Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2015/Rape motivation

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Hey! Your chapter structure looks really good! I like the included diagram in the middle. Maybe you could include a quiz or something interactive towards the end. You could even talk a bit about recurrence/the likelihood of offending again after incarceration. Good luck! :) U3097090 (discusscontribs) 03:11, 24 October 2015 (UTC)

Hey, i was just looking through your book chapter, it looks really good so far. I was thinking you could add in a history of spousal rape, i am doing a law course as well and i remember hearing that until recently rape within marriage was not illegal, along these lines you could also talk about other countries if you have enough space and how some people use rape as a weapon against women in other countries. Good luck!!

Comments[edit source]

Hi, I must admit i would never have thought of this topic. Its quite confronting. Could i suggest looking at the difference in attack or assault compared to rape. u116040

Hi mate, not sure if you are aware but I can't access your page because it only comes up with the chapters titles. I had this also because I set up my page initially in my username page instead of the book chapter page. I may be wrong of course because I'm struggling with all this myself and you most probably know what you're doing. Or you simply haven't filled in those paragraphs of your chapter yet. May be the case considering I can read your overview. But just in case, you will have to copy it across to the book chapter page from your user name page (if that makes sense, which it probably doesn't lol). To test what I'm talking about, once you are finished, click on your topic from the list and see if the text comes up without you clicking edit. If it does, you're on the right track. --David M&E7124 (discusscontribs) 1414, 18 October 2015 (UTC)

Hello! I think you may find the Drive theory useful for your topic. It focuses on how individuals take whatever action necessary, after the increase in a state of tension, in order to return to a state of relaxation and equilibrium! Good luck and hope this helps you a bit :) --U3034876 (discusscontribs) 00:11, 20 October 2015 (UTC)

Hello, deep topic! Have you considered the aspects and perspectives on "evil"? Motivations theories, especially around the Humanistic perspective could elaborate on definitions of evil. As a lot say it might be a environmental upbringing consequence? Ccgmjb (discusscontribs) 04:53, 20 October 2015 (UTC)

Hey! Interesting topic, looking forward to seeing how your page progresses. Just a few comments: Maybe consider referring to some high profile rape cases, such as the Delhi gang rape incident which occured in India in 2012 (there is a really confronting but fascinating documentary on it called 'India's Daughter' which was on YouTube at one point) and you can consider using this as an example of how societal views on women impact the prevelance of rape culture in that society. It might also be worth including a section on the importance of educating young children (particularly boys) on the importance of respecting women. I also noticed some basic grammatical errors but didn't want to directly edit the section so here is my edited version:

Defining & knowing rape (maybe change this to 'Defining rape' it's much catchier)

The Rape Abuse and Incest National Network currently defines rape as any oral, vaginal, anal penetration that is forced upon another, irrespective of their sex or sexual orientation, using any body part or object (Aronowitz, Lambert, & Davidoff, 2012). Women are not the sole victims of rape, however men are most often found to be the perpetrators.

Historically, a major caveat associated with rape literature has been that most of the knowledge on behaviour and characteristics of rapists, developmental precursors of sex offending, and underlying motivations, were sourced from incarcerated rapists (Lisak, 2008). This is not surprising since the majority of rapes never reach the judicial system, nor do all rapists get prosecuted. Researchers have attempted to curb this limitation by studying non-incarcerated rapists, and the findings suggest similarities between the two demographics(Lisak & Roth, 1990). --u3105740 (discusscontribs) 23:28, 22 October 2015 (UTC)

Hello! I have found a few more theories and explained them for you to use on your book chapter!

Drive Theory[edit source]

The drive theory can help explain the motivation behind why people commit assaults, such as rape. The drive theory basically assumes that people take whatever action necessary, caused by a negative state which happens when psychological needs are not being met, in order to resume to a relaxation state.Thus, by using the explanation of the drive theory, people commit rape because their innate psychological needs are not being met which is causing tension within and the act of rape returns them to a relaxation state. Ref: Anderson, C. A., & Bushman, B. J. (2002). Human aggression. Psychology, 53 (1), 27.

Biological theory[edit source]

The biological theory explains the motivation of rape is due to trait different which influence the selection or differential reproductive success.

