Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2016/Biophilia hypothesis and emotion

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Heading casing[edit source]

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FYI, the convention on Wikiversity is for lower-cased headings. For example, use:

==Cats and dogs==

rather than

==Cats and Dogs==

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 23:29, 21 October 2016 (UTC)Reply[reply]

Chapter review and feedback

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Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this is a reasonable, basic chapter which could be improved by drilling more deeply into the central topic - emotional implications and applications of the BH. This could be achieved by abbreviating background info about the BH, BH and health (the BH and stress part is helpful), environmental preferences, conservation attitudes, etc. and spending more time explaining theory and research about BH and emotion (and different types of emotion). ART is more about the cognitive benefits of exposure to nature. SRT (Stress Recovery Theory) would be more relevant to the current chapter. Crucially, the Conclusion doesn't even mention emotion Frowny.svg.
  2. For more feedback see these copyedits and the comments below.
  3. Feel free to make ongoing changes to the chapter if you wish to address any of these comments or make other improvements.

Theory[edit source]

  1. The chapter focuses on describing the BH and then its connection to health, stress, environment preference, and conservation attitudes. However, this doesn't sufficiently address the topic, which is about BH effects on emotion and how this can be applied to improving our lives.
  2. Abbreviate the general theoretical material and provide references and links to further information. This would allow more space to apply the theories to the specific topic in more detail.
  3. The most obvious missing theory is Motivation and emotion/Book/2016/Stress recovery theoryStress Recovery Theory.
  4. Examples or case studies would be helpful.

Research[edit source]

  1. Several potentially relevant research studies are cited, but the chapter could be strengthened by highlighting and focusing on the studies about nature exposure and emotion.
  2. Some statements are unreferenced (e.g., see the [factual?] tags)
  3. When describing important research studies, provide some indication of the nature of the method.
  4. When discussing important research findings, indicate the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship.

Written expression[edit source]

  1. Written expression
    1. For academic writing in psychology, such as this book chapter, write in third person rather than first (e.g., avoid "I', "we", "our") or second (e.g., "you", "your" etc.) person perspective.
    2. Some paragraphs are overly long. Paragraphs should communicate a single key idea in about three to five sentences.
  2. Structure and headings
    1. Avoid sections with only one sub-section. A section should have no sub-sections or at least two sub-sections.
    2. Each section should start with at least one introductory paragraph before branching into sub-sections.
  3. Layout
    1. Tables and Figures should be referred to in the main text.
    2. Add bullet-points for See also and External links.
  4. Integration with other chapters
    1. Limited integration with other relevant chapters - e.g,. see Category:Motivation and emotion/Book/Nature
  5. Learning features
    1. Some use of interwiki links to relevant Wikipedia articles - more could be added.
    2. Quiz questions are used effectively to encourage reader engagement.
  6. Spelling
    1. Use Australian spelling (some general examples are hypothesize -> hypothesise; behavior -> behaviour).
    2. Spelling could be improved - see the [spelling?] tags.
  7. Grammar and proofreading
    1. The grammar of some sentences could be improved (e.g., see the [grammar?] tags).
    2. Check and correct the use of abbreviations (such as "e.g.," and "i.e.,").
    3. Check and correct consistency of capitalisation e.g, biophilia hypothesis vs. Biophilia Hypothesis
  8. APA style
    1. Use APA style for table and figure captions.
    2. Check and correct the use of APA style for direct quotes.
    3. The reference list is not in full APA style.
    4. The APA style for the reference list is very good; remove issue numbers for paginated journals.
    5. subjects -> participants

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 05:05, 18 November 2016 (UTC)Reply[reply]

Multimedia feedback

The accompanying multimedia presentation has been marked according to the marking criteria. Marks are available via the unit's Moodle site. Written feedback is provided below, plus see the general feedback page. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below. If you would like further clarification about the marking or feedback, contact the unit convener.


Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this is a well prepared and executed presentation.

Structure and content[edit source]

  1. The presentation is very well structured.
  2. Content is well selected.
  3. Content is well balanced (biophilic and biophobic)
  4. Includes examples.
  5. Includes take-home messages.
  6. The main area for improvement is to focus more specifically on emotion (rather than psychological benefits)
  7. Includes citations.

Communication[edit source]

  1. Audio
    1. Audio is clear and very well-paced.
    2. Consider using greater intonation to enhance engagement.[1]
  2. Video
    1. Spelling error in title on first slide
    2. Font is easy to read.
    3. Background provides appropriate context.
    4. The combination of images and text is effective.

Production quality[edit source]

  1. Overall, well produced.
  2. Meta-data
    1. Rename the title in the meta-data and on the first slide so that it includes the subtitle (and matches the book chapter).
    2. Use the Description field to provide a link to the chapter.
    3. Add a link to the book chapter.
    4. Fill out the description field (e.g., brief description of presentation, link back to the book chapter, license details, and potentially can include references, image attributions, and/or transcript).
  3. Image and video recording quality
    1. Effective use of simple tools.
  4. Audio recording quality
    1. Good.
  5. Licensing
    1. A copyright license for the presentation is shown.
    2. The copyright license and source for the image is shown.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 10:03, 19 November 2016 (UTC)Reply[reply]