Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2015/Transtheoretical model of change and motivation

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FYI, the convention on Wikiversity is for lower-cased headings. For example, use: ==Cats and dogs== rather than ==Cats and Dogs== -- Jtneill - Talk - c 08:40, 22 November 2015 (UTC)

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Overall Overall, this is a poor chapter in large part because of the poor quality written expression and that so much of it consists of direct quotes for ideas and information which should be expressed uniquely. The chapter also doesn't clearly address the question (i.e., TM and motivation; it focused on TM) and is written as an essay rather than an online, interactive book chapter. For more feedback see these copyedits and the comments below. The TM and related theories are well described, with a critical approach. More examples could be helpful. Theory No comment Research Research, particularly related to motivation, could be more extensively described. When describing important research studies, provide some indication of the nature of the sample and possibly cultural context. When discussing important research findings, indicate the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship. Written expression Written expression was poor. Write in third person rather than first person (e.g., "we") Some sentences are overly long; rewrite. Check consistency of capitalisation (e.g., Transtheoretical model and Transtheoretical Model) Layout Minimal use of tables, figures, links etc. Spelling Use Australian spelling (e.g., hypothesize -> hypothesise) Grammar and proofreading The grammar of some sentences needs to be improved for the written expression to be of professional standard (e.g., see the tags) APA style Direct quotes need page numbers. Direct quotes are over-used. Provide unique expression. Check and correct the APA style formatting of in-text citations. Add APA style captions to tables and figures.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 08:40, 22 November 2015 (UTC)

Multimedia feedback

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Overall Overall, this is a very basic presentation. Structure and content The presentation focuses on theory. Consider adding more research. Consider adding some examples. Communication Audio is well-paced. Create more slides to accompany the audio - the presentation relies fundamentally on audio, with a very small number of slides and very limited visuals. Consider including images. Production quality A copyright license for the presentation is not indicated (e.g., in the description or in the presentation slides). No link is provided back to the book chapter. Rename the title so that it is more descriptive and meaningful (e.g., it doesn't mention motivation). Fill out the description field (e.g., brief description of presentation, license details, link back to chapter).

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 00:53, 26 November 2015 (UTC)