Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2015/Selective mutism and emotional well-being

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FYI, the convention on Wikiversity is for lower-cased headings. For example, use: ==Cats and dogs== rather than ==Cats and Dogs== -- Jtneill - Talk - c 23:53, 7 October 2015 (UTC)

Hi. You book chapter topic sounds really interesting. I would think about adding a section on children and mutism as i feel there is a genetic/hereditary component to it. I look forward to reading more about your chapter soon! Ive attached a good reference you may want to use! Black, B., & Uhde, T. W. (1995). Psychiatric characteristics of children with selective mutism: a pilot study. Journal of the American Academy of Child & Adolescent Psychiatry, 34(7), 847-856.

Goodluck! --U3034876 (discuss • contribs) 00:54, 20 October 2015 (UTC)

Hi thereǃ Interesting topicǃ Few suggestions that could make the paper betterː Your headings are a bit wordy at the moment; I recommend theseː 1. Instead of saying "What it is not (Misconceptions)" just say "Misconceptions" or "Myths" or "Common Myths"--sounds catchierǃ 2. For subheading 2.4 maybe its better to say "Comparing selective & traumatic mutism" 3. I found this handout sort of article which provides some great charts near the end; you could maybe add this as an external link or use the charts as an image/s when you discuss the SCAT http://www.selectivemutismcenter.org/media_library/whatissm.pdf. 4. I think it's best to move the diagnostic criteria to the paragraph where you first talk of Selective Mutism as a condition; that will help the reader know earlier in the chapter what the disorder entails. 5. You may also like to talk about how parents can notice the signs and symptoms earlier and the strategies they can use to help their child. I really hope that helpsǃ--U3059210 (discuss • contribs) 23:28, 23 October 2015 (UTC)

Hello. Your structure looks like it all makes sense. I would get your content in asap so people can read and edit wording and you end up getting a better idea of page layout. I started off with way to many headings and ended up refining some as I went, but it depends on how relevant and important the sections are to getting your point across. I will log back in tomorrow afternoon and help a little with editing advice. All the best writing, interesting topic choice. David James Stevenson (discuss • [[Special:Contributions/David James Stevenson|contribs]]) 04:38, 24 October 2015 (UTC)

More feedback

Hi Kaisha, good job so far the set out flows really well. Its obviously not finished yet so you were probably going to add these things anyway but just in case:

• Maybe add a reference in your first paragraph of the overview.
• I think if we link to other websites as you have under the “selective mutism” section. It has to go under a “See also” section which goes last, even after the references.
• Might have to add a references in the “shyness” section.
• Under the “emotional well being section” you wrote “well-being refers to a positive mental health”. Maybe change to “refers to positive mental health” so delete the “a”.
• All the links in the “behavioural therapy” section could go in your “see also” section at the end.

Good job 

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Overall Overall, this is a solid chapter which could be improved by being completed. For more feedback see these copyedits and the comments below. Theory Theory is well covered. Perhaps the case study could be extended, to include a positive outcome through appropriate support and treatment. Research Research is well covered. Some statements were unreferenced (e.g., see the tags) When describing important research studies, provide some indication of the nature of the sample and possibly cultural context. When discussing important research findings, indicate the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship. Written expression Some sections are incomplete. Avoid one sentence paragraphs. A paragraph should typically consist of three to five sentences. Expand the summary in the Conclusion and add take-home messages. Layout The chapter is well-structured, however avoid sections with only one sub-section. A section should have no sub-sections or at least two sub-sections. Add bullet-points for See also and External links. Figure captions should be more explanatory. Learning features The chapter makes minimal use of interwiki links - add more links to enhance interactivity. For example, link to the book chapter about shyness. Quiz questions are used effectively to encourage reader engagement. Spelling, grammar, and proofreading are excellent. APA style The APA style for the reference list is very good; remove issue numbers for seriated journals. Add APA style captions to tables and figures (e.g., italicise Figure X). Direct quotes need page numbers. Put in-text citations in alphabetical order.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 22:50, 1 December 2015 (UTC)

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Overall Overall, this is a basic, but sufficient presentation. Structure and content Consider starting with a very simple definition of selective mutism, the move to a more detailed description followed the effects on well-being, and what can be done. Otherwise well structured. Research was well covered (include citations), theory was less well covered. Include citations about evidence for claims. A Conclusion slide summarising the take-home messages / key points could be helpful. Communication Text is slides is too small - use larger font size and non-serif font type to increase readability. Slides are text-heavy and difficult to digest along with the narration. Audio is well-paced. See this article for more information about speaking rates. Production quality Overall, simple production. Audio has some white, background noise - review microphone set-up. Description is minimal but sufficient. Also consider including a brief description of presentation, license details, and image attributions. The copyright licenses and sources for the images used is not indicated - there may have been copyright violation unless you own the copyright to the images used or these were public domain images. A copyright license for the presentation is not indicated (i.e., in the description or in the presentation slides).

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 23:15, 2 December 2015 (UTC)