Hey, read your chapter and did a little bit of grammar corrections. I also changed the casing on your headings since the convention on Wikiversity is for lower-cased headings. Looks interesting so far, keep going :) - u3119387 8/10/16
I just thought I might mention that in Cloninger's biosocial theory of personality. ‘Reward dependence’ is a temperament that has a huge impact on social dependency and whether an individual is inclined to share intimately. The higher the reward dependence the warmer and more socially inclined the individual is. low reward dependence can lead to isolation and not sharing of intimate emotions etc. it might not be helpful but i though it was worth mentioning :) --U3080948 (discuss • contribs) 05:36, 18 October 2016 (UTC)
I read through your book chapter and absolutely loved the content!! the only thing was that there is a lot of info and something visual to break that up could maybe be an option for you. Good luck!!--Lizzy94 (discuss • contribs) 10:53, 26 October 2016 (UTC)U3083568 (discuss • contribs) 05:36, 18 October 2016 (UTC)
Overall, this is a basic, but sufficient chapter which could be improved by providing less general background about motivation, a more detailed review of research, and editing to improve grammar and written expression.
Abbreviate the general theoretical material about I-E motivation and SDT. Provide references and links to further information. This would allow more space to apply the theories to the specific topic in more detail.
Little connection is made between the generic theoretical conceptualisation of motivation and the more specific consideration of intimacy motivation.
Problematic aspects of intimacy motivation are not particularly well described e.g., consider linking to other chapters about sexual deviance.
Addition of case studies or additional examples could be helpful.
Use the Overview to set up the problem to be solved (the question i.e., the subtitle for the book chapter).
No need to refer to book chapter - focus on the problem to to be solved - this should be a stand alone presentation, with link(s) available to the chapter for more info
Consider using an example to engage viewer interest
Selection and organisation
Probably too much content is presented (feels a bit rushed) - be more selective - e.g., work backwards from 3 take-home messages to work out what content needs to be presented - and then focus on only that which is essential to conveying these messages.
Theory was (too?) well covered.
Basic coverage of research.
Perhaps consider using more illustrative examples.
Too general - try to drill down to some practical, take-away messages.