Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2015/MDMA and psychotherapy

Heading casing

FYI, the convention on Wikiversity is for lower-cased headings. For example, use