Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2015/Neurobiology of romantic love

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Discussion[edit source]

This looks to be the beginnings of a fantastic chapter and is so interesting when we put subjective experience together with neuropsychological research. As I was looking through the structure, I thought, how is romantic love distinguished from jealous love? or zealous love? I don't know if you were focussing on this or not, but a comparison of different types of love, what they look like, and how they differ might greatly help you to distinguish romantic love from others? Can't wait to see it develop :) Ccgmjb (discusscontribs) 23:18, 8 October 2015 (UTC)

Hello, You are doing a similar topic to me, so I thought I would provide you with a researcher who's work I have read and found highly relevant, look up the work by Helen E. Fisher

Here is a Link:


Hi there, Your book chapter is extremely fascinating. I like all of the visuals you have incorporated into your chapter, it is helpful for me to have a better understanding of certain ideas. Similar to the person above I am doing my book chapter on a similar topic. I found the book Do Gentelmen Really Prefer Blondes?: Bodies, Behavior, and Brains-- the Science behind Sex, Love, and Attraction By Jodi Pincott to be extremely helpful and it also gave out of the box answers to certain questions, such as " Do Gentelmen Really Prefer Blondes" and give a scientific answer for.

Minor edits[edit source]

Hi there! Your page is looking good so far! A general suggestion would be to keep the neurobiological processes linked to emotion - just to keep the flow of the article's purpose. I keep trying to make grammatical and typographical edits to your page but am getting edit conflicts over and over again. So, instead can I suggest:

- ensure your headings are in sentence case
- watch for unnecessary capitalisations (for example with neurotransmitter names)
- Suggest change What disadvantages, you ask? The dangers and pain associated with childbirth, the threat of life threatening STD's and diseases such as AIDS and despite the resources and time associated with raising a child, yet society continues to thrive(14) to "These disadvantages include the dangers and pain associated with childbirth, the risk of sexually transmitted diseases (STDs) and the time and resources required for child rearing
- put Romeo and Juliet (when referring to the book/play, not the characters themselves) and The Notebook in italics.
- perhaps putting the Corinthians quote on it's own line, as it is more than one sentence.

Good luck and you're doing really well so far :) Hayley U3017556 (discusscontribs) 13:15, 24 October 2015 (UTC)

Heading casing[edit source]

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FYI, the convention on Wikiversity is for lower-cased headings. For example, use:

==Cats and dogs==

rather than

==Cats and Dogs==

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 13:23, 23 November 2015 (UTC)

Chapter review and feedback

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Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this is a promising, solid chapter which could be improved by developing a more evidence-based conclusion and improving the structure.
  2. For more feedback see these copyedits and the comments below.

Theory[edit source]

  1. A lot of theory is covered - perhaps too much (e.g., why is Maslow's hierarchy included - it is isn't related to neurobiology? Neither is Sternberg's?)
  2. I recommend reconsidering the rather simplistic conclusion that people simply have sex to fall in love. Sufficient evidence to support this recommendation wasn't provided.
  3. The case study was helpful.

Research[edit source]

  1. Some statements were unreferenced (e.g., see the [factual?] tags)
  2. When describing important research studies, provide some indication of the nature of the sample and possibly cultural context.
  3. When discussing important research findings, indicate the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship.

Written expression[edit source]

  1. Avoid sections with only one sub-section. A section should have no sub-sections or at least two sub-sections.
  2. Avoid one sentence paragraphs. A paragraph should typically consist of three to five sentences.
  3. The quality of written expression could be improved (e.g., see where clarification templates have been added to the page).
  4. Layout
    1. Revise the structure - there are too many sub-sections; rationalise.
    2. (Excessive use of) colour was removed so as to aid accessibility/readability; strive for simple layout (e.g., as per Wikipedia articles)
    3. Add bullet-points for See also and External links.
    4. Tables and/or Figures are used effectively, but they need APA style captions.
  5. Learning features
    1. Add interwiki links to relevant Wikipedia articles (some links have been added as external links) - also incorporate links to related book chapters (e.g., Oxytocin and emotion).
    2. Quiz questions are used to encourage reader engagement.
  6. Grammar and proofreading
    1. The grammar of some sentences could be improved (e.g., see the [grammar?] tags).
  7. APA style
    1. Add APA style captions to tables and figures.
    2. Check and correct the APA style for how to report numbers (Numbers under 10 should be written in words (e.g., five); numbers 10 and over should be written in numbers (e.g., 10)).
    3. Check and correct the APA style formatting of in-text citations.
    4. Put in-text citations in alphabetical order.
    5. The reference list is not in full APA style.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 13:23, 23 November 2015 (UTC)

Multimedia feedback

The accompanying multimedia presentation has been marked according to the marking criteria. Marks are available via the unit's Moodle site. Written feedback is provided below, plus see the general feedback page. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below. If you would like further clarification about the marking or feedback, contact the unit convener.


Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this is a basic, but sufficient presentation.

Structure and content[edit source]

  1. Engaging visuals/animation.
  2. Make more clear how the psychological theories of love relate to neurobiology - this aspect only seemed to be (partly) addressed towards the end.
  3. Check spelling - References.
  4. A conclusion slide summarising the take-home messages could be helpful.

Communication[edit source]

  1. Audio is well-paced.
  2. Increase text size to make it easier to read. A non-serif font may also help.

Production quality[edit source]

  1. Revise title, "Recording #10", to be more accurate/descriptive.
  2. Audio recording quality is a bit 'dull' - check microphone set up.
  3. Fill out the description field (e.g., brief description of presentation, link back to the book chapter, license details, and possibly include references and image attributions).
  4. The copyright licenses and sources for the images used is not indicated - there may have been copyright violation unless you own the copyright to the images used or these were public domain images.
  5. Provide an active link back to the book chapter.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 11:16, 26 November 2015 (UTC)