Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2015/Masturbation motivation

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this article has a really good definition of drive theory

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Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this is a very good chapter which clearly covers theory and research about a particular aspect of sexual motivation and behaviour.
  2. The chapter is well structured, researched, and written. The grammar could be improved.
  3. For more feedback see these copyedits and the comments below.

Theory[edit source]

  1. Theory is well selected, explained and applied.
  2. The Overview and Conclusion are particularly good sections, providing strong beginnings and ends to the chapter.
  3. The case study/example was helpful.

Research[edit source]

  1. Research is well covered.
  2. The Reeve textbook is over-used as a citation; preferably consult and cite primary, peer-reviewed sources.
  3. When discussing important research findings, indicate the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship.
  4. The key issue that is not covered is causality. Many correlational statistics are cited. Usually the assumption seems to be that the sexual behaviour is the causal factor - but it could be the other way around, bidirectional, or due to a third factor.

Written expression[edit source]

  1. Written expression is generally clear and easy to follow, but has many grammatical errors.
    1. The quality of written expression could be improved (e.g., see where clarification templates have been added to the page).
  2. Layout
    1. Tables and/or Figures are used effectively.
  3. Learning features
    1. Add Interwiki links (e.g., to relevant Wikipedia articles and other Wikiversity book chapters) to make the text more interactive.
    2. Quiz questions could be used to encourage reader engagement.
  4. The grammar of many sentences could be improved (e.g., see my copyedits).
  5. APA style
    1. Add APA style captions to tables and figures.
    2. The reference list is not in full APA style.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 22:50, 30 November 2015 (UTC)

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Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this is a well prepared and executed presentation.
  2. Overall, this is an excellent all-round presentation.

Structure and content[edit source]

  1. Well structured.
  2. Theory was well covered.
  3. Include citations about evidence for claims.
  4. Well concluded.

Communication[edit source]

  1. Audio is clear and well-paced.
  2. Visuals are clear and easy to read, with a good balance between text and image.

Production quality[edit source]

  1. Overall, well produced using simple tools.
  2. Rename the title so that it includes the subtitle (and matches the book chapter).
  3. Description is minimal but sufficient.
  4. Adjust the youtube license to reflect the license in the comments.
  5. The copyright licenses and sources for the images used is not indicated - there may have been copyright violation unless you own the copyright to the images used or these were public domain images.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 06:11, 2 December 2015 (UTC)

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Since it is totally w:WP:FRINGE/PS. AFAIK Brody is an AIDS denialist. He assessed the probability of getting infected with HIV through PVI to that of being struck by lightning. Tgeorgescu (discusscontribs) 12:55, 17 September 2019 (UTC)

Quoted by Tgeorgescu (discusscontribs) 13:12, 17 September 2019 (UTC)

--Guy Macon (talk) 13:25, 17 September 2019 (UTC)
Quoted by Tgeorgescu (discusscontribs) 13:30, 17 September 2019 (UTC)
Almost 50% of the papers cited in the article are papers by Brody. Tgeorgescu (discusscontribs) 14:06, 17 September 2019 (UTC)