Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2015/Suicidal terrorism motivation

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Looking great so far![edit]

Hi, your book chapter is coming along really well. Your topic is similar in some ways to mine (Motivation in afterlife belief), but most notably in our joint reference to Terror Management Theory. Your page is a really good companion site to mine on the aspect of the TMT that explains inter-religion conflict (I’ll be focussing more on the other aspects), so I will link to your page for a full account. One article that I have found (I’ll probably use it too, but that shouldn’t be an issue) that you might find useful is this one by Vail et al. http://psr.sagepub.com.ezproxy.canberra.edu.au/content/14/1/84. I hope this helps! Happy writing, Hayley U3017556 (discusscontribs) 23:32, 16 October 2015 (UTC)

This is such an interesting topic and I look forward to learning more. I've made a few minor edits throughout your page to add commas to your in-text citations to ensure they adhere to APA formatting requirements. Good luck! U3036568 (discusscontribs) 00:56, 10 October 2015 (UTC)

Looks like an interesting topic, you may want to have a look at 'The Australian Government’s Countering Violent Extremism Strategy', or 'Australia's Regional Summit to Counter Violent Extremism' for your section regarding practical application. Information can be found at these links; http://www.ag.gov.au/cvesummit, http://www.livingsafetogether.gov.au/aboutus/Pages/countering-violent-extremism-strategy.aspx. U3100474 (discusscontribs)u3100474

This is coming along really well! Have you thought about including information relating to terror management theory? This articles explores terror management with a focus on the effect mortality salience has on our reactions to those who violate or uphold cultural values.:Rosenblatt, A., Greenberg, J., Solomon, S., Pyszczynski, T., & Lyon, D. (1989). Evidence for terror management theory: I. The effects of mortality salience on reactions to those who violate or uphold cultural values. Journal of personality and social psychology, 57(4), 681. U3100474 (discusscontribs) 03:04, 20 October 2015 (UTC)u3100474

Using quotes[edit]

Hey, remember when you directly quote something you need the page number that you got that quote from!! Sounds SUPER interesting! Can't wait to see what else you put up! :)

Regards, Bobbie U3096609 (discusscontribs) 02:37, 26 September 2015 (UTC)

Hey, just wanted to give you some positive feedback on your book chapter. I really like how you have put a number of sub headings under a major heading. It makes it really clear what specific things you will be discussing, instead of having to search through a big paragraph of information :) (3083783ro (discusscontribs) 02:58, 4 October 2015 (UTC)= u3083783)


Hello. This looks likes an intense topic. It looks great so far as it is well structured and clear. Anti-radicalization information for high school age students comes out in the week or so, so maybe finding if there is enough could be helpful to link. All the best writing. --David James Stevenson (discusscontribs) 11:02, 8 October 2015 (UTC)


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  1. Overall, this is a very strong chapter which could be improved by describing the key research studies in more detail.
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Theory[edit]

  1. Theory is very well described and applied.
  2. A stronger Conclusion section is needed.
  3. Examples were rich and helpful.

Research[edit]

  1. A useful range of research and citations are mentioned.
  2. Key research studies could be described in more detail.

Written expression[edit]

  1. Written expression is generally excellent.
  2. Avoid one sentence paragraphs. A paragraph should typically consist of three to five sentences.
  3. Layout
    1. The chapter is well-structured.
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  4. Learning features
    1. The chapter makes good use of interwiki links to other book chapters and to relevant Wikipedia articles; more links could be added.
  5. Spelling, grammar, and proofreading are excellent.
  6. APA style
    1. The APA style for the reference list is very good; remove issue numbers for seriated journals.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 05:03, 23 November 2015 (UTC)


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  1. Overall, this is a solid presentation.

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  1. Solid structure, with reasonable coverage of theory and research.
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  1. Consider increasing font size and using non-serif font for easier readability.
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  1. Overall, a basic but well produced presentation.
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-- Jtneill - Talk - c 04:17, 26 November 2015 (UTC)