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Theoretical understanding of the topic could be improved by briefly describing shame as an emotion (and linking to further information), and then considering how and why shame can be focused on one's body.
The Overview establishes the importance of the topic.
The Conclusion offers a succint summary and emphasises solutions.
Addition of case studies or additional examples could be helpful.
This chapter could be improved by linking to other related chapters.
Layout
Add bullet-points for See also and External links.
The chapter is well-structured.
Tables and/or Figures are used effectively.
(Excessive use of) coloured boxes was removed so as to aid accessibility/readability; strive for simple layout (e.g., as per Wikipedia articles)
Reduce (excessive) use of coloured boxes was removed so as to aid accessibility/readability; strive for simple layout (e.g., as per Wikipedia articles)
Some images are used, but the chapter could be improved by adding more images.
There is minimal use of images or tables.
No images or tables were used.
Figure captions should be more explanatory.
Add wiki bullet points (some items are pasted from a word processor without applying the wiki bullet points).
Learning features
Add more Interwiki links (e.g., to relevant Wikipedia articles and other Wikiversity book chapters) to make the text more interactive.
Quiz questions are used effectively to encourage reader engagement.
Grammar and proofreading
The grammar of some sentences could be improved (e.g., see the [grammar?] tags).
Check and correct the use of ownership apostrophes (e.g., individuals vs. individual's vs. individuals').
APA style
The APA style for the reference list is very good; remove issue numbers for paginated journals.
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Rename the title so that it includes the subtitle (and matches the book chapter).
Add a link to the book chapter.
Link to chapter provided in the Description. Make the link in the presentation more obvious - check that think, it seemed to be broken when I clicked on it.
Fill out the description field (e.g., brief description of presentation, link back to the book chapter, license details, and possibly include references, image attributions, and/or transcript).
Audio recording quality
Excellent
Image/video recording quality
Effective use of simple tools.
Licensing
A copyright license for the presentation is correctly shown in at least one location. Creative Commons.
The copyright licenses and sources of the images used are not indicated - there may have been copyright violation unless you own the copyright to the images used.
