Hi there, just had a look through your chapter: "Whichever suggested definition one selects, Zemach (2001) suggests that many theorists will fall into one of two opposing groups" this sentence is a little bit vague; perhaps you might consider rewording the first section to add some clarity? CheersU3117451 (discuss • contribs) 01:35, 15 October 2016 (UTC)
Hi there, You have a good outline of content but I think adding images will break up the text and make it easier and more inviting to read. You can do this going onto the wiki commons site https://commons.wikimedia.org/wiki/Main_Page. simply search what you want an image of e.g hugging (to symbolise attachment), click on the image, copy the file name, go to your wikiversity book chapter, click insert>media>paste the file name>give it an APA style figure name. Hope this helps. :) I added one as an example. Hope this is okay U3115468 (discuss • contribs) 02:22, 16 October 2016 (UTC)
Good start to your chapter, can't wait to see the end result. I completed some minor spelling and grammatical errors, best of luck with the rest of the chapter! --U3090066 (discuss • contribs) 17:43, 18 October 2016 (UTC)
Hi again, I have re-read through your chapter and it is looking good. I fixed a few more grammar errors. One thing I would suggest is not to start sentences with things like "in which" as these are generally used mid-sentence and may confuse the reader. For example you have written "In which he identified five emotions; Enjoyment, Sadness, Anger, Fear, and Disgust." as a sentence on its own but it sounds incomplete. Just minor editing things. U3117451 (discuss • contribs) 02:42, 21 October 2016 (UTC)
"He also argued a difference between biologically inherent processes and learned processes." I would consider the relevance of this sentence as there is no follow up on why this is important information or how it relates to the rest of the content.
Overall, this is a basic, but sufficient chapter which could be improved by reducing general background theory, focusing more on the specific problem, synthesising rather than describing theory and research, improving the quality of written expression, and making greater use of the potential of the Wikiversity editing environment.
Abbreviate the general theoretical material (e.g., about emotion and about AT) and provide references and links to further information. This would allow more space to apply the theories to the specific topic (AT and emotion) in more detail. As it is, the section "Attachment type's influence on emotion" starts about half through the chapter - it should be the focus earlier.
More examples or case studies would be helpful.
Somewhat integrated with research.
Weak; could be improved by succintly summarising the key points and providing take-home self-help message which address the chapter's focus questions.
Several very useful/relevant research studies are described. They tend to be described one after the other. To improve the review of research, look for patterns and themes and try to synthesise the findings in order to convey a greater depth of understanding.
When describing important research studies, provide some indication of the nature of the method.
When discussing important research findings, indicate the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship.
Some statements are unreferenced (e.g., see the [factual?] tags)
Was the Bowlby (1958) source directly consulted? If not, don't cite it (or use a secondary citation).