Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2015/Self-esteem and motivation

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Comment[edit source]

Hi there, I'm just looking to use your chapter as a cross reference for mine. Good luck! :)


Chapter review and feedback

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Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this is a problematic chapter because it doesn't address the topic (self-esteem and motivation) and relies primary on non-peer reviewed sources.
  2. For more feedback see these copyedits and the comments below.

Theory[edit source]

  1. Branden's self-esteem theory is well covered, however it seems that the chapter has been used as a vehicle to summarise his work on self-esteem rather than to address the question based using peer-reviewed psychological literature about the topic.
  2. Helpful examples are provided.

Research[edit source]

  1. No research appears to have been presented.
  2. The Reeve (2015) textbook is over-used as a citation; preferably consult and cite primary, peer-reviewed sources.

Written expression[edit source]

  1. Write in third person rather than first person (e.g., "we")
  2. Layout
    1. Use default heading styles; remove bold
    2. Add bullet-points for See also and External links.
    3. There is minimal use of Tables and/or Figures.
    4. Figure captions should be more explanatory.
  3. Learning features
    1. Add Interwiki links (e.g., to relevant Wikipedia articles and other Wikiversity book chapters) to make the text more interactive.
    2. Quiz questions could be used to encourage reader engagement.
  4. Spelling, grammar, and proofreading are excellent.
  5. APA style
    1. Add APA style captions to tables and figures.
    2. The reference list is not in full APA style.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 21:05, 30 November 2015 (UTC)[reply]


Multimedia feedback

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Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this is a basic, but sufficient presentation.

Structure and content[edit source]

  1. The content is quite abstract. Consider including practical examples.
  2. The content is not demonstrably based on psychological theory and research; the content seems to address a different topic (e.g., What is Branden's theory of self-esteem?) and, critically, there is little mention of the relationship between self-esteem and motivation.
  3. There is little review of research evidence.
  4. A Conclusion slide summarising the take-home messages / key points could be helpful.

Communication[edit source]

  1. Audio is well-paced.
  2. Basic text-based slides are used as visuals.
  3. Consider using greater intonation to enhance engagement.

Production quality[edit source]

  1. Audio recording quality is a little 'tinny' (check microphone set-up).
  2. Rename the title so that it includes the subtitle (and matches the book chapter).

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 02:36, 3 December 2015 (UTC)[reply]

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