Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2015/Major depressive episodes and motivation

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Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this is a promising chapter which could be improved by being better implemented in the wiki environment (e.g., using images which are licensed for re-use (or editing to remove use of these images)).
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Theory[edit source]

  1. Theory was reasonably well covered an applied.
  2. Addition of case studies or additional examples could be helpful.

Research[edit source]

  1. Research is reasonably well covered.
  2. Did you consult (Beck, 1964)? If not, don't cite it.
  3. Use primary, peer-reviewed sources; not textbooks (e.g. Reeve, Weiten etc. are textbooks)
  4. When describing important research studies, provide some indication of the nature of the sample and possibly cultural context.
  5. When discussing important research findings, indicate the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship.

Written expression[edit source]

  1. Written expression was reasonable.
    1. Avoid one sentence paragraphs. A paragraph should typically consist of three to five sentences.
    2. Some paragraphs are overly long. Each paragraph should communicate one key idea in three to five sentences.
  2. Layout
    1. Use default heading styles; remove italics
    2. The chapter is well-structured.
    3. Tables are used extensively; but they need some tidying up and APA style captions.
    4. No appropriate images were used.
  3. Learning features
    1. Several images were uploaded without appropriate copyright licensing and were hence deleted. The corresponding table needs to be fixed up / removed.
    2. Add Interwiki links (e.g., to relevant Wikipedia articles and other Wikiversity book chapters) to make the text more interactive.
    3. Quiz questions are used effectively to encourage reader engagement.
  4. Spelling
    1. Use Australian spelling (some general examples are hypothesize -> hypothesise, behavior -> behaviour).
  5. Grammar and proofreading
    1. The grammar of some sentences could be improved (e.g., see the [grammar?] tags).
    2. Check and correct the use of ownership apostrophes (e.g., individuals vs. individual's vs. individuals').
    3. Use abbreviations such as "e.g." inside brackets and "for example" outside brackets.
  6. APA style
    1. Check and correct the APA style for how to report numbers (Numbers under 10 should be written in words (e.g., five); numbers 10 and over should be written in numbers (e.g., 10)).
    2. Check and correct the APA style formatting of in-text citations.
    3. Direct quotes need page numbers.
    4. The reference list is not in full APA style.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 20:37, 29 November 2015 (UTC)Reply[reply]

Multimedia feedback

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Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this is a basic, but sufficient presentation.

Structure and content[edit source]

  1. Basic theory is described.
    1. The criteria for MDE could be shown.
  2. Relatively little research is reviewed.
  3. The main area for improvement is to focus more on content that relates directly to the question (i.e., How do MDEs affect motivation) and less on the preliminary/adjunct material (Parts 1 and 2, and the what is the effect of motivation on MDEs).
  4. What are the practical, take-home messages?

Communication[edit source]

  1. Audio is clear and well-paced.
  2. Slides are generally easy to read (except for the slide with multiple pictures).

Production quality[edit source]

  1. Overall, well produced using simple tools.
  2. A link to the presentation is not provided from book chapter (a link has now been added).
  3. Rename the title so that it includes the subtitle (and matches the book chapter).
  4. Fill out the description field (e.g., brief description of presentation, link back to the book chapter, license details, and possibly include references, image attributions, and/or transcript).
  5. The copyright licenses and sources for the images used is not indicated - there may have been copyright violation unless you own the copyright to the images used or these were public domain images.
  6. A copyright license for the presentation is not indicated (i.e., in the description or in the presentation slides).
  7. No link is provided back to the book chapter.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 21:47, 3 December 2015 (UTC)Reply[reply]