Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2015/National and cultural happiness

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Overall This is a basic, but sufficient chapter. This chapter was written on an unapproved topic. There is little to no integration between this chapter and other chapters or Wikipedia articles. For more feedback see these copyedits and the comments below. Theory Theory is reasonably well covered. The inclusion or more examples or case studies would be helpful. Research Research is described, but more detail would be helpful. Some statements were unreferenced (e.g., see the tags) When describing important research studies, provide some indication of the nature of the sample and possibly cultural context. When discussing important research findings, indicate the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship. Written expression Written expression is reasonably good. Avoid directional referencing (e.g., above, below, as previously mentioned). Some paragraphs are overly long. Each paragraph should communicate one key idea in three to five sentences. Avoid one sentence paragraphs. A paragraph should typically consist of three to five sentences. Obtaining (earlier) comments on a chapter plan and/or chapter draft could have helped to improve the chapter. Layout See earlier comments about heading casing There is minimal use of images or tables. Some good use is made of images and/or tables. Figure captions should be more explanatory. Learning features Some links to Wikipedia and/or Wikiversity articles were added as external links - these should be changed to interwiki links. More links should be incorporated. Quiz questions could be used to increase interactivity. Grammar and proofreading Check and correct the use of abbreviations (such as "e.g.," and "i.e.,"). APA style Add APA style captions to tables and figures. Check and correct the APA style formatting of in-text citations. The reference list is not in full APA style.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 05:11, 2 December 2015 (UTC)

Multimedia feedback

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Overall Overall, this is a solid presentation. Structure and content The presentation provides a useful overview of the topic, but lacks more specific theoretical and research detail. Include citations. Perhaps consider using more illustrative examples. A Conclusion which summarises the key points from psychological science and practical take-home messages would be helpful. Communication Audio is very clear and well-paced. Varied intonation adds interest and engagement. Visual production is very good, but arguably overemphasises the talking head and underemphasises alternative use of images and text to convey knowledge. Production quality Overall, well produced. Rename the title so that it includes the subtitle (and matches the book chapter). Description is sufficient. A copyright license for the presentation is not indicated (i.e., in the description or in the presentation slides).

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 00:57, 3 December 2015 (UTC)