Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2015/Self-esteem and happiness

Heading casing

FYI, the convention on Wikiversity is for lower-cased headings. For example, use: ==Cats and dogs== rather than ==Cats and Dogs== -- Jtneill - Talk - c 04:15, 19 October 2015 (UTC)

Feedback

Hi! What an awesome topic and I really like the way you've structured the content. You've made it a pleasure to read. Only suggestion I have is to maybe make your chapter a bit more interactive for the reader. Perhaps add in a quiz to test what they've learnt, maybe a link to a self esteem measure online (Maybe a site that uses this scale of self-esteem [1] , or a case study/anecdote to make it more relateable? But overall, really awesome job so far! Can't wait to read the finished product U3096454! (discuss • contribs) 13:18, 23 October 2015 (UTC)

Hi! Nice chapter! I like the lovely photo of the elderly lady at the beginning and how happy she looks. I like how you've asked a few questions as you've opened up the chapter, to get the reader thinking. I think it could benefit from a few more images instead of just writing, maybe adding some colour to the table could brighten it up too. Someone posted a really cool link to a heap of different codes for colours you can use in your table: https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/List_of_colors:_A%E2%80%93F After where it says 'wikitable' (in the edit source tab) at the beginning of your actual table, just put 'style="background: #place code for whatever colour you would like it to be here". Consider a few more external links. Other than that, looks really good :) Well done. --Bt1718 (discuss • contribs) 12:50, 24 October 2015 (UTC)

Hey thereǃ You write wellǃ Really enjoyed your chapter. I have made minor wikiedits regarding sentence structure, and fragment revising, and removed contractions. I was wondering if you could provide a page number for the line you quoted? Great job and good luckǃ--U3059210 (discuss • contribs) 00:34, 24 October 2015 (UTC)

Hi, your chapter looks good. I would recommend adding more pictures and more charts if possible and maybe a quiz to have the reader become more interactive. CheersUu3148421 (discuss • contribs) 07:53, 24 October 2015 (UTC)

Hey, so far your chapter looks really well structured. My advice would be to add some more pictures or a quiz to test the readers understanding of your topic. Good luck on finishing up !!

Hi, I thought your chapter was great! the only thing I would suggest was just to have conclusion at the end rather than summary and conclusion. I also think Mr smiley is a great touch. good luck :) U3040525 (discuss • contribs) 06:27, 25 October 2015 (UTC)

Chapter review and feedback

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Overall Overall, this is a strong, all-round chapter which makes effective use of the wiki environment and provides an integrated readable synthesis of psychological theory and research on the topic. For more feedback see these copyedits and the comments below. Theory Theory is well covered, with the differences and similarities between the target constructs considered. Consider adding more examples or case studies. Research Research is well covered. When describing important research studies, provide some indication of the nature of the sample and possibly cultural context. When discussing important research findings, indicate the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship. Written expression Written expression is very good. Avoid one sentence paragraphs. A paragraph should typically consist of three to five sentences. Layout See earlier comments about heading casing The chapter is well-structured. Tables and/or Figures are used effectively. Learning features Some links to Wikipedia and/or Wikiversity articles were added as external links - these should be changed to interwiki links Quiz questions are used effectively to encourage reader engagement. Grammar and proofreading Add hyphen for self esteem -> self-esteem Check and correct the use of ownership apostrophes (e.g., individuals vs. individual's vs. individuals'). APA style The reference list is not in full APA style.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 06:27, 23 November 2015 (UTC)

Multimedia feedback

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Overall Overall, this is a basic, but sufficient presentation. Structure and content How strong is the relationship between SE and happiness? Ideally, include the relevant citations alongside the corresponding key point. Consider adding a slide with a conclusion/take-home messages. The four theoretical perspectives were helpful. Which one do you think is most correct, based on research evidence? Well structured. Perhaps consider using some illustrative examples. A conclusion slide summarising the take-home messages could be helpful. Communication The slides could be improved by presenting less text (e.g., summarise the points). The statements displayed tend to be full sentences rather than key points. I suggest using less first person (e.g., "I", "my" etc.) because the presentation is not about you - it is about the topic and the best answer to the question from the point of view of psychological science. Audio is clear and well-paced. Audio is too fast to easily comprehend - consider slowing down. Production quality Audio quality is rather crackly - check microphone set-up. Rename the title (to remove multimedia presentation) Description is minimal but sufficient. Include the presentation license details and image attributions.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 08:36, 26 November 2015 (UTC)