academic work is close correspondence between the title/purpose and content. The chapter is over the maximum word-count. These copyedits bring the chapter within word count by using simpler language. Feel free to make ongoing changes to the chapter if you wish to address any of these comments or make other improvements. Theory The Overview and Conclusion are reasonably clear, but the general comment about the correspondence between the topic and content would also particularly apply to these sections. A good understanding PD and its treatment is demonstrated. A reasonable understanding of motivational theory in the context of PD is also evident. The case study is helpful - perhaps break it up and include in key sections e.g,. diagnosis, treatment, outcome. Several helpful examples or case studies were provided. Research A good range of relevant research was cited, but there appears to be a lack of literature specifically specifically about the topic (i.e., the subtitle); if so, this should be pointed out more clearly and a more critical approach to the research literature should be communicated. When describing important research studies, provide some indication of the nature of the method. When discussing important research findings, indicate the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship. Was the Dempsey (1951) source directly consulted? If not, don't cite it (or use a secondary citation). Written expression In general, the chapter is well-written although the simplicity of written expression could be improved in many places. Write in third person rather than first person (e.g., avoid "I', "we", "our", "your" etc.). Some clarification templates have been added to the page. Structure and headings The chapter is well-structured. Layout Tables and/or Figures are used effectively. Learning features Excellent use of interwiki links to other book chapters and to relevant Wikipedia articles. Quiz questions could be used to encourage reader engagement. Spelling Proofreading for typos could be improved. Grammar and proofreading Check and correct the use of ownership apostrophes (e.g., individuals vs. individual's vs. individuals'). The grammar of some sentences could be improved (e.g., see the tags and copyedits). APA style The reference list is not in full APA style.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 05:19, 14 November 2016 (UTC)

Multimedia feedback

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Overall Overall, this is a basic, but sufficient presentation. Structure and content Overview 20 second Overview, but doesn't quite nail a simple, key message about the problem for the viewer. Perhaps an example could help? Use the Overview to set up the problem to be solved (the question i.e., the subtitle for the book chapter). Tell the listener what they will find out about if they watch this presentation. Selection and organisation PD is defined and described (45 seconds) - this could be abbreviated in order to concentrate more on addressing the topic/question Consider adding a slide about motivation and PD Add slide for Mastery program Include key citations. Conclusion Key points are well summarised in audio, but add visuals for key points. Communication Audio Reasonably well articulated and paced. Present in the third person (i.e., avoid "I", "my", "we" etc.) because the presentation should be about the topic, not the presenter. Consider using greater intonation to enhance engagement.[1] Image/Video Basic screencast of Prezi slides Consider increasing font size to make text easier to read. Consider including more images, figures, and/or tables. Production quality Overall, reasonably good production. Meta-data Well titled. Reasonably good use of Description field to provide relevant additional information. Audio recording quality Somewhat sub-par due to distortion - the microphone may be too close? Image/video recording quality Effective use of simple tools. Licensing A copyright license for the presentation is correctly shown in at least one location. Creative Commons. The copyright licenses and sources of the images are indicated.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 04:12, 21 November 2016 (UTC)