Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2016/False physiological feedback and emotional appraisal

Comments

Your use of example scenarios is a nice touch and helps to further understand the points you have made. I think including a few more theories is important to explain your topic with further empirical evidence. Also adding a topic is helpful because it is a little hard to determine what exactly your are focusing on. Good luck with the rest of your book chapter it is an interesting topic. U3115468 (discuss • contribs) 01:37, 5 October 2016 (UTC)

With your two examples for false physiological feedback and emotional appraisal, perhaps put them in two columns and coloured text boxes (side by side). I think it would break your page up a bit and as they are examples, not just theories, would draw attention to them. Here's a link so you know what I mean. :) Otherwise looks like a great start, good luck! https://en.wikiversity.org/wiki/User:Jtneill/Sandbox/Tables_and_boxes --U3083764 (discuss • contribs) 01:29, 6 October 2016 (UTC)

Interesting topic and it seems you are definitely on the right track. I noticed that the majority of your references are quite historical, I attached a link to a more recent JA that I found interesting https://www.ncbi.nlm.nih.gov/pmc/articles/PMC1890305/ Hope it helps :)--U3090066 (discuss • contribs) 20:32, 8 October 2016 (UTC)

Hello, thanks for your suggestion about using Arnold Lazarus theories on my page [Blushing and emotion] I found a few articles for you to search that could assist you in biofeedback (full text versions on uni library website)
• A cognitively oriented psychologist looks at biofeedback
• Biofeedback-based training for stress management in daily hassles: an intervention study.
This website also has some interesting points that might assist you in directing your research https://www.addiction.com/a-z/multimodal-therapy/ they listed a reference Corey, Gerald. Theory and Practice of Counseling and Psychotherapy. 6th ed. Belmont, CA.: Wadsworth/Thomson Learning, 2001. --Audrey O'Mara (discuss • contribs) 02:47, 21 October 2016 (UTC)

Heading casing

FYI, the convention on Wikiversity is for lower-cased headings. For example, use: ==Cats and dogs== rather than ==Cats and Dogs== -- Jtneill - Talk - c 02:09, 5 October 2016 (UTC)

Structure

Avoid having a single sub-section within a section; either add another sub-section or merge the content into the higher level section. -- Jtneill - Talk - c 23:52, 21 October 2016 (UTC)

Chapter review and feedback

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Overall Overall, this is a reasonably good chapter. For more feedback, see these copyedits and the comments below. Feel free to make ongoing changes to the chapter if you wish to address any of these comments or make other improvements. Theory Expand the Overview (e.g., make sure to include all key words, consider a case study/example and possibly establish focus questions) and Conclusion sections. Abbreviate the evolutionary and appraisal theoretical material and provide references and links to further information. This would allow more space to directly address the chapter topic - the chapter's answer to the central question really starts with Example 1. Some useful examples are provided; additional case studies or examples could be helpful. Research Only a small number of relevant research studies are cited. Was the Darwin (1872) source directly consulted? If not, don't cite it (or use a secondary citation). When discussing important research findings, indicate the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship. Written expression Written expression Write in third person rather than first person (e.g., avoid "I', "we", "our", "your" etc.). Some paragraphs are overly long. Each paragraph should communicate one key idea in three to five sentences. Avoid directional referencing (e.g., above, below, as previously mentioned). The chapter successfully addresses the topic and book theme. Structure and headings Avoid sections with only one sub-section. A section should have no sub-sections or at least two sub-sections. Layout Some images are used, but the chapter could be improved by adding more images. Integration with other chapters Add interwiki links links to a wider range of other relevant chapters. Learning features Add Interwiki links (to relevant Wikipedia articles) to make the text more interactive. Quiz questions are used effectively to encourage reader engagement. Grammar and proofreading Use abbreviations such as "e.g." inside brackets and "for example" outside brackets. Check and correct the use of abbreviations (such as "e.g.," and "i.e.,"). APA style subjects -> participants The reference list is not in full APA style.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 12:37, 12 November 2016 (UTC)

Multimedia feedback

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Overall Overall, this is a basic, but sufficient presentation. Structure and content Overview Use the Overview to set up the problem to be solved (the question i.e., the subtitle for the book chapter). Tell the listener what they will find out about if they watch this presentation. Selection and organisation Basic coverage of terminology. Very basic consideration of false physiological feedback - barely connected with appraisal. Excellent Example 1. I didn't understand Example 2 - needs explanation. No research review. Conclusion A Conclusion slide summarising the take-home messages / key points could be helpful. Communication Audio Present in the third person (i.e., avoid "I", "my", "we" etc.) because the presentation should be about the topic, not the presenter. Audio is clear and well-paced. Image/Video Text-dense presentation (except for the examples) Text is difficult to read because of italics and small font (or not zoomed in far enough). Creative use of examples. Production quality Overall, basic production. Meta-data Rename the title so that it includes the subtitle (and matches the book chapter). Link to chapter provided towards end of presentation; also include link in the description field. Fill out the description field (e.g., brief description of presentation, link back to the book chapter, license details, and possibly include references, image attributions, and/or transcript). Audio recording quality Good Image/video recording quality Effective use of simple tools. Licensing A copyright license for the presentation is not indicated (i.e., in the meta-data or the visual presentation). The copyright licenses and sources of the images used are not indicated - there may have been copyright violation unless you own the copyright to the images used.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 13:04, 21 November 2016 (UTC)