Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2015/Mood variation over the week

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Hey you may want to look at events that may change our mood during the week. maybe define term like "bad day" and so on. All the best Iga.leszczynska (discuss • contribs) 02:24, 9 October 2015 (UTC)

hi wow looking good! I like the 'I don't like Monday's' little fact at the beginning and the quiz! I know you're probably already pushing the word limit so maybe you could have some kind of diagram or chart showing the ups and downs of mood in a general week? So readers can see straight away your chapter summary in a picture of mood variation over the week? --U3096981 (discuss • contribs)

Hey! Your inclusion of a brief story at the start is a great idea to set the scene. Love the quiz you added in, as-well as how you set the evidence section into different age groupings. Looks like you have done fantastic job researching into the topic :) Maybe be a little careful of the word limit is all. U3097090 (discuss • contribs) 08:31, 12 October 2015 (UTC)

Hey there, I'm liking your page so far. The quote box at the start looks really good, and is a good introduction and causes the reader to stop and think. The only part i'm not sure I like though is the quiz as I'm not sure what purpose it is serving. While I think it is a nice interactive feature I don't understand it's usefulness. Perhaps it might be better to have a quiz that tests the readers knowledge that they've learnt by reading your page? I also really like the above suggestion about a chart showing the ups and downs of mood over a week, i think that would be a really cool addition! Good Luck with the rest of it! --Tessa Power (discuss • contribs) 08:34, 12 October 2015 (UTC)

Hi. I’m confused by the very first heading that says ‘How does affect change throughout the week?’ What do you mean by affect? I found this unclear. I have now read the section that states that mood is synonymous with affect and will be used interchangeably, so the first heading now makes sense, but can still be unclear to the reader who has not yet read this. In the section ‘Defining and Measuring Mood’, the first sentence ‘Moods and emotions are related but distinct phenomenon’ I found a bit unclear, maybe if it said ‘While moods and emotions are related, they are distinct phenomenon’? Also in this section you’ve said how moods and emotions differ, but I am still unclear on exactly what mood is. Maybe you could define mood before comparing it to emotion. Under the Perfectionism sub-heading the sentence ‘Perfectionism, motivation and personality all alter degree to which mood varies as a function of the week’ is also unclear to me. I’m not sure what you mean or how you could rephrase it. In the conclusion, I found this bit unclear: ‘Further research is necessary to explore the influence of weekends and work on mood, and attempt to differentiate between the effects each has. Since SDT supports the notion work-activities produce DOW mood variation, it is necessary to investigate weekend mood effects in retirees to see why, even though they do not work, these individuals report more positive moods on weekends’. A suggestion for rephrasing is ‘Further research is necessary to explore the influence that weekends and work have on mood, and to differentiate between the effects each has on mood. For instance, since SDT supports the notion that work-activities produce…’ I’m not sure if that’s what you’re meaning to say, but it’s unclear why you added the sentence on retirees to the conclusion unless you are using it as evidence for the need for further research. Hope that makes sense. Most of this is nitpicking. Overall it is a great book chapter with solid theory. I have edited out some unnecessary commas in the implications section, hope you don’t mind! U3100755 (discuss • contribs) 02:58, 14 October 2015 (UTC)

Hi, The first thing that caught my eye was the title, it does't really make sense until you read through the chapter. May want to consider revising. Second, it was a little strange having a quiz straight after the overview. I can see what you are getting at, I guess setting the stage for the chapter to come but for me it seems to bring down the academic quality of the chapter. Third, you have stated statistical terms such as alpha levels but to the non psychologically educated person, this would make no sense and hinder the understanding of the paper. There's a few grammar errors "dimensions, with duration, intensity" just to point one out (so obviously take the coma out after duration). A more thorough scan for grammar is required, as well as rewording some ambiguous language/sentences. Apart from that it's not too bad. Interesting read! --David M&E7124 (discuss • contribs)

Reading through this chapter has been really interesting! Just a quick note on the structure – I really like the Spencer story but I think it would have more impact if it were placed after the overview instead of before. The overview gives you an understanding of what BMP is and I think by placing the example after this information it would work to reinforce it and even help prove that BMP really could occur. I liked the 5 tips for improving mood at the end of your chapter and they definitely work as a take home message. U3036568 (discuss • contribs) 04:41, 18 October 2015 (UTC)

Hey, so your book chapter page is really interactive. I love how the page is set up. If you were to add a bit more color, I feel as it would give it more of an attraction to the eye. Ive noticed some grammar mistakes throughout the chapter, so just have a look over your page again, but otherwise its wicked good! Goodjob Uu3148421 (discuss • contribs) 04:00, 19 October 2015 (UTC)

Your chapter is very informative. It gets the reader's attention very quickly. Putting the quiz up front is an interesting twist. Your choice of pictures is entertaining and relevant. Providing empirical evidence is a real strength of your chapter compared to some others I have looked at. I thought it might have been better to say more about relevant theories earlier on. One area for possible improvement is to make more direct links between the theories and the empirical evidence. You do this to some extent in the conclusion. The 5 Tips near the end are helpful. U3092375 (discuss • contribs) 05:48, 19 October 2015 (UTC)

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Overall Overall, this is a fantastic chapter which makes effective use of the wiki environment and provides an integrated, indepth, but very readable synthesis of psychological theory and research on the topic. For more feedback see these copyedits and the comments below. Theory Theory is really well covered, but being quite selective and then explaining and integrating the theories with one another and with relevant research, with useful take-home messages. Research The research review is excellent, offering a clear, critical synthesis. Written expression Written expression, layout, learning features etc. are excellent, with only minor errors. The chapter makes excellent use of interwiki links to other book chapters and to relevant Wikipedia articles. Quiz questions are used effectively to encourage reader engagement. Images and tables are effectively used. APA style The APA style for the reference list is very good; remove issue numbers for seriated journals.

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Overall Overall, this is a very well prepared and executed presentation. Structure and content Awesome introduction and conclusion with pictures/music! Perhaps a line graph showing mood variations over the week could be used - there is room here for greater emphasis on research findings. Check spelling on SDT page. I'm not sure that SDT is the best theory to explain mood variation? Communication Audio was fast-paced - slow down. Perhaps consider using greater intonation to add interest and gain attention. Production quality Audio quality was a bit tinny/distant/quiet - check use of microphone. Picture quality was fabulous Image attributions? (Links to sources?) Overall, very well produced.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 08:52, 25 November 2015 (UTC)