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Hello. What an interesting topic you have. I would suggest you looking at the relationship between money and sex worker motivation. One article I read, suggested that the majority of sex workers do it for the money. Additionally, you could divided sex workers into 4 different categories and explain each one further. The four categories are female escort prostitutes, male escort prostitutes, street prostitute and female clinic prostitutes. You could also look at the health of sex workers and whether that is contributing or inhibiting factor of their motivation. One study I looked at revealed that the majority of sex workers rarely go to a medical practice and have never discussed their worker with a doctor or medical practitioner. You could look at countries where sex work is legal and offer suggestions and policies Australia should implement to keep sex workers safe and healthy. I believe violence is also a huge problem that sex workers face. Another study looked at the adverse view of prostitution, suggesting that sex work actually enhances the individual's capability for sexual pleasure and enjoyed the occupation.

ref: Cohan, D., Lutnick, A., Davidson, P., Cloniger, C., Herlyn, A., Breyer, J., ... & Klausner, J. (2006). Sex worker health: San Francisco style. Sexually transmitted infections, 82(5), 418-422. Kontula, A. (2008). The sex worker and her pleasure. Current Sociology, 56(4), 605-620.

Anyway, just a few ideas. I look forward to reading this very soon :) --U3034876 (discusscontribs) 01:05, 24 October 2015 (UTC)Reply

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FYI, the convention on Wikiversity is for lower-cased headings. For example, use:

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Overall

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  1. Overall, this is a promising chapter which could be improved by providing a stronger review of research about the motivations for sex work, greater integration between theory and research, and better proofreading.
  2. For more feedback see these copyedits and the comments below.
  1. It is surprising that sexual motivation isn't described as amongst the possible motivations for sex work.
  2. General motivational theories are discussed and applied to understanding sex work, but little research evidence is cited to support the application of these theories to sex work.
  3. Incorporate and link to the related book chapters on sexual motivation.
  4. The Reeve textbook is over-used as a citation; use primary, peer-reviewed sources.
  5. The case studies could be used to illustrate the theoretical frameworks suggested to underlie sex work motivation (e.g., Intrinsic/extrinsic motivation might be a useful framework for understanding Case Study 2.
  1. Ideally, include more research about sex work motivation.
  2. Some statements were unreferenced (e.g., see the [factual?] tags)
  3. When describing important research studies, provide some indication of the nature of the sample and possibly cultural context.
  4. When discussing important research findings, indicate the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship.
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    1. Expand the Overview. Revise the focus questions to be more closely aligned with the chapter topic and book theme.
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    3. Some paragraphs are overly long. Each paragraph should communicate one key idea in three to five sentences.
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    1. Use Australian spelling (e.g., hypothesize -> hypothesise).
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    1. The grammar of many sentences needs to be improved for the written expression to be of professional standard (e.g., see the [grammar?] tags).
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    1. Put in-text citations in alphabetical order.
    2. Add APA style captions to tables and figures.
    3. The reference list is not in full APA style.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 22:18, 24 November 2015 (UTC)Reply


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  1. Overall, this is a basic, but sufficient presentation.
  1. Theory was well covered; research less so.
  2. A Conclusion slide summarising the take-home messages / key points in relation to the question (what motivates sex work?) could be helpful.
  1. Basic slide presentation with audio.
  2. Text is quite small; Increase font size to make text easier to read.
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  4. Audio is clear and well-paced.
  1. Rename the title so that it includes the subtitle (and matches the book chapter).
  2. Description is minimal but sufficient (e.g., also include brief description of presentation, license details).
  3. A copyright license for the presentation is not indicated (i.e., in the description or in the presentation slides).

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Suggestions

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Hello! This was a very interesting chapter to read as it looks at a topic that is not easily discussed or appropriately studied in academia due to stigmatisation. As I was reading, I noticed that you did not elaborate on the complicated history of sex work and the impact that has on sex workers today. Sex work has a complicated, harrowing and sad history of how it went from slavery and exploitation in the ancient times, to a means of furthering oppression and control during WW2 (the comfort women and their stories of surviving the conditions of being the Japanese army's sex slaves - see articles: https://link.springer.com/article/10.1007/s12140-016-9260-z, https://link.springer.com/chapter/10.1007/978-3-030-57669-1_4) and how that shaped the way sex work was viewed throughout history until the second and third wave feminist movements of the 1970s and 1990s that led to an increased awareness of sex workers and a call for people having the autonomy to choose to pursue this as a career. This does not even look at the history of brothels, pimps and Sexually Transmitted Diseases that also changed and shaped the sex work industry and has led to what it looks like today. I hope this helps! StutiDoshi1 (discusscontribs) 17:10, 15 August 2024 (UTC)Reply