Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2016/Emotional hijacking

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Comments[edit]

Hi, I read your draft for the chapter and I just thought I'd make a suggestion about your beginning the "overview" part. Since your topic is emotional hijacking, I think it'd be beneficial if you gave a clear definition about what that is somewhere in the overview section :).

Also, this is just food for thought (and I might be wrong), but it sounds like emotional hijacking is a "primitive" response since it's an impulsive reaction to a situation. It's a good start though and I'm impressed you've made a start this early good job! --U3117274 (discusscontribs) 15:05, 9 September 2016 (UTC)


Hello, I noticed that you're missing a few references from your reference list (Ramachandran, 2000 and Cooligde & Wynn, 2001). Otherwise, good start on your chapter :) Kym --U3117275 (discusscontribs) 15:54, 9 September 2016 (UTC)

Heading casing[edit]

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FYI, the convention on Wikiversity is for lower-cased headings. For example, use:

==Cats and dogs==

rather than

==Cats and Dogs==

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 01:02, 13 September 2016 (UTC)

Also, note to just use the default style for headings - avoid adding extra formatting, such as bolding of headings. This helps to keep the formatting consistent across different chapters. -- Jtneill - Talk - c 12:55, 13 September 2016 (UTC)
An additional, note, I suggest avoiding subheadings in the Overview and Conclusion - these should be relatively brief sections. Detailed content should be in other sections. -- Jtneill - Talk - c 04:39, 20 September 2016 (UTC)

Topic and scope[edit]

In this Moodle post, Arlo asks:

I am doing my book chapter on Emotional Hijacking, and although its a very interesting topic, there is barely any research on it. All i can seem to find are popular self help articles. I have managed to find enough references to write about the neuroscience of it, but its hard to define and talk about the theories of it when there aren't any journal articles that specifically talk about it.

I was thinking about using the concept of impulsivity throughout the chapter, since they are pretty synonymous, and there is a plethora of articles on that. Or at least use impulsivity to describe positive emotional hijacking.

Would that be okay?

Some thoughts/options:

  1. The topic title and subtitle could be renegotiated by emailing me. But I wouldn't take a significant detour into impulsivity unless it is clearly reflected in the title and subtitle.
  2. What search terms have you used? Synonyms? Antonyms? For example, if EH is conceptualised as something like the opposite of emotional self-regulation or emotional intelligence, then the ESR and EI literature (of which there is a lot) becomes relevant. So, perhaps consider a deeper exploration of what emotional hijacking really means from a theoretical point of view because this might facilitate connections to other aspects of psychoemotional literature.
  3. Consider a closer connection to the chapter on amygdala hijacking - if there is a whole chapter on amygdala hijacking possible, then presumably there is comfortably a topic on the broader question of emotional hijacking? Perhaps also consider the effect of hormones such as oxytocin as providing "positive" emotional hijacking and the emotional hijacking of non-endogenous drugs etc.

Happy to discuss further. -- Jtneill - Talk - c 04:39, 20 September 2016 (UTC)

References[edit]

Hey Arlo,

Looks like the content is coming along nicely. I added an APA hanging template to your references.

Cheers, --Muzz2016 (discusscontribs) 13:00, 11 October 2016 (UTC)


Hey mate,

Love the layout, definitely the most technical chapter getting around. Great work!

I fixed your references for you, which would save you a bit of time later on.

Cheers, --Muzz2016 (discusscontribs) 06:36, 14 October 2016 (UTC)


Hi there! Interesting topic. I noticed you have a 5 minute multi-media presentation listed for your page but it should only be 3 minutes. Hope this is helpful. Good luck! --U113403 (discusscontribs) 07:11, 14 October 2016 (UTC)

Feedback[edit]

Hi Arlo,

Firstly, amazing chapter! It's clear that you've put a lot of time and effort into it and it has really paid off. You've used great examples throughout your chapter as well. Good job! I only really have a minor suggestion which you may or may not choose to implement :) I found all of the colours quite distracting. I understand that the colours are used to break up the components of your chapter, and it was really effective having the introductory section in a different colour, but it was a little too much for me (although that's just me, other may disagree!). I've also made a few minor grammatical corrections to your page, since I can imagine it would be hard to spot them at this point! Once again, great job! --Qt3141 (discusscontribs) 07:12, 17 October 2016 (UTC)


Hey, Definitely a thorough job and clearly a lot of time on the formatting. I did find the background colors at times a little distracting, but as previously mentioned that might be just a personal preference. I enjoyed the example you gave in the overview, very descriptive, relatable and well written. Good luck with the finishing touches :)--U3090066 (discusscontribs) 15:34, 17 October 2016 (UTC)

Fixed RoundBox below your reference list[edit]

Hi Arlo,

I noticed in the bottom of your reference list, there was an extra Round box, which had been created because you used the syntax RoundBoxTop twice, instead of RoundBoxTop and RoundBoxBottom to close. I've replace the sytnax with the correct format and it should be good to go.

