Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2015/Suicidal terrorism motivation

Looking great so far!

Hi, your book chapter is coming along really well. Your topic is similar in some ways to mine (Motivation in afterlife belief), but most notably in our joint reference to Terror Management Theory. Your page is a really good companion site to mine on the aspect of the TMT that explains inter-religion conflict (I’ll be focussing more on the other aspects), so I will link to your page for a full account. One article that I have found (I’ll probably use it too, but that shouldn’t be an issue) that you might find useful is this one by Vail et al. http://psr.sagepub.com.ezproxy.canberra.edu.au/content/14/1/84. I hope this helps! Happy writing, Hayley U3017556 (discuss • contribs) 23:32, 16 October 2015 (UTC)

This is such an interesting topic and I look forward to learning more. I've made a few minor edits throughout your page to add commas to your in-text citations to ensure they adhere to APA formatting requirements. Good luck! U3036568 (discuss • contribs) 00:56, 10 October 2015 (UTC)

Looks like an interesting topic, you may want to have a look at 'The Australian Government’s Countering Violent Extremism Strategy', or 'Australia's Regional Summit to Counter Violent Extremism' for your section regarding practical application. Information can be found at these links; http://www.ag.gov.au/cvesummit, http://www.livingsafetogether.gov.au/aboutus/Pages/countering-violent-extremism-strategy.aspx. U3100474 (discuss • contribs)u3100474

This is coming along really well! Have you thought about including information relating to terror management theory? This articles explores terror management with a focus on the effect mortality salience has on our reactions to those who violate or uphold cultural values.:Rosenblatt, A., Greenberg, J., Solomon, S., Pyszczynski, T., & Lyon, D. (1989). Evidence for terror management theory: I. The effects of mortality salience on reactions to those who violate or uphold cultural values. Journal of personality and social psychology, 57(4), 681. U3100474 (discuss • contribs) 03:04, 20 October 2015 (UTC)u3100474

Using quotes

Hey, remember when you directly quote something you need the page number that you got that quote from!! Sounds SUPER interesting! Can't wait to see what else you put up! :)

Regards, Bobbie U3096609 (discuss • contribs) 02:37, 26 September 2015 (UTC)

Hey, just wanted to give you some positive feedback on your book chapter. I really like how you have put a number of sub headings under a major heading. It makes it really clear what specific things you will be discussing, instead of having to search through a big paragraph of information :) (3083783ro (discuss • contribs) 02:58, 4 October 2015 (UTC)= u3083783)

Hello. This looks likes an intense topic. It looks great so far as it is well structured and clear. Anti-radicalization information for high school age students comes out in the week or so, so maybe finding if there is enough could be helpful to link. All the best writing. --David James Stevenson (discuss • contribs) 11:02, 8 October 2015 (UTC)

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Overall Overall, this is a very strong chapter which could be improved by describing the key research studies in more detail. For more feedback see these copyedits and the comments below. Theory Theory is very well described and applied. A stronger Conclusion section is needed. Examples were rich and helpful. Research A useful range of research and citations are mentioned. Key research studies could be described in more detail. Written expression Written expression is generally excellent. Avoid one sentence paragraphs. A paragraph should typically consist of three to five sentences. Layout The chapter is well-structured. Tables and/or Figures are used effectively. Learning features The chapter makes good use of interwiki links to other book chapters and to relevant Wikipedia articles; more links could be added. Spelling, grammar, and proofreading are excellent. APA style The APA style for the reference list is very good; remove issue numbers for seriated journals.

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Suicidal terrorism motivation chapter feedback

Hi,

I read through this chapter and throughly enjoyed it, particuarly enjoyed the tables, applied examples and information regarding motivational theories. I have left some edits and flags throughout and have tried to leave extra information which can be read via "view history". I wanted to provide feedback of how I felt this chapter could be improved. Firstly, there are a few statements throughout this chapter which need evidence to support the claim, i.e "suicide attacks are occourring on a regular basis in the 21st Century". With evidence this could help to really validify the claims and statements made throughout.

This chapter needs to also be careful of unconscious biases, and tread with caution when discussing the who and why of suicide attacks. This chapter focuses mainly on the religious extermists of the Middle East and in such can perpetuate narratives regarding the correlation between terrorisim and the Middle East. I believe that an addition of other froms of suicide attacks could deepen the understanding of the motivations associated with such attacks, especially from a non-Islamic exteremist perspective. This would further support the theories mentioned and how they can apply across cultures.

Additonally, the last section "Real world applications" implies that the theories provide an understanding as to why people commit these attacks and can in turn assist in creating strategies and policies to decrease the prevelance - I would love to see more expanded in this section, to see how these theories can provide a framework for the policies and strategies.

Finally, the addition of case studies and quizzes would be really effective throughout this chapter, particularly in the theory sections could help the auidence think about the theories in context and test their knowledge and how it applies to each sitaution.

I hope you find my comments helpful!

Georgia GeorgiaH97 (discuss • contribs) 05:55, 13 October 2022 (UTC)