Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2015/PhD drop-out and motivation

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Hey so I think it looks good so far. Just one nit-picky thing. In the introduction in which you say "The Doctorate of Philosophy is a growing academic choice for students interested in specialised research across the world. The problem is that across the world students are struggling to complete their research and the rates of drop-out are alarmingly high (Wright & Cochrane, 2000)." It seems fairly repetitive to use "Across the world" twice. Perhaps revise it to say something like " The Doctorate of Philosophy is an increasingly popular area of academia for students interested in specialised research, on a domestic and international scale. Despite its popularity, students across the world are struggling to complete their research and as a result drop-out rates are alarmingly high." Just a suggestion! Other than that it looks like it's tracking well. U3052443 (discuss • contribs) 07:43, 25 October 2015 (UTC)

Hey, so your page looks good so far but i think you should remove the Please note section right under the first test yourself heading. I dont think its necessary to explain that the results are going to be shown afterwards. otherwise goodjob! Uu3148421 (discuss • contribs) 07:45, 24 October 2015 (UTC)

Hi, nice topic. I think your format has been done very well so far. All the headings seem to flow well into the next. I really like the media link to the presentation at the beginning which is almost like an interactive overview (I assume is still being completed?) The only thing I can say so far is that it would be good if you included some reasons PhD students have given for why they have dropped out, either in quote form or a list- that may give some indication of whether their decision was based on extrinsic or intrinsic motivational factors. The quizzes are well done with the scoring system. Also, I realise you are still completing your chapter but don't forget to add in relevant links to make your chapter more interactive. Looking forward to reading more as you add more content. All the best. Candice--CJBush03 (discuss • contribs) 10:02, 23 October 2015 (UTC)

Hey! Interesting topic. I like how it's addressed at PHD students directly. Other chapters include quizzes, but yours is done in a different way that gets your target audience thinking. I like how you're going to look into intrinsic and extrinsic motivation, it really ties into what we've been learning in class. Finding motivation can be hard and I know you're going into how you can encourage it in students, but maybe suggesting things that don't specifically relate to motivation and instead can relate to the opposite. For instance, usually taking a study break or starting an assignment later can be a bad thing/get a student distracted, but maybe encouraging students to do this every so often, even if it's to go for a 10 min walk or to stop and discuss how they're feeling with someone can help open their mind and put them on the right track to finishing their studies. This could link into your external links where you could provide services for students who need to get advice from someone about their studies. Another thing is don't forget to add figure numbers under your images! Good luck :) --Bt1718 (discuss • contribs) 11:19, 24 October 2015 (UTC)

Hi there! Interesting topic choice :) I enjoyed reading your chapter, and have a few suggestions: I feel that you didn't really give a solid definition of introjected regulation, despite this being the major focus of one of your sections. A succinct but brief definition would help that section. You also seem to be lacking any solid theories as to why PhD students drop out, and have just listed other motivational factors. You might want to consider including at least 1 theory in there, such as the need theories of motivation. These theories are often applied to work motivation, but could be applied to the PhD or study areas. I enjoyed your quizzes very much, but if you're running out of words to hit the 4,400 word limit, I would consider having the second quiz as "questions to think about". This will cut words for the quiz intro and the answers, as it could just be an area where the reader sees the questions but doesn't physically answer them on your page. Good job overall, hope this helps!! --U3081677 (discuss • contribs) 00:26, 24 October 2015 (UTC)

Heading casing

FYI, the convention on Wikiversity is for lower-cased headings. For example, use: ==Cats and dogs== rather than ==Cats and Dogs== -- Jtneill - Talk - c 11:16, 23 October 2015 (UTC)

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Overall Overall, this is a chapter which could be improved by . Overall, this is a fantastic chapter which makes effective use of the wiki environment and provides an integrated, indepth, but very readable synthesis of psychological theory and research on the topic. For more feedback see these copyedits and the comments below. Theory Theory coverage is reasonable. The focus, however, seems to be on completion rather than drop-out - the latter is the topic. Research Some research is considered, but the review could be more indepth. Written expression Written expression Remove fluff words and phrases (i.e., that mean nothing), such as "Without saying too much" and "It should be mentioned". Write in third person rather than first person (e.g., "we") Avoid directional referencing (e.g., above, below, as previously mentioned). The quality of written expression could be improved (e.g., see where clarification templates have been added to the page). The chapter would benefit from a more developed Overview and Conclusion, with clearer focus question(s) (Overview) and take-home self-help message for each focus question (Conclusion). Learning features Provide more integration/links to other related book chapters, such as on procrastination and achievement motivation. Some links to Wikipedia and/or Wikiversity articles were added as external links - these should be changed to interwiki links Separate internal from external links in the See also and External link sections respective. Grammar and proofreading Change Ph.D. to PhD Remove colons inserted to indent paragraphs (use default style). More proofreading is needed (e.g. use capitals for the first letter of sentences). APA style Avoid over use of secondary citations; consult original sources. The APA style for the reference list is very goode.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 04:07, 24 November 2015 (UTC)

Multimedia feedback

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Overall Overall, this is a basic, but sufficient presentation. Structure and content This is a practical, interesting self-help presentation, but it lacks sufficient focus on theory and particularly research. Include citations about evidence for claims. Perhaps consider using more illustrative examples. A conclusion slide summarising the take-home messages could be helpful. Point the last slides to a reference list, image attributions, and the copyright info. Communication Remove the background music - it makes it more difficult to concentrate on the narration and visuals. Audio is too fast to easily comprehend - consider slowing down. See this article for more information about speaking rates. Audio is clear. Visuals are clear and easy to read. Production quality Effective use of Prezi. Rename the title so that it matches the book chapter title and subtitle. The copyright licenses and sources for the images used is not indicated - there may have been copyright violation unless you own the copyright to the images used or these were public domain images.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 13:40, 26 November 2015 (UTC)