Developmental theory[edit source]

The developmental theory explains that rape occurs due to developmental events which have affected the perpetrator's learning. Further research has found that men who commit rape have come from rough developmental backgrounds, including limited and lacking social relationships and have been taught that manipulation, violence, assault and coercion are legitimate ways of conducting and maintaining social relationships.

Ref: Ellis, L. (1991). A synthesized (biosocial) theory of rape. Journal of Consulting and Clinical Psychology, 59(5), 631.

IF you look a little further, you will find multiple theories explain why people commit acts of rape! Good luck with your book chapter and I am looking forward to reading it :) --U3034876 (discusscontribs) 02:56, 23 October 2015 (UTC)

Hi! Awesome chapter. Such a sensitive topic to discuss, but you've done well. Love the diagram in the middle, really grabs your attention. Nice mix of colour in between the writing too. It looks like it flows well now that you've changed a few things around. Could I suggest maybe positioning the 'Predictors of Rape' to being further up the page? It seems like it would fit in better when you're defining rape and how to identify it. Other than that, looks really informative :) Keep up the good work. --Bt1718 (discusscontribs) 9:58, 24 October 2015 (UTC)

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-- Jtneill - Talk - c 05:04, 21 October 2015 (UTC)

Hey! Great book chapter on a topic that has been getting a lot of attention lately! I noticed you haven't completed the real world applications and tips to reduce your risk of assault sections. I would recommend looking at the work of Clementine Ford here in Australia, who shares some strong views and will be a good starting point for articles on the topic (she is always very up-to-date with everything that is going on). Hope this helps! Well done and good luck U3048330 (discusscontribs)

Thank you[edit source]

Hi everyone, I don't know if you will end up coming back to this again, but thought I would leave you all a note to say how grateful I am that you took the time to read and critique my paper. I would have individually thanked you but not everyone created a userpage where I could thank. I really appreciate your feedback. Thank you againǃ -Adiba --U3059210 (discusscontribs) 08:49, 1 November 2015 (UTC)

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Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this is a fantastic chapter which makes effective use of the wiki environment and provides an integrated, indepth, but very readable synthesis of psychological theory and research on the topic.
  2. For more feedback see these copyedits and the comments below.

Theory[edit source]

  1. Theory is particularly well covered. Most impressive is the critical integration.

Research[edit source]

  1. Research is very well reviewed and integrated with theory.
  2. Rate of rape statistics need a timeframe.

Written expression[edit source]

  1. Written expression is excellent, although I suggested many minor changes in my copyedits to improve further.
    1. Avoid directional referencing (e.g., above, below, as previously mentioned).
    2. Avoid one sentence paragraphs. A paragraph should typically consist of three to five sentences.
    3. Avoid colloquial/emotive language/tone (e.g., "rampancy of rape").
    4. Rape crisis support box removed because it is not relevant to the vast majority of the target international audience.
  2. Layout is exellent.
    1. Avoid sections with only one sub-section. A section should have no sub-sections or at least two sub-sections.
  3. Learning features
    1. Add more interwiki links to other book chapters and to relevant Wikipedia articles.
    2. Quiz questions are used effectively to encourage reader engagement.
  4. Spelling, grammar, and proofreading are excellent.
  5. APA style
    1. Put in-text citations in alphabetical order.
    2. The reference list is not in full APA style.
    3. Add APA style captions to tables.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 11:32, 27 November 2015 (UTC)

Multimedia feedback

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Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this is a well prepared and executed presentation.

Structure and content[edit source]

  1. Use the Overview to set up the problem to be solved (the question i.e., the subtitle for the book chapter).
  2. Well structured.
  3. Theory was well covered.
  4. Include citations about evidence for claims.
  5. Perhaps consider using more illustrative examples.
  6. Excellent take-home messages.

Communication[edit source]

  1. Audio is clear, but too fast to easily comprehend - consider slowing down. See this article for more information about speaking rates.
  2. Visuals are reasonably clear and easy to read.
  3. The combination of images and text is effective.

Production quality[edit source]

  1. Overall, well produced using simple tools.
  2. Appropriately licensed.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 05:43, 2 December 2015 (UTC)