Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2016/Attention restoration theory

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Hey! Your chapter is amazing! I made a very minor change - added 'in this chapter' to the paragraph that states what will be investigated. You have made your chapter very interactive and there are a great amount of visuals. Additionally, the information you've included is extremely practical and applicable to the real world. I found your segment on nature deficit disorder really interesting! Good job! U3081523 (discuss • contribs) 06:42, 21 October 2016 (UTC)

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Overall Overall, this is a solid chapter which could be improved by focusing on ART in more detail (and focusing in less detail on related areas). For more feedback see these copyedits and the comments below. Theory Excellent explanation of attention and ART. It is unclear what the relevance of Hull's drive theory is to ART - this section could be skipped or significantly reduced. The link between Maslow's hierarchy of needs and ART is weak/limited - this section could be skipped or significantly reduced. No need to explain Stress Reduction Theory in so much detail - summarise more briefly. Although there are some similarities (they both focus on the positive psychological effects of nature), they are quite different theories and this chapter is about ART. The biophilia hypothesis is discussed, but not linked to ART. Excellent use of examples Research Some statements were unreferenced (e.g., see the tags) When describing important research studies, provide some indication of the nature of the method. When discussing important research findings, indicate the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship. Several very useful/relevant research studies are described. They tend to be described one after the other. To improve the review of research, look for patterns and themes and try to synthesise the findings in order to convey a greater depth of understanding. Did you directly consult Hull (1951), Cherry (1953), Olmsted (1865), James (1892) etc.? If not, don't cite it (or use a secondary citation). Written expression The quality of written expression was very good; some clarification templates have been added to indicate some areas for improvement. The Overview and Conclusion are clear and well-written. The chapter is well-structured and laid out. Tables and Figures are well used. The chapter makes some use of interwiki links to relevant Wikipedia articles. Quiz questions are used effectively to encourage reader engagement. APA style is generally good, but the reference list is not in full APA style.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 02:59, 25 October 2016 (UTC)

Multimedia feedback

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Overall Overall, this is an excellent all-round presentation. Structure and content Overview Excellent Selection and organisation Incredibly well selected content and structured such that all theory, research, examples, and take-home messages that fit with the self-improvement theme are covered in a simple, easy to follow, interesting manner. Citations and references are included. Conclusion Take-home messages / key points are well summarised. Communication Audio Well narrated. Varied intonation added interest and engagement. Audio is clear and well-paced. Visuals Visuals are well prepared, clear, and easy to read. The animated combination of images and text is effective in attracting and sustaining viewer attention. Production quality Overall, excellent production. Meta-data Include subtitle Excellent use of the Description field to provide relevant information. Audio recording quality Excellent Image/video recording quality Excellent Licensing A copyright license for the presentation is correctly shown in at least one location. Creative Commons. The copyright licenses and sources of the images are indicated.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 12:31, 22 November 2016 (UTC)