Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2015/Norepinephrine and emotional disorders

Heading casing

FYI, the convention on Wikiversity is for lower-cased headings. For example, use: ==Cats and dogs== rather than ==Cats and Dogs== -- Jtneill - Talk - c 02:24, 24 November 2015 (UTC)

Chapter review and feedback

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Overall Overall, this is a strong chapter which could be improved by simplifying and focusing on addressing the topic with the word count (the chapter is well over the maximum word count @ ~5700 words). For more feedback see these copyedits and the comments below. Theory Theory is well covered and integrated with research, but would benefit from being simplified. Research Research is well covered and cited, but would benefit from being simplified. Written expression The written expression is overly wordy/complex - to improve, simplify. Some paragraphs are overly long. Each paragraph should communicate one key idea in three to five sentences. The chapter is well structured. See earlier comments about heading casing Learning features Add Interwiki links (e.g., to relevant Wikipedia articles and other Wikiversity book chapters) to make the text more interactive. Quiz questions could be used to encourage reader engagement. Grammar and proofreading Several sentences are not grammatically correct because they are missing commas. APA style Check and correct the APA style formatting of in-text citations (e.g., et al.). Add APA style captions to tables and figures. The reference list is not in full APA style.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 02:24, 24 November 2015 (UTC)

Multimedia feedback

The accompanying multimedia presentation has been marked according to the marking criteria. Marks are available via the unit's Moodle site. Written feedback is provided below, plus see the general feedback page. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below. If you would like further clarification about the marking or feedback, contact the unit convener.

Overall Overall, this is a solid presentation. Structure and content Consider including a title slide. Include citations about evidence for claims. Key theory and research content is presented. Excellent pharmacological and non-pharmacological suggestions for regulation of healthy NE. Communication Audio pace is too fast to easily comprehend - consider slowing down. The background music is distracting - music can be helpful to engage the viewer at the beginning and end, but usually it is best if muted while narrating. Visuals are clear and easy to read. The combination of images and text is effective. Production quality Rename the title to include the subtitle. Fill out the description field (e.g., brief description of presentation, link back to the book chapter, license details, and possibly include references and image attributions). The copyright licenses and sources for the images used is not indicated - there may have been copyright violation unless you own the copyright to the images used or these were public domain images. A copyright license for the presentation is not indicated (i.e., in the description or in the presentation slides). No link is provided back to the book chapter.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 12:51, 26 November 2015 (UTC)