Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2016/Competition fighting motivation
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Hi, interesting topic and nice start. Obviously this is a rough draft at the moment but I just wanted to let you know that some of your sentences aren't complete, so just be sure to carefully read through it and fix some of those :) otherwise this is really good! I've often wondered why some people are motivated to fight professionally or as a sport, It'll be good to read once it's finished :) Regards --U3117274 (discuss • contribs) 14:09, 23 October 2016 (UTC)
Possible directions for competition motivation
- I found some info that may help you address competition from a need for a achievement point of view.
In the Reeve textbook, the Atkinsons model and Dynamics-of-action model deal with achievement motivation, with a small section dedicated to competition as a condition that satisfies a need for achievement (p.198). Sourced from The Understanding Motivation and emotion textbook. Chapter 7: Implicit Motives (pp. 195-198). --Muzz2016 (discuss • contribs) 06:46, 22 September 2016 (UTC)
This seems like an interesting topic. Adding the history of fighting is a nice touch to understand the original motives of this behaviour. Just note some minor grammatical edits need to be made to your overview :) I will watch this page it seems it will be a good read. Good Luck. U3115468 (discuss • contribs) 06:30, 27 September 2016 (UTC)
- Hi, what an interesting topic! I have noticed that in your overview you mentioned MMA fighting. I have found an excellent article about MMA fighting that may be helpful for your chapter. The researchers interviewed 7 MMA fighter's and then analysed the transcripts of these interviews. From these they extracted themes and discussed them in their results. I think you will find the areas on purpose particularly helpful for you chapter (see page 6) which discusses the personal importance of fighting and the fighters commitment. The article is titled: In the Cage: MMA Fighter's Experience of Competition. It can be accessed through the university library's website using EBSCOhost. http://web.a.ebscohost.com.ezproxy.canberra.edu.au/ehost/detail/detail?vid=15&sid=d75e9c1d-fce3-4483-ad34-2d87416f27e2%40sessionmgr4006&hid=4106&bdata=#AN=86071523&db=s3h All the best! --LeoDean1993 (discuss • contribs) 05:19, 3 October 2016 (UTC)
Hey, I just fixed a couple of spelling and grammatical errors that I came across when reading your chapter. Other than this I think it's coming along nicely.--Jbboys (discuss • contribs) 08:55, 16 October 2016 (UTC)
You've picked a really interesting topic! I really like how you've given a brief historical perspective for your topic - it's very fitting! I noticed that you have quite a few statements which currently lack references, so just make sure that you check over your chapter before submission :) I'll add a few comments where I think you may need to put these references. I would also suggest having a look at your sentence structure - it can be a little abrupt at times! Perhaps you could also talk about gender differences, given the role that testosterone has to play in fighting motivation. --Qt3141 (discuss • contribs) 09:07, 16 October 2016 (UTC)
Just made a couple of grammatical edits. Also maybe you should consider making the "motivational processes" heading a section on its own, and have it follow directly after the "Why do people fight" section, as this would make your chapter flow a little better :) --Qt3141 (discuss • contribs) 05:14, 17 October 2016 (UTC)
In your "Why do people fight" section, you have a quote from Dana White. I know UFC is incredibly popular, but maybe still use the full title (Ultimate Fighting Championship) just in case. Also, why not put it in a nice big quotes box to draw more attention to it, as it is actually a really great quote! --Qt3141 (discuss • contribs) 00:41, 18 October 2016 (UTC)
You could maybe emphasise the motivational aspects of competing a bit more. You've definitely covered why people fight in general, but why do they choose to actually compete? Do they have goals that they would like to achieve? Perhaps check out acheivement goal theory wrt competition fighting. This article looks at differences of goals between competitive and non-competitive judo and akido fighters. --Qt3141 (discuss • contribs) 05:15, 23 October 2016 (UTC)
Hey Michelle I really enjoy your topic and it seems very interesting however the overall layout of the page was slightly hard to follow. In particular moving into fight or flight response. perhaps some linking introductions would help or more spaced out headings, in particular headings 3.2 on intrinsic and extrinsic motivation could be there own point seperate from fight or flight just to help with the flow of reading
Hi, I found an image of gladiators on wiki commons that I hoped you might find useful https://commons.wikimedia.org/wiki/File:Jean-Leon_Gerome_Pollice_Verso.jpg --U113403 (discuss • contribs) 06:49, 19 October 2016 (UTC)
Great topic! First off, I think it would be a good idea to add a case study and then reference back to it in the text, to tie all of the parts of your chapter together! For example, you could write about a boxer and then give an extrinsic motivator and intrinsic motivator for why they fight! I also think you should add some images to break up the text a bit! I also think you should look through your chapter and remove excess words. Some of your sentences are quite long and are repetitive. For example 'The fight or flight response has been ingrained in our DNA and has been around since the beginning of time.' This could become: The fight or flight response is ingrained in our DNA and has been since the beginning of time.'
I've noticed that you don't have in-text references at the end of some sentences. You need to reference everything that you say or you might lose marks!
I've noticed that you say 'During fighting there is an increase in cortisol, testosterone GH,[LA], glucose and RPE (Ouergi et al., 2016).' The reader is not going to know what these abbreviations are, so I suggest putting the full name and linking to a wikipedia article on the hormone for each one.
Great first draft! I'm excited to see the finished product!
Hey, The information and content of your chapter is looking pretty comprehensive. My suggestions would echo, previous idea's about breaking up the content with images/quizzes/graphs etc Something to increase the level of engagement with the reader, as the block of text is a little overwhelming. Adding Wiki links to other articles, to provide background information to some of the more technical anatomical terms would also add to the readers engagement. Best of luck with finishing of your chapter! --U3090066 (discuss • contribs) 18:37, 21 October 2016 (UTC)
- Agree - add wiki links when key terms are first used e.g., fighting. -- Jtneill - Talk - c 20:52, 21 October 2016 (UTC)
Hi, As everyone has said, this is a really intriguing topic that will make a fantastic chapter. I was wondering if there were any biological and physiological components of the within the brain e.g activation. That could strengthen your argument about the fight or flight systems allowing for a deeper connection to psychological components. Good luck !
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