If this isn't what you wanted, you can of course change it.

Cheers, --Muzz2016 (discusscontribs) 02:51, 18 October 2016 (UTC)

WOW[edit]

Woah! Your chapter is amazing! So colourful!!! And I love that you brought up Kramer lol I don't have much to suggest, this looks pretty awesome how it is. Maybe you could link up your examples to YouTube videos?? E.g. the footage of Tom Cruze jumping on the couch etc. Good work! :) Chot24 (discusscontribs) 01:12, 19 October 2016 (UTC)

Feedback[edit]

--Jazznicol (discusscontribs) 02:20, 19 October 2016 (UTC) Hi! Your chapter reads really well! Love your examples, and the quiz at the end My one suggestion would be about the font changes throughout the chapter, and the large images at the beginning.It just seems to be a little bit distracting. Apart from that though, great job!

Layout/design[edit]

  1. Figure and Table captions - use APA style

As requested, here's some suggestions re layout/design - in general, yes, it is (overly) busy, so look to simplify, such as:

  1. Use default wiki font / heading styles etc.
  2. Remove background colour/borders except for feature boxes that you particularly want to highlight
  1. See also and External links - use bullet points
  2. Add a Conclusion section which provides a succint summary of the chapter's answer to the subtitle question
  3. Avoid having only one sub-section (e.g., 1.1 - there is no 1.2) - either add another sub-section or drop the sub-section heading and merge into the higher level section

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 23:42, 20 October 2016 (UTC)

Keep going with the layout simplification - the goal should be something that looks like a Wikipedia page - or a starred recent previous chapter. -- Jtneill - Talk - c 23:45, 21 October 2016 (UTC)
This is looking much better, Arlo - the simplification/standardisation of background colour allows the reader to focus more clearly on the content. Yes, I suggest going ahead and standardising the title/header layout too, which should also fix up the non-standard line spacing in the table of contents. If those images in the header are useful, then embed them with appropriate captions in the body text. It's great that you've played around with design options within the wiki, but at the end of the day, the colour/non-standard layout features shouldn't dominate the page, but rather facilitate the reader's access to information and understanding. -- Jtneill - Talk - c 19:59, 22 October 2016 (UTC)
FYI, the standard (recommended) format/layout can be found in the template here: Template:Motivation and emotion/Book chapter structure. The more closely this style is followed, the more consistent the chapter will be with the recommended style. A lot of excessive layout features have been removed, but there still appears to be some unnecessary extra code. Also note that the current Level 1 headings (with one equals sign either side of the header) should become Level 2 headings (this is the standard Wikiversity/Wikipedia style). -- Jtneill - Talk - c 09:49, 23 October 2016 (UTC)
FYI, I've standardised the title layout. Another useful step could be to remove the extra blank line spaces between sections. -- Jtneill - Talk - c 10:44, 23 October 2016 (UTC)


Chapter review and feedback

This chapter has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing through the chapter. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below and/or contacting the reviewer. Chapter marks will be available later via Moodle, along with social contribution marks and feedback. Keep an eye on Announcements.

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Overall[edit]

  1. Overall, this is a promising chapter which could be improved by further proofreading to correct spelling, grammar, and APA style errors.
  2. For more feedback see these copyedits and the comments below.
  3. Feel free to make ongoing changes to the chapter if you wish to address any of these comments or make other improvements.

Theory[edit]

  1. Theory is reasonably well described, but could be improved by emphasising a synthesis of viewpoints. The described theory strongly emphasises a neurological structure viewpoint and has much less emphasis on, say, the role of neurotransmitter pathways or cognitive theories. Appropriately, there is a subsequent emphasis on emotional self-regulation.
  2. The opening example could be improved by describing the actual emotional hijack response more clearly - a question is posed, but the example doesn't explicitly show any emotional hijack actions or consequences.
  3. Provide a link to the Tom Cruise video
  4. The opening case study could be followed through in the Conclusion - what could could be done to prevent emotional hijack in such a situation in future?

