Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2016/Illicit drug taking at music festivals

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Hi, James made a change and suggestion on my book chapter references under the See Also section, which included to provide the note that it is a book chapter. Here's the link should you wish to make the change to your two links. https://en.wikiversity.org/w/index.php?title=Motivation_and_emotion/Book/2016/Bullying_and_social_needs&action=edit&section=16 U109993 (discusscontribs) 21:09, 21 October 2016 (UTC)

Hi, your chapter is coming along great, relevent and controversial issue, love it. I see others have commented and im sure you have some info together already but here is a link to a cross-sectional study of 1365 young people’s health behaviours conducted at a music festival in Melbourne http://dx.doi.org/10.1155/2014/357239. Hope it helps, good luck. Regards u3094046 --B Laurie (discusscontribs) 06:23, 18 October 2016 (UTC)

HI Just wanted to say so far your book chapter is looking great! The use of text box/case studies makes your theories super easy to understand and they are very relevant and applicable --Mckeak (discusscontribs) 22:49, 22 October 2016 (UTC)


Hi, I did a quick search and found an interesting notion that you may want to consider making a heading in your book chapter - its called pill-testing, and its a service that is used in some countries in Europe, and might be used here, where youth wanting to take drugs at, say a music festival, can have those pills tested there in a special booth or venue, to see if there's any harmful substances in them. It sounds like an interesting idea. I have the links here, for two articles, one from the ABC, talking about Groovin the Moo (our UC music festival), and another about whether pill-testing should be allowed in Australia. I think you'll find them informative :)

http://theconversation.com/six-reasons-australia-should-pilot-pill-testing-party-drugs-34073

http://www.abc.net.au/triplej/programs/hack/drug-experts-to-offer-pill-testing-at-a-canberra-music-festival/7799696 --U3083662 (discusscontribs) 03:32, 23 September 2016 (UTC)

Hi, I am doing a similar topic on performance enhancing drug use. I found evidence of the 'false consensus effect' that influences individuals motivation to use drugs. Basically it means the tendency for people to believe more people are have the same beliefs and behaviours as you than they actually do. I did a quick search and found an article that mentions the false consensus effect in relation to your topic. Could be interesting to consider :) Link here: http://www.ncbi.nlm.nih.gov/pubmed/10998955 U3115468 (discusscontribs) 06:31, 27 September 2016 (UTC)



Hi Hannah - I know you mentioned that you were struggling to find information on the motivation of drug taking. Here is a link to an article I found that discusses the physiological effects drug taking has which in turn motivate further drug use. Perhaps at music festivals more dopamine is released and illicit drugs could further motivate individuals experience the "pleasure principle". Hopefully it helps :)

https://deepblue.lib.umich.edu/bitstream/handle/2027.42/75373/j.1360-0443.95.8s2.19.x.pdf?sequence=1&isAllowed=y --U3096943 (discusscontribs) 10:02, 28 September 2016 (UTC)

Hi, I think this is a really interesting topic and am looking forward to reading your chapter at the end! It's really applicable to modern society as so many young people are, as you have said in your text, "casual drug users". I found this article from the UK http://www.internetjournalofcriminology.com/Parkin_Normalisation_of_Recreational_Drug_Use_IJC_May_2015.pdf . It could be interesting to compare prevalence in young British people, especially because their festivals are arguably more drug induced than ours! --U3083764 (discusscontribs) 01:34, 30 September 2016 (UTC)

Journal articles[edit]

Hi Hannah, Here's a reference to drug using at music festivals in Australia. Thought it may help.

They're all available through the UC library.

Cheers,--Muzz2016 (discusscontribs) 07:50, 2 October 2016 (UTC)

interesting article[edit]

what an interesting topic you have! I have found a great article you could use for your chapter tilted: Normalisation of recreational drug use among young people: Evidence about accessibility, use and contact with other drug users. it can be accessed through the university library website using EBSCOhost. Have a look at the framework of normalization on page 165, I think it would be a good concept to include in your chapter. http://web.b.ebscohost.com.ezproxy.canberra.edu.au/ehost/detail/detail?vid=7&sid=8c1a00bf-db61-454c-8c67-100c37e09569%40sessionmgr1&bdata=#AN=52118004&db=a9h All the best --LeoDean1993 (discusscontribs) 10:21, 2 October 2016 (UTC)

Good progress[edit]

Your article is going very well, I like the use of the boxes to highlight case links and the like. To help out, I have made some very minor spelling and grammar corrections and have proofread the first few paragraphs, I will finish proofreading again for you later if you like :) --Jessann95 (discusscontribs) 04:17, 19 October 2016 (UTC)

--Jazznicol (discusscontribs) 05:43, 19 October 2016 (UTC)==Coming along great== Hi! Your chapter is looking really good and I like your structure and how it has been spread out with case studies and pictures. A few little things that I notices, but didn't wait to change without your permission: 1) I wasn't sure about the centreing for the text in Sarah's Story. This might be more of a personal preference for me, but I thought it looked a little off the way it currently is 2) The second sentence under the heading "False Consensus Effect" didn't make sense, so you might want to look over that one. Hope that helps, and keep up the good work!


