Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2015/Texting while driving motivation

Chapter review and feedback

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Overall Overall, this is a solid chapter which would benefit by being rewritten in order to improve the quality of written expression. For more feedback see [ these copyedits] and the comments below. Theory Theory is reasonably well covered. Addition of case studies or additional examples could be helpful. Research Research is reasonably well covered. Some statements were unreferenced (e.g., see the tags) When describing important research studies, provide some indication of the nature of the sample and possibly cultural context. When discussing important research findings, indicate the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship. Written expression Written expression could be improved. The Overview doesn't mention driving!? Some paragraphs are overly long. Each paragraph should communicate one key idea in three to five sentences. The Conclusion is brief; expand to summarise key theoretical perspectives and research findings, and offer take-home messages. The quality of written expression could be improved (e.g., see where clarification templates have been added to the page). Avoid directional referencing (e.g., above, below, as previously mentioned). Layout See earlier comments about heading casing There is no use of images or tables. Learning features The chapter makes no use of interwiki links. Quiz questions are used effectively to encourage reader engagement. Spelling Spelling could be improved (e.g., see the tags). Grammar and proofreading The grammar of many sentences needs to be improved for the written expression to be of professional standard (e.g., see the tags). Check and correct the use of ownership apostrophes (e.g., individuals vs. individual's vs. individuals'). APA style The reference list is not in full APA style.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 03:45, 1 December 2015 (UTC)

Multimedia feedback

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Overall Overall, this is a basic, but sufficient presentation. Structure and content Some theory is covered. More research could be covered. Perhaps consider using more illustrative examples. Some take-home messages are suggested. Communication Visuals are basic slides/text. Consider incorporating diagrams/pictures. Check and correct grammar of transcript. Present in the third person (i.e., avoid "I", "my", "we" etc.) because the presentation should be about the topic, not the presenter. Audio is well-paced. Visuals are easy to read. Consider using greater intonation to enhance engagement. Production quality The presentation should stand alone without the viewer having to go to the book chapter. Audio has a lot of white noise - review microphone set-up. Rename the title so that it includes the subtitle (and matches the book chapter) - the student number of the presenter is not of interest to an international viewer. Fill out the description field (e.g., brief description of presentation, link back to the book chapter, and license details). A copyright license for the presentation is not indicated (i.e., in the description or in the presentation slides). No link is provided back to the book chapter.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 03:53, 3 December 2015 (UTC)