Under the heading 'Positive hijack' you have left off the year (APA) after your first mention of the author.
Under ‘Amygdala hijack’ first paragraph – There is a list of information around where the amygdala projects information to, this information might be more accessible presented in a table or using dot-points.
- I was wondering if it may be better to move your "Social Contributions" to your user page rather than have it on your book chapter page? Just a suggestion. You book chapter will look better in my opinion. --Sophia sk16 (discuss • contribs) 05:18, 23 October 2016 (UTC)Reply
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Hello,
I have moved your Amygdala Hijack & Positive Hijack under the Amygdala Hijack in Sport section. I have also changed Prevention into a Main heading rather than a sub heading.
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Avoid having a single sub-section within a section; either add another sub-section or merge the content into the higher level section. -- Jtneill - Talk - c23:23, 21 October 2016 (UTC)Reply
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Could be improved by describing AH with a dramatic, engaging example
Explain the "problem"/challenge
Selection and organisation
Probably start first by describing the AH (this doesn't happen until around the 1 min mark a), then explain some theory and evidence about its role in emotion and implications for sport.
Probably covers too much content overall - be more selective and do a smaller amount of information really well
Well structured.
Theory was well covered.
Research was less well covered.
Include citations about evidence for claims.
Perhaps consider using more illustrative examples.
No citations?
Conclusion
Reasonable, but could remind the viewer what an AH is and emphasise the take-home messages
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The famous examples are great, but move them into the Overview - this will help to engage the reader and provide concrete examples which can then be referred back to when theory and research are discussed. Using at least one of these examples towards the beginning of the multimedia presentation would also be helpful.
The concept is well explained in understandable terms.
The Conclusion offers a succint summary and emphasises solutions.