Hi, just found an video talking about young people in Britain struggling with illicit drugs. You might be interested in checking it out.https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=HqJiaOlggS0--U3121927 (discusscontribs) 09:07, 19 October 2016 (UTC)

Structure[edit]

Avoid sections with a single sub-section - either add at least one more sub-section or merge the content into the higher section. -- Jtneill - Talk - c 21:18, 21 October 2016 (UTC)


Hey, Interesting article, I particularly enjoyed the case study sections :) I corrected a few minor spelling and grammatical errors, best of luck with finishing off the chapter. --U3090066 (discusscontribs) 03:08, 22 October 2016 (UTC)

Hey, I was just looking over your reference list and noticed you included the "retrieved from" section for when you referenced a website. I don't think this is a part of APA anymore so you do not need to include this. Hope this was helpful!--Jbboys (discusscontribs) 11:24, 22 October 2016 (UTC)

Reformatted Normalisation thesis section[edit]

Hey,

I've edited your normalisation thesis section. I've reorganised the picture and put some spaces between the numbered points and the next paragraph, which gives it better a better visual flow.

I also noticed that some of your images (I didn't check all of them) aren't linked to the content. e.g., sentence x blah blah blah explains y.

To get maximum millage out of your images, use some image linkages between text and the the image e.g., (see Figure 4. etc.). In turn this draws captivates the readers attention and links the images to the chapter. In my opinion it adds an extra layer of depth to your chapter.

Hope you like it, however, if you don't you can change it through the view history, undo button.

Cheers, --Muzz2016 (discusscontribs) 03:49, 23 October 2016 (UTC)


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Overall[edit]

  1. Overall, this is a fantastic chapter which makes effective use of the wiki environment and provides an integrated, indepth, balanced, and very readable synthesis of psychological theory and research on the topic.
  2. For more feedback see these copyedits and the comments below.

Theory[edit]

  1. Theory is extremely well covered in terms of breadth, depth, integration with research and examples, and critical appraisal.
  2. The integrated use of the case study is excellent.

Research[edit]

  1. Research is well considered and described, and a critical, balanced interpretation is evidence.

Written expression[edit]

  1. Written expression
    1. Write for an international, not just an Australian, audience.
    2. The Overview and Conclusion are clear and well-written.
  2. Layout
    1. Avoid sections with only one sub-section. A section should have no sub-sections or at least two sub-sections.
    2. The chapter is well-structured.
    3. Tables and/or Figures are used effectively.
  3. Learning features
    1. The chapter makes good use of interwiki links. Also provide interwiki links for the first mention of drug names.
  4. Spelling, grammar, and proofreading are excellent.
  5. APA style
    1. The reference list is not in full APA style.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 00:01, 10 November 2016 (UTC)


Multimedia feedback

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Overall[edit]

  1. Overall, this is an excellent all-round presentation.

Structure and content[edit]

  1. Overview
    1. Include title and sub-title on opening slide
    2. Sets up the problem to be solved.
    3. Useful, but a bit too brief - mention the theories that will be covered i.e., tell the listener what they will find out about if they watch this presentation.
  2. Selection and organisation
    1. Very well selected content - not too much or too little.
    2. Well structured.
    3. Addresses a self-help theme.
    4. Theory was (too) well covered - less detail about these theories would allow more consideration of research, examples, and take-home messages.
    5. Basic coverage of research.
    6. Perhaps consider using more illustrative examples.
  3. Conclusion
    1. None provided.
    2. A Conclusion slide summarising the take-home messages / key points could be helpful.

Communication[edit]

  1. Audio
    1. Narration is very well-paced, with good intonation.
  2. Visuals
    1. Move cursor off screen
    2. Basic and text and image slides, with some useful organisation into diagrams.
    3. Increase font size to make text easier to read; reduce the amount of text.

Production quality[edit]

  1. Overall, basic, effective production.
  2. Meta-data
    1. Rename the titles so that they include the title and subtitle (and match the book chapter).
    2. Link to the book chapter provided.
    3. Minimal but sufficient use of the Description field.
  3. Audio recording quality
    1. Excellent
  4. Image/video recording quality
    1. Effective use of simple tools.
  5. Licensing
    1. A copyright license for the presentation is correctly shown in at least one location. Creative Commons.
    2. The copyright licenses and sources of the images are indicated.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 06:10, 22 November 2016 (UTC)