Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2015/Mastery motivation

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Comments[edit source]

Hey! I hope you don't mind, but I just changed your layout for you: I added the title, changed the headings and added 'see also'. Hope it helps you out! --U3082322 (discuss • contribs) 21:47, 23 October 2015 (UTC)--U3082322 (discuss • contribs) 21:47, 23 October 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Heading casing[edit source]

 FYI, the convention on Wikiversity is for lower-cased headings. For example, use:

==Cats and dogs==

rather than

==Cats and Dogs==

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 23:17, 1 December 2015 (UTC)[reply]


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Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this is a very good chapter.
  2. Several images were uploaded without appropriate copyright information. These were deleted due to possible copyright violation.
  3. For more feedback see these copyedits and the comments below.

Theory[edit source]

  1. Theory is well covered and explained.
  2. Greater integration/use of case studies or examples could be helpful.

Research[edit source]

  1. Research is generally well cited, although some statements were unreferenced (e.g., see the [factual?] tags).
  2. When describing important research studies, provide some indication of the nature of the sample and possibly cultural context.
  3. When discussing important research findings, indicate the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship.

Written expression[edit source]

  1. Written expression is generally very good, with excellent Overview and Conclusion sections.
  2. Layout
    1. See earlier comments about heading casing
    2. Check and correct heading levels (e.g., Heading level 3 sits below Heading level 2 etc.)
    3. The chapter is well-structured.
    4. Add bullet-points for See also and External links.
    5. Figures were problematic because images without appropriate copyright details were used.
    6. No Tables are used.
  3. Learning features
    1. Some links to Wikipedia and/or Wikiversity articles were added as external links - these should be changed to interwiki links.
    2. Add links to other related Wikiversity book chapters.
    3. Quiz questions are used effectively to encourage reader engagement.
  4. Spelling
    1. Use Australian spelling (some general examples are hypothesize -> hypothesise; behavior -> behaviour).
  5. Grammar and proofreading
    1. The grammar of some sentences could be improved (e.g., see the [grammar?] tags).
  6. APA style
    1. The reference list is not in full APA style.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 23:17, 1 December 2015 (UTC)[reply]


Multimedia feedback

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Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this is a basic, but sufficient presentation.

Structure and content[edit source]

  1. The content is quite dry/academic.
  2. The description of mastery motivation could be clearer and richer - can some examples of mastery motivation be provided?
  3. General motivation theory is covered - but there could be greater focus on Mastery motivation (e.g.,
  4. A Conclusion slide summarising the take-home messages / key points could be helpful.

Communication[edit source]

  1. Visuals consist of relatively small font text.
  2. Consider user larger font sizes and incorporating more visual organisation e.g., through images, diagrams.
  3. Audio is well-paced.
  4. Consider using greater intonation to enhance engagement.
  5. There is no narration for the last slide.
  6. The presentation is over the maximum length.

Production quality[edit source]

  1. Check audio recording set-up - voice quality is bit darth vaderish!
  2. Rename the title so that it includes the subtitle (and matches the book chapter).
  3. A copyright license for the presentation is not indicated (i.e., in the description or in the presentation slides).
  4. No link is provided back to the book chapter.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 03:22, 3 December 2015 (UTC)[reply]

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