Latest comment: 8 years ago1 comment1 person in discussion
Hi
Great chapter so far., interesting topic. I will be interested to see how you bring it all together. I have been through your chapter and made some amendments for spelling and grammar. I also noticed some of your intext references need to be tidied up. I think including an outline of what you intend to cover at the start of the chapter might help to clarify what the chapter will cover. I hope this helps. Goof luck with rest of it.
Thanks
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Latest comment: 7 years ago1 comment1 person in discussion
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The example might work better if the reader is the athlete/performer rather than a viewer?
This chapter has an over-reliance on dictionary definitions; preferably consult and cite peer-reviewed psychological literature.
Full citation not provided for Karl-Ernst Buhler quote.
Could be improved by outlining the major theories/research.
Body
The Reeve (2015) textbook is over-used as a citation; preferably consult and cite primary, peer-reviewed sources.
Examples or case studies or tips for experiencing euphoria could be helpful.
A well-selected range of causes of euphoria are considered.
Causes of euphoria are well integrated with discussion of research, with a strong emphasis on neurological pathways, particularly the dopamine-reward circuit.
Conclusion
Weak; offer a succint summary and emphasise take-away messages that relate to the book theme.
Latest comment: 7 years ago1 comment1 person in discussion
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Probably too much content is presented about the dopamine reward pathway - be more selective - e.g., work backwards from 3 take-home messages to work out what content needs to be presented - and then focus on only that which is essential to conveying these messages. In this way, more could be said about other theoretical perspectives about euphoria and/or research.
Theory rich; research poor.
Doesn't clearly address a self-help theme.
Somewhat addresses a self-help theme.
Addresses a self-help theme.
Include citations.
Conclusion
Somewhat too brief/general - drill down to some practical, take-away messages.
Audio narration is reasonably well past, but somewhat it is somewhat difficult to understand the pronunciation - consider slowing down and pronouncing some words more clearly.
Consider using greater intonation to enhance engagement.[1]
Visuals
Basic - approximately half a dozen text-based slides with some images.
Rename the title so that it includes the title (and matches the book chapter).
Add a link to the book chapter.
Audio recording quality
Sufficient
Keyboard clicks audible - consider using an external microphone to improve audio recording quality.
Image/video recording quality
Sufficient
Screencast recording shows initial desktop screen before full screen is switched on.
Licensing
A copyright license for the presentation is not indicated (i.e., in the meta-data or the visual presentation).
The copyright licenses and sources of the images used are not indicated - there may have been copyright violation unless you own the copyright to the images used.