Research[edit]

  1. Several useful/relevant research studies are described.
  2. Some statements are unreferenced (e.g., see the [factual?] tags)
  3. Consider combining Tables 2, 3, and 4, to help make the data more readable.
  4. Explain/clarify - not all of the effect sizes in these tables are small moderate or positive.
  5. When describing important research studies, provide some indication of the nature of the method.

Written expression[edit]

  1. Written expression
    1. For academic writing in psychology, such as this book chapter, write in third person rather than first (e.g., avoid "I', "we", "our") or second (e.g., "you", "your" etc.) person perspective.
    2. The chapter successfully addresses the topic and book theme.
    3. Some clarification templates have been added to the page.
  2. Structure and headings
    1. Each section should include at least one introductory paragraph before branching into sub-sections.
    2. See earlier comments about heading casing
  3. Layout
    1. Tables and/or Figures are used effectively.
  4. Integration with other chapters
    1. Little integration with other chapters is evident - add interwiki links links to a wider range of other relevant chapters.
  5. Learning features
    1. Add Interwiki links (to relevant Wikipedia articles) to make the text more interactive e.g., Phineas Gage.
    2. Quiz questions are used effectively to encourage reader engagement - the open-ended question should be revised to give a respondent a greater chance of success.
  6. Spelling
    1. Use Australian spelling (some general examples are hypothesize -> hypothesise; behavior -> behaviour).
  7. Grammar and proofreading
    1. The grammar of some sentences could be improved (e.g., see the [grammar?] tags).
    2. Check and correct use of semi-colons.
    3. Check and correct the use of ownership apostrophes (e.g., individuals vs. individual's vs. individuals').
  8. APA style
    1. Check and correct the APA style formatting of in-text citations e.g., put multiple in-text citations in alphabetical order.
    2. Check and correct the use of APA style for direct quotes.
    3. subjects -> participants
    4. Check and correct the APA style for how to report numbers (Numbers under 10 should be written in words (e.g., five); numbers 10 and over should be written in numbers (e.g., 10)).
    5. Check and correct the use of "&" vs. "and" (Use ampersand (&) inside brackets and "and" outside brackets).
    6. The reference list is not in full APA style.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 02:20, 16 November 2016 (UTC)


Multimedia feedback

The accompanying multimedia presentation has been marked according to the marking criteria. Marks are available via the unit's Moodle site. Written feedback is provided below, plus see the general feedback page. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below. If you would like further clarification about the marking or feedback, contact the unit convener.

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Overall[edit]

  1. Overall, this is a very well prepared and executed presentation, with creative flair.

Structure and content[edit]

  1. Overview
    1. Perhaps consider including some more detailed examples of positive and negative hijackings.
    2. Perhaps spend a little more time ensuring the viewer really understands exactly what an emotional hijacking is (examples may help).
    3. Outline what will be covered (so the reader can decide whether to continue).
  2. Selection and organisation
    1. Overall, reasonably well selected theoretical content.
    2. What does the MAO gene do?
    3. Helpful incorporation of research.
    4. Clearly addresses the overall project theme of applied life improvement.
    5. No citations?
    6. No references?
  3. Conclusion
    1. A Conclusion slide summarising the take-home messages / key points could be helpful. (the slide presented had too much text to read)

Communication[edit]

  1. Audio
    1. Audio is well scripted, spoken and paced.
  2. Image/Video
    1. Integration of video, images, and text was creative, engaging, and worked well

Production quality[edit]

  1. Overall, well produced.
  2. Meta-data
    1. Rename the video title so that it includes the subtitle (and matches the book chapter).
    2. Add a link to the book chapter.
    3. Link to chapter provided.
    4. Fill out the description field (e.g., brief description of presentation, link back to the book chapter, license details, and possibly include references, image attributions, and/or transcript).
    5. Change category - currently music.
  3. Audio recording quality
    1. Clearly audible, although volume varies between segments.
    2. Music fits in well.
  4. Image/video recording quality
    1. Effective integration of various multimedia techniques.
  5. Licensing
    1. A copyright license for the presentation is shown.
    2. The copyright licenses and sources of the images are indicated.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 16:11, 20 November 2016 (UTC)