Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2016/Extreme altruism

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Thank you, Arlo your ideas are amazing and I will definitely have a look into that. --JazNF (discuss • contribs) 07:29, 13 September 2016 (UTC) It would be interesting to consider the role that the social hormone 'Oxytocin' has on atruism behaviours. I'm not sure about extreme altruism, but there are a few articles around that providence evidence for oxytocin increasing altruism Heres one https://www.researchgate.net/publication/221873255_Oxytocin_but_not_Vasopressin_Increases_both_Parochial_and_Universal_Altruism

Oxytocin has also been found to increase in-group/out-group biases, such as in http://www.pnas.org/content/108/4/1262.full

There might be some articles around about how oxytocin determines whether someone would help anyone or only someone in their ingroup Arlo

Hi, just a minor formatting suggestion of maybe making the lines of the table visible in the What behaviour can be regarded as altruistic table just to make it easier to read?. Really interesting topic by the way --U3117592 (discuss • contribs) 04:17, 17 October 2016 (UTC)

Bystander Intervention and Extreme Alturism

Hi there, Thank you! Your topic sounds very interesting too and is definitely related to what I hope to talk about in my chapter. Feel free to reference it as you like :D

Kym --U3117275 (discuss • contribs) 07:54, 31 August 2016 (UTC)

Hi, this is a really interesting topic. Have you considered how religion facilitates altruism? Particularly, regarding Islam and the Five Pillars of Islam where one plliar Zakat is concerned with charity. You've made a good start keep going!! :) social contribution u3081127 30/09/2016 16:00

When does altruism become extreme?

Hey, so I didn't change anything on your page but I was wondering if you knew the names of the friends of Mr Thompson in your example? Perhaps you could refer to at least one of them as something other than friend, It just reads a bit weird as it is. But otherwise, your page looks great! --CeeJay95 (discuss • contribs) 22:59, 6 October 2016 (UTC)

Suggestion about using a table

Hey, I was having a quick read of your chapter and it looks like it's coming along well. Just a suggestion, maybe put the "What behaviour can be regarded as altruistic?" section in a table, as it might make it clearer to read and be more visually appealing. Hope this is useful--Jbboys (discuss • contribs) 04:27, 17 October 2016 (UTC)

Feedback

Hi Jasmine,

Great chapter so far! You've written a really intriguing introduction with a great opening question. I like that you've included individual differences regarding altruism motivation as well, and you also have a good variety of interactive components.

I would suggest formatting your section "what behaviour can be regarded as altruistic?" as a table just to improve its readability. Perhaps you could also talk about the negative consequences that altruism has upon people? Obviously it poses a safety risk to the altruistic person, but are there also any psychological consequences that it has upon the person?

Let me know if you have any questions! --Qt3141 (discuss • contribs) 04:40, 17 October 2016 (UTC)

I just found this article which may be helpful for exploring the negative effects of altruism :) The Bright and Dark Side of Altruism: Demographic, Personality Traits, and Disorders Associated with Altruism by Adrian Furnham, Luke Treglown, Gillian Hyde and Geoff Trickey --Qt3141 (discuss • contribs) 04:50, 17 October 2016 (UTC)

References and issue numbers

Wow - this is an impressive looking chapter (just had a quick glance and it wasn't easy to see obvious areas for improvement). But one little tip is about use of issue numbers in references - see http://blog.apastyle.org/apastyle/2011/10/how-to-determine-whether-a-periodical-is-paginated-by-issue.html -- Jtneill - Talk - c 22:04, 21 October 2016 (UTC)

Chapter review and feedback

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Overall Overall, this is a well constructed chapter which could be improved by rewriting grammatically incorrect sentences. For more feedback see these copyedits and the comments below. Theory Clear Overview. Consider also including whistleblowers such as Edward Snowden as examples of extreme altruism, or even suicide bombers. The case study is helpful. A wide range of relevant theories are considered. Research Several very useful/relevant research studies are described. When discussing important research findings, indicate the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship. Written expression Written expression Sections with sub-headings need introductory text. Write in third person rather than first person (e.g., avoid "I', "we", "our", "your" etc.). Some paragraphs are overly long. Each paragraph should communicate one key idea in three to five sentences. Some clarification templates have been added to the page. Layout is very accessible. Tables and/or Figures are used effectively. Learning features The chapter makes goode use of interwiki links Quiz questions are used effectively to encourage reader engagement. Grammar and proofreading Check and correct the use of ownership apostrophes (e.g., individuals vs. individual's vs. individuals'). The grammar of some sentences could be improved (e.g., see the tags). APA style The APA style for the reference list is very good; remove issue numbers for paginated journals.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 05:05, 10 November 2016 (UTC)

Multimedia feedback

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Overall Overall, this is a basic, but sufficient presentation. Structure and content Overview Use the Overview to set up the problem to be solved (the question i.e., the subtitle for the book chapter). Tell the listener what they will find out about if they watch this presentation. Selection and organisation Well selected theory content - although perhaps too much to the detriment of a more effective Overview, Conclusion, examples, and consideration of research. The content should focus more on extreme altruism - as it is, the presentation seems to cover general altruism Theory was well covered. No coverage of research. Citations and references are included. Conclusion Too brief. A more detailed Conclusion slide summarising the take-home messages / key points could be helpful. Communication Audio Audio is reasonably clear and well-paced. Visuals Well prepared using a combination of text and images. Production quality Overall, basic, effective Prezi production. Meta-data Well titled. Including subtitle on first slide. Link to chapter provided. Minimal but sufficient use of the Description field. Audio recording quality Some white noise - consider using an external microphone to improve audio recording quality. Image/video recording quality Effective use of simple tools. Licensing A copyright license for the presentation is correctly shown in at least one location. Creative Commons. The copyright licenses and sources of the images are indicated.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 03:35, 22 November 2016 (UTC)