Latest comment: 7 years ago1 comment1 person in discussion
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Overall, this is a reasonably informative chapter which could be improved by abbreviating the theoretical background about empathy and MDMA as separate constructs, and expanding the theory and research about the effect of MDMA on empathy.
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Abbreviate the general theoretical material about empathy and MDMA and provide references and links to further information. This will allow more space to apply the theories to the specific topic (MDMA+empathy which currently gets ~750 words) in more detail.
Examples or case studies would be helpful.
Expand critical aspect of theory review.
Well integrated with discussion of research.
Conclusion is missing.
Offer a succint summary and emphasise take-away messages that relate to the book theme.
Provide some concrete, take-home messages.
Could be improved by providing take-home self-help message which address the chapter's focus questions.
Latest comment: 7 years ago1 comment1 person in discussion
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Use the Overview to set up the problem to be solved (the question i.e., the subtitle for the book chapter).
Selection and organisation
Probably too much content is presented - be more selective - e.g., work backwards from 3 take-home messages to work out what content needs to be presented - and then focus on only that which is essential to conveying these messages.
Theory rich; research poor.
Somewhat addresses a self-help theme.
Include citations.
Conclusion
Too brief/general - drill down to some practical, take-away messages.
The title of the presentation differs from the book chapter - rename/retitle the presentation so that it includes the same title and subtitle as the book chapter.
Description field used effectively.
Audio recording quality
Medium low due to distortion - review microphone set-up.
Image/video recording quality
Good, clear
Licensing
A copyright license for the presentation is correctly shown in at least one location. Creative Commons.
The copyright licenses and sources of the images used are not indicated.