FYI, the convention on Wikiversity is for lower-cased headings. For example, use:
==Cats and dogs==
==Cats and Dogs==
-- Jtneill - 23:29, 21 October 2016 (UTC)
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Chapter review and feedback
Overall, this is a reasonable, basic chapter which could be improved by drilling more deeply into the central topic - emotional implications and applications of the BH. This could be achieved by abbreviating background info about the BH, BH and health (the BH and stress part is helpful), environmental preferences, conservation attitudes, etc. and spending more time explaining theory and research about BH and emotion (and different types of emotion). ART is more about the cognitive benefits of exposure to nature. SRT (Stress Recovery Theory) would be more relevant to the current chapter. Crucially, the Conclusion doesn't even mention emotion
. For more feedback see
these copyedits and the comments below. Feel free to make ongoing changes to the chapter if you wish to address any of these comments or make other improvements.
The chapter focuses on describing the BH and then its connection to health, stress, environment preference, and conservation attitudes. However, this doesn't sufficiently address the topic, which is about BH effects on emotion and how this can be applied to improving our lives.
Abbreviate the general theoretical material and provide references and links to further information. This would allow more space to apply the theories to the specific topic in more detail.
The most obvious missing theory is
Motivation and emotion/Book/2016/Stress recovery theoryStress Recovery Theory. Examples or case studies would be helpful.
Several potentially relevant research studies are cited, but the chapter could be strengthened by highlighting and focusing on the studies about nature exposure and emotion.
Some statements are unreferenced (e.g., see the
tags) When describing important research studies, provide some indication of the nature of the method.
When discussing important research findings, indicate the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship.
For academic writing in psychology, such as this book chapter,
write in third person rather than first (e.g., avoid "I', "we", "our") or second (e.g., "you", "your" etc.) person perspective. Some paragraphs are overly long. Paragraphs should communicate a single key idea in about three to five sentences. Structure and headings
Avoid sections with only one sub-section. A section should have no sub-sections or at least two sub-sections.
Each section should start with at least one introductory paragraph before branching into sub-sections. Layout
Tables and Figures should be referred to in the main text.
Add bullet-points for See also and External links. Integration with other chapters
Limited integration with other relevant chapters - e.g,. see Category:Motivation and emotion/Book/Nature Learning features
Some use of
interwiki links to relevant Wikipedia articles - more could be added. Quiz questions are used effectively to encourage reader engagement. Spelling
Use Australian spelling (some general examples are hypothesize -> hypothesise; behavior -> behaviour).
Spelling could be improved - see the tags. Grammar and proofreading
The grammar of some sentences could be improved (e.g., see the
tags). Check and correct the use of abbreviations (such as "e.g.," and "i.e.,").
Check and correct consistency of capitalisation e.g, biophilia hypothesis vs. Biophilia Hypothesis APA style
Use APA style for table and figure captions.
Check and correct the use of
APA style for direct quotes. The reference list is not in full APA style.
The APA style for the reference list is very good; remove issue numbers for
paginated journals. subjects -> participants
Jtneill - 05:05, 18 November 2016 (UTC)
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Overall, this is a well prepared and executed presentation.
The presentation is very well structured.
Content is well selected.
Content is well balanced (biophilic and biophobic)
Includes take-home messages.
The main area for improvement is to focus more specifically on emotion (rather than psychological benefits)
Audio is clear and very well-paced.
Consider using greater intonation to enhance engagement.  Video
Spelling error in title on first slide
Font is easy to read.
Background provides appropriate context.
The combination of images and text is effective.
Overall, well produced.
Rename the title in the meta-data and on the first slide so that it includes the subtitle (and matches the book chapter).
Use the Description field to provide a link to the chapter.
Add a link to the book chapter.
Fill out the description field (e.g., brief description of presentation, link back to the book chapter, license details, and potentially can include references, image attributions, and/or transcript). Image and video recording quality
Effective use of simple tools. Audio recording quality
A copyright license for the presentation is shown.
The copyright license and source for the image is shown.
Jtneill - 10:03, 19 November 2016 (UTC)
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