Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2016/Cortical activation patterns and emotion

Comments

Hey, Interesting topic, can't wait to see the finished chapter. I have attached two journal articles that I found interesting. They discuss the neural correlates of emotional perception and the associated neural processes. Hopefully they are of assistance and good luck with the remainder of your chapter. http://www.sciencedirect.com/science/article/pii/S0028393209002681 http://www.sciencedirect.com/science/article/pii/S0006322303001689 --U3090066 (discuss • contribs) 08:54, 17 October 2016 (UTC)

Heading casing

FYI, the convention on Wikiversity is for lower-cased headings. For example, use: ==Cats and dogs== rather than ==Cats and Dogs== -- Jtneill - Talk - c 06:15, 18 October 2016 (UTC)

Structure

Avoid having a single sub-section within a section; either add another sub-section or merge the content into the higher level section. -- Jtneill - Talk - c 23:34, 21 October 2016 (UTC)

Comments

--Jazznicol (discuss • contribs) 05:09, 22 October 2016 (UTC)Great book chapter! You've made a complex topic easy to understand, and I like your use of boxes to draw attention to specific parts (helps break down the topic a bit) I know its quite late, but I found an article that you may find useful in your section on emotional regulation, as it talks about measuring specific regulation strategies neurologically :) Neural circuits of emotion regulation: A comparison of mindfulness-based and cognitive reappraisal strategies

Chapter review and feedback

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Overall Overall, this is a solid chapter which could be improved by providing a clearer explanation of brain wave oscillations (what they are and what causes them). For more feedback see these copyedits and the comments below. Theory Excellent Overview and introduction. Consider simplifying the description of neuroelectrical oscillations. Clearer description of the oscillation types are needed e.g., which ones are faster/slower etc.? What causes different oscillations. Maybe add a figure(s) to illustrate? Biofeedback about brain wave oscillations might be interesting/relevant to consider. Addition of case studies or additional examples could be helpful. Research Research is well cited, but the chapter could be improved by explaining key studies in more detail. When describing important research studies, provide some indication of the nature of the method. When discussing important research findings, indicate the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship. Written expression Written expression is generally good, but tends towards being overly technical and lacking in plain language explanation. The Conclusion could be improved by providing some more concrete, take-home messages. Layout Avoid sections with only one sub-section. A section should have no sub-sections or at least two sub-sections. Tables and/or Figures are used effectively. Figure captions could be more explanatory. Learning features Some links to Wikipedia and/or Wikiversity articles were added as external links - these should be changed to interwiki links. Quiz questions are used effectively to encourage reader engagement. Spelling, grammar, and proofreading are excellent. APA style The APA style for the reference list is very good; remove issue numbers for paginated journals.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 05:25, 9 November 2016 (UTC)

Multimedia feedback

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Overall Overall, this is a fun, creative, and informative presentation. Structure and content Overview Add title slide Engaging/attention grabbing Selection and organisation Well selected content - in general, not too much or too little. (Perhaps too much on brain structures). Humourous/quirky. Theory was well covered. Examples are engaging - perhaps explain more about how/why the 'surprise' motif induces emotion via cortical activation What is the relationship between the different types of neural oscillation and emotion? Include citations and references. Conclusion Brief. A Conclusion slide and/or narration summarising the take-home messages / key points could be helpful. Communication Audio Well scripted and narrated. Could be improved by crafting emphasis on key points / take home messages that fit with the self-help theme. Varied intonation added interest and engagement. Audio is clear and well-paced. Visuals Engaging, creative combination of video, images, and text. Production quality Overall, very well produced. Meta-data Link to the book chapter provided. Minimal but sufficient use of the Description field. Audio recording quality Excellent Image/video recording quality Creative Cleverly edited Excellent Licensing The stated license in the description doesn't match the selected youtube license. The copyright licenses and sources of the images used are not indicated - there may have been copyright violation unless you own the copyright to the images used.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 11:23, 22 November 2016 (UTC)