Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2016/Laughter yoga and emotion

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Comments[edit]

Hey! I love this chapter - so interesting, do you do yoga yourself?

I would like to make a small recommendation; under the sub-heading 'what is laughter' you describe 'five types of laughter' in quite a long sentence, maybe consider using dot points here? --Sebastian Kelly (discusscontribs) 02:11, 20 October 2016 (UTC)

Heading style[edit]

Use default heading styles - remove bold etc. -- Jtneill - Talk - c 23:56, 21 October 2016 (UTC)

Structure[edit]

Avoid having a single sub-section within a section; either add another sub-section or merge the content into the higher level section. -- Jtneill - Talk - c 23:56, 21 October 2016 (UTC)

Feedback[edit]

APA standard is that numbers over 10 are written numerically. I would also suggest adding some images, tables, or putting content into coloured boxes to break up the text, as it is quite hard to look at for a long time.

--Cora.boyle (discusscontribs) 02:00, 23 October 2016 (UTC)

Last minute feedback[edit]

--Jessann95 (discusscontribs) 06:17, 23 October 2016 (UTC) I have added a link to another wiki that is relevant, plus made some minor spelling and grammar changes. I also suggest that you put some of the text into coloured boxes. I have provided a template below


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Past due feedback[edit]

Apologies for late feedback (have extension so running behind) - for future reference I found this chapter really interesting and informative. Definitely carrying the desired theme of the book to enhance people's lives through understanding of motivation and emotion. I can see that you took the earlier advice provided to you on board and I think that it has served you well. The dot points make for much easier reading. Great work! --U944295 (discusscontribs) 13:39, 3 November 2016 (UTC)


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Overall[edit]

  1. Overall, this is a solid all-round chapter which provides an accessible explanation of laughter yoga and its potential emotional mechanisms and benefits.
  2. For more feedback see these copyedits and the comments below.
  3. Feel free to make ongoing changes to the chapter if you wish to address any of these comments or make other improvements.

Theory[edit]

  1. Perhaps it would be helpful to provide a more detailed explanation of a laughter yoga session.
  2. Breadth of theoretical coverage is impressive. As accompanying research is in its early stages, the chapter is appropriately speculative about the relevance of these theoretical perspectives.
  3. Addition of case studies or additional examples could be helpful e.g, a practical laughter yoga exercise that a reader could try.

Research[edit]

  1. The Reeve (2015) textbook is over-used as a citation; preferably consult and cite primary, peer-reviewed sources.
  2. Several very useful/relevant research studies are described. They tend to be described one after the other. To improve the review of research, look for patterns and themes and try to synthesise the findings in order to convey a greater depth of understanding.
  3. Some statements were unreferenced (e.g., see the [factual?] tags)
  4. When discussing important research findings, indicate the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship.

Written expression[edit]

  1. The written expression is generally clear, understandable, and well-cited.
    1. Avoid one sentence paragraphs. A paragraph should typically consist of three to five sentences.
    2. Avoid directional referencing (e.g., above, below, as previously mentioned).
    3. The quality of written expression could be improved in some places (e.g., see where clarification templates such as [Rewrite to improve clarity], [explain?], [say what?], and [vague] may have been added to the page).
  2. Structure and headings
    1. Avoid sections with only one sub-section. A section should have no sub-sections or at least two sub-sections.
    2. The chapter is well-structured.
  3. Layout
    1. Add bullet-points for External links.
    2. Some images are used, but the chapter could be improved by adding more images.
    3. Tables and/or Figures are used effectively.
  4. Integration with other chapters
    1. Add interwiki links links to a wider range of other relevant chapters.
  5. Learning features
    1. Add Interwiki links (to relevant Wikipedia articles) to make the text more interactive.
    2. Quiz questions are used effectively to encourage reader engagement.
  6. Grammar and proofreading
    1. Check and correct the use of ownership apostrophes (e.g., individuals vs. individual's vs. individuals').
  7. APA style
    1. The APA style for the reference list is very good; remove issue numbers for paginated journals.
    2. Check and correct the APA style formatting of in-text citations.
    3. Check and correct the APA style for how to report numbers (Numbers under 10 should be written in words (e.g., five); numbers 10 and over should be written in numbers (e.g., 10)).

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 10:45, 11 November 2016 (UTC)


Multimedia feedback

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Overall[edit]

  1. Overall, this is a very well prepared and executed presentation.

Structure and content[edit]

  1. Overview
    1. Sets up and establishes the problem and its importance in a clear and understandable way.
  2. Selection and organisation
    1. Well structured and selected content.
    2. Citations and references are included.
  3. Conclusion
    1. Take-home messages / key points are well summarised.

Communication[edit]

  1. Audio
    1. Audio is clear and well-paced.
    2. Consider using greater intonation to enhance engagement.[1]
  2. Image/Video
    1. Visuals are clear, simple, and easy to read.
    2. The combination of images and text is effective.

Production quality[edit]

  1. Overall, well produced using simple tools.
  2. Meta-data
    1. Well titled.
    2. Link to chapter provided.
    3. Excellent use of the Description field to provide relevant information.
  3. Audio recording quality
    1. Sufficient
  4. Image/video recording quality
    1. Effective use of simple tools.
  5. Licensing
    1. A copyright license for the presentation is correctly shown in at least one location. Creative Commons.
    2. The copyright licenses and sources of the images are indicated.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 23:18, 21 November 2016 (UTC)