Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2016/Immunisation motivation in childhood

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Hi, I found a great article titled: "Chinese immigrant parents' vaccination decision making for children: a qualitative analysis" online on EBSCOhost (which is available through the university library page). I think it will be very helpful for you as it covers a lot of the subheadings you have proposed for your book chapter. It explores the motivation behind parents vaccination decisions for their children. The study found 5 major factors impacted on this decision making process which included: institutional factors, insufficient knowledge/ advice, affective impacts on motivation, vaccination barriers and social influences. I noticed under your "what motivates parents to immunise their children" you had a title about family members and friends and I think the parts of the article regarding social influences would help you cover this area. Perhaps you could also put a title under "what motivates parents to not immunise their children" about the social influences as well and explore it from both sides. You could also use the impact of insufficient knowledge and advice as another sub heading under "what motivates parents to not immunize their children"--LeoDean1993 (discusscontribs) 11:00, 24 September 2016 (UTC)--LeoDean1993 (discusscontribs) 11:00, 24 September 2016 (UTC) I hope you find this article helpful! this is the web address for it: http://web.b.ebscohost.com.ezproxy.canberra.edu.au/ehost/detail/detail?vid=4&sid=35b2e4de-a1db-4464-ab32-ceb899b2d1ab%40sessionmgr102&hid=123&bdata=#AN=94500029&db=a9h however, a quick search of the article title should lead you to it! All the best!![reply]

Hi, I have found the government website for the Immunise Australia Program. It describes what immunisation is and how it protects children and the wider community. It also has information including FAQ's about immunising, immunisation myths, and reports about adverse events following immunisation. I jope it helps, and sine it's a government website, it should be a useful resource to include. Here's the link: http://immunise.health.gov.au/internet/immunise/publishing.nsf/Content/why-immunise Good Luck!--U3083662 (discusscontribs) 07:53, 28 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Hey, so you may decide not to use this but I saw this a while back and thought it might be interesting to include/add to external links. It's a news article about a mother who didn't vaccinate her children until they all got sick with Rotavirus (a vaccine preventable disease). It explains how before she had her kids she researched information that agreed with her initial thoughts against vaccines which fuelled her bias, and then later did a wider search that included the benefits (after her family got sick). http://www.huffingtonpost.com.au/entry/anti-vaxxer-mom-changes-mind_us_57e994bde4b0c2407cd8bdc5 --CeeJay95 (discusscontribs) 00:50, 5 October 2016 (UTC)[reply]

References[edit source]

Hi there,

I was just reading your page and it looks pretty good so far. Although, I've noticed that you haven't referenced for the majority of your work. You are probably all over this, but one of the components in the marking rubric is to reference using the top dozen or so peer reviewed journal articles, which constitutes 20% of your assignment grade.

I hope you don't mind, but I've got you started with an APA hanging template and created a reference heading section.

Cheers, --Muzz2016 (discusscontribs) 02:20, 6 October 2016 (UTC)[reply]

APA guidelines[edit source]

Hey, I've just made two edits in regards to numbers in your chapter. If you start a sentence with a number, according to APA you need to write it out, also any number under 12 needs to be written out as a word. I think the numbers you have in brackets should be fine though, but I would check just in case. --JazNF (discusscontribs) 05:10, 12 October 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Hey, thoroughly enjoyed reading your chapter thus far.. I shared an article that talks about the Information—Motivation—Behavioral Skills (IMB) model framework, as it relates to vaccination. I thought it might be of benefit to you. Good luck with the rest of your chapter. http://www.sciencedirect.com/science/article/pii/S0264410X12008833--U3090066 (discusscontribs) 08:26, 17 October 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Last minute feedback[edit source]

Hi, Your chapter looks great but James pointed out to me that there shouldn't be more than 1 or 2 subheadings under a Heading and that considering merging them is best. Also I think it would be good for you to include case studies relevant to immunisation motivation, you could use this box template: (make sure your in source editing not visual)

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--Jessann95 (discusscontribs) 06:46, 23 October 2016 (UTC)[reply]


Chapter review and feedback

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Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this is a fantastic chapter which makes effective use of the wiki environment and provides an integrated, indepth, but very readable synthesis of psychological theory and research on the topic.
  2. For more feedback see these copyedits and the comments below.

Theory[edit source]

  1. The Overview clearly establishes the importance of the topic and makes it easy to understand, although more perhaps could be said about motivation.
  2. The Conclusion offers a succint summary and emphasises practical solutions.
  3. Addition of case studies was helpful - perhaps add which immunisation would have prevented the virus.
  4. Perhaps draw a distinction between recommended and optional immunisations.

Research[edit source]

  1. Some statements were unreferenced (e.g., see the [factual?] tags)
  2. An appropriate range of relevant studies are described.
  3. When describing important research studies, provide some indication of the nature of the method.
  4. When discussing important research findings, indicate the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship.

Written expression[edit source]

  1. Written expression is generally very good.
    1. Avoid one sentence paragraphs. A paragraph should typically consist of three to five sentences.
  2. Layout
    1. The chapter is well-structured.
    2. Tables and/or Figures are used effectively.
  3. Learning features
    1. The chapter makes excellent use of interwiki links to other book chapters and to relevant Wikipedia articles.
    2. Quiz questions could be used to encourage reader engagement.
  4. Spelling, grammar, and proofreading are excellent.
  5. APA style
    1. The reference list is not in full APA style.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 04:32, 11 November 2016 (UTC)[reply]


Multimedia feedback

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Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this is a basic, but sufficient presentation.

Structure and content[edit source]

  1. Overview
    1. Use the Overview to set up the problem to be solved (the question i.e., the subtitle for the book chapter).
    2. Tell the listener what they will find out about if they watch this presentation.
  2. Selection and organisation
    1. Theory was well covered.
    2. Research was well covered.
    3. Perhaps consider using more illustrative examples.
    4. Citations and references are included.
  3. Conclusion
    1. Brief
    2. Summarise/synthesise - what actions can be taken to boost motivation for vaccination?

Communication[edit source]

  1. Audio
    1. Audio is clear and well-paced.
    2. Audio could be improved by being a little more conversational (sounds like a script is being read aloud).
  2. Image/Video
    1. Basic use of slides and text.
    2. Consider using more diagrams, tables, and/or images to help communicate ideas visually.

Production quality[edit source]

  1. Overall, basic production.
  2. Meta-data
    1. Well titled.
    2. Link to chapter provided.
    3. Minimal use of the Description field. (e.g., brief description of presentation, license details, and possibly include references, image attributions, and/or transcript).
  3. Audio recording quality
    1. Good
  4. Image/video recording quality
    1. Effective use of simple tools.
  5. Licensing
    1. A copyright license for the presentation is not indicated (i.e., in the meta-data or the visual presentation).

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 00:56, 22 November 2016 (UTC)[reply]