Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2016/Dyslexia and negative emotions

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Comments[edit source]

Hey, Your chapter looks great so far! I have attached links to a couple of journal articles that may offer a different perspective and are hopefully helpful. One article discusses the mediating role of emotional experience with family and the other is a case study of an adolescent boy with dyslexia. Good luck with finishing off your chapter :) --U3090066 (discusscontribs) 19:29, 13 October 2016 (UTC)

Hi, just letting you know i added a hanging indent template to your references so they are APA formatted. --U3117592 (discusscontribs) 04:39, 17 October 2016 (UTC)[]

Suggested images[edit source]

Hi, hope your well :) Your chapter is coming along really nicely, I thought it could benefit with some pictures. I have found 2 images from wiki commons, one is of albert einstein, the other is of a book, just some suggestion photos if you'd like to use them :)

1) Albert einstein - 2) Book -

You can download them or copy/paste the link. They are free to use and share from wikimedia commons.

Good luck with your chapter ! --U3121176 (discusscontribs) 02:35, 17 October 2016 (UTC)[]

Citations[edit source]

Check APA style for citations, e.g., alphabetical order, use of commas, page numbers for direct quotes etc. -- Jtneill - Talk - c 23:42, 21 October 2016 (UTC)[]

Wiki links[edit source]

This chapter could be improved by linking the first mention of key words to corresponding Wikipedia articles e.g., dyslexia. -- Jtneill - Talk - c 20:57, 23 October 2016 (UTC)[]

Chapter review and feedback

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Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this is a strong chapter which incorporates a balanced, critical overview of relevant theory and research and makes reasonably effective use of the wiki environment.
  2. For more feedback see these copyedits and the comments below.

Theory[edit source]

  1. Theory is reasonably well covered.
  2. Abbreviate the general definitional and descriptive theory about dyslexia and link to more info e.g., the Wikipedia article about dyslexia, to allow a more detail focus on the negative emotion effects of dyslexia.
  3. Addition of case studies or additional examples could be helpful.

Research[edit source]

  1. Research is reasonably well covered, but key studies could be described in more detail
  2. When describing important research studies, provide some indication of the nature of the method.
  3. When discussing important research findings, indicate the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship.

Written expression[edit source]

  1. Written expression is generally very good.
    1. Write for an international, not just an Australian, audience.
    2. Some paragraphs are overly long. Each paragraph should communicate one key idea in three to five sentences.
    3. Avoid one sentence paragraphs. A paragraph should typically consist of three to five sentences.
    4. Write in third person rather than first person (e.g., avoid "I', "we", "our", "your" etc.).
  2. Layout
    1. The chapter is well-structured.
    2. Tables and/or Figures are used effectively.
  3. Learning features
    1. The chapter makes some use of interwiki links to relevant Wikipedia articles - but doesn't link some of the more obvious terms e.g., dylexia!
    2. Quiz questions could be used to encourage reader engagement.
  4. APA style
    1. Check and correct the APA style formatting of in-text citations.
    2. The reference list is not in full APA style.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 03:42, 11 November 2016 (UTC)[]

Multimedia feedback

The accompanying multimedia presentation has been marked according to the marking criteria. Marks are available via the unit's Moodle site. Written feedback is provided below, plus see the general feedback page. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below. If you would like further clarification about the marking or feedback, contact the unit convener.


Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this is a very well prepared and executed presentation.

Structure and content[edit source]

  1. Overview
    1. Narrate the opening slide.
    2. Describes the problem (of dyslexia - but not dyslexia and negative emotion) but doesn't describe what this presentation is about.
  2. Selection and organisation
    1. Very well selected content - not too much or too little.
    2. Well structured.
    3. Theory was well covered.
    4. Research was well covered.
    5. Addresses a self-help theme.
    6. Citations and references are included.
  3. Conclusion
    1. Take-home messages / key points are well summarised.

Communication[edit source]

  1. Audio
    1. Well scripted narrated.
    2. Audio is clear and well-paced.
    3. Varied intonation added interest and engagement.
  2. Visuals
    1. Simple combination of text and images; effective
    2. Zoom in to some slides (or parts of slides) to improve visual focus and readability

Production quality[edit source]

  1. Overall, well produced.
  2. Meta-data
    1. Rename the title so that it includes the subtitle (and matches the book chapter).
    2. Link to the book chapter provided.
    3. Some inclusion of additional, relevant information.
  3. Audio recording quality
    1. Very good
  4. Image/video recording quality
    1. Effective use of simple tools.
  5. Licensing
    1. A copyright license for the presentation is correctly shown in at least one location. Creative Commons.
    2. The copyright licenses and sources of the images are indicated.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 02:22, 23 November 2016 (UTC)[]