Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2015/Serial killing motivation

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Hey,

I updated a few grammatical changes, and i dont want to change too much.

You should probably not start so many sentences with but, i also added a video with the top 10 serial killers that i had seen before.

Good luck

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FYI, the convention on Wikiversity is for lower-cased headings. For example, use: ==Cats and dogs== rather than ==Cats and Dogs== -- Jtneill - Talk - c 04:24, 19 November 2015 (UTC)

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-- Jtneill - Talk - c 04:24, 19 November 2015 (UTC)

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-- Jtneill - Talk - c 21:10, 25 November 2015 (UTC)