Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2015/Pole dancing motivation

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Hi, I’ve been pole dancing for a few years now. Like Iga suggested, there is no connection for me between pole dancing and it’s more traditional origins. I do it because I love it; it’s really fun, challenging and great exercise. It is purely intrinsically motivated, no external motivators. I do it because I enjoy it, and it challenges my need for competence. When I work hard and master a new move or perform a move I could not do before I feel like I have accomplished something. It’s also very obvious when you have missed a week or more as your level of ability drops, that is, it requires regular effort, and, if they slip, hard work to get back to the level of skill and ability required. So, you could look at intrinsic vs. extrinsic motivation – I put effort into it as I am intrinsically motivated. And at the psychological need for competence – it always pushes and challenges me, and I feel great when I master a move or routine. (I guess in this sense it can increase my self-esteem) Maybe also relatedness – interaction with others in the class, and I enjoy it more when my friend also does it. Could also look at goal setting and striving – goals are difficult and specific (eg. master this move), and there is a motivating agent (discrepancy) when the present and ideal states do not match (eg. I could do this move 2 weeks ago, now I cannot, I want to work on my strength or abilities to be able to do it again) Hope this helps, U3100755 (discusscontribs) 12:23, 10 October 2015 (UTC)

Hey just wanted to suggest looking at all the aspects of pole dancing and how it as a recreation fitness activity and look away from the typical meaning of the activity. Maybe mention it but focus on the fitness aspect of it. All the best ~Iga.leszczynska

Hey Afi, just thinking that if you want to reinforce the fitness aspects of pole dancing you could include competitive aspects as a possible avenue of motivation. If you included an interview with a professional competitive pole dancer then that could strengthen your argument. Good Luck!, Connorkaye (discusscontribs) 01:38, 16 October 2015 (UTC)

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Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this is a very good chapter on a topic with minimal psychological theory and research literature.
  2. The chapter is over the maximum word-count and should be abbreviated.
  3. Overall, this is a chapter which could be improved by .
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Theory[edit source]

  1. PD history and development is well described, with examples.
  2. Basic motivational theory is explained and applied to PD, with examples.

Research[edit source]

  1. Research has limited coverage and application to PD.

Written expression[edit source]

  1. Written expression is generally excellent.
    1. Avoid sections with only one paragraph. A section should have at least two paragraphs.
    2. Avoid one sentence paragraphs. A paragraph should typically consist of three to five sentences.
  2. The chapter is well structured.
  3. Learning features
    1. Add Interwiki links (e.g., to relevant Wikipedia articles and other Wikiversity book chapters) to make the text more interactive.
    2. Quiz questions could be used to encourage reader engagement.
  4. Spelling, grammar, and proofreading are excellent.
  5. APA style
    1. Add APA style captions to tables and figures.
    2. The reference list is not in full APA style.
    3. Check and correct the APA style for how to report numbers (Numbers under 10 should be written in words (e.g., five); numbers 10 and over should be written in numbers (e.g., 10)).
    4. The APA style for the reference list is very good; remove issue numbers for seriated journals.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 20:24, 30 November 2015 (UTC)

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Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this is a basic, but sufficient presentation.

Structure and content[edit source]

  1. The 1st minute (about PD) and the 2nd minute (about Motivation theory) could be abbreviated to allow greater concentration on the topic (Motivation for PD).
  2. Include citations.
  3. Perhaps consider using more illustrative examples.
  4. A Conclusion slide summarising the take-home messages / key points could be helpful.
  5. No research is reviewed (e.g.,

Communication[edit source]

  1. Audio is well-paced.
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Production quality[edit source]

  1. Basic production.
  2. Rename the title so that it includes the subtitle (and matches the book chapter).
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  4. The copyright licenses for the images used is not indicated - there may have been copyright violation unless you own the copyright to the images used or these were public domain images.
  5. No active hyperlink is provided back to the book chapter.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 23:55, 2 December 2015 (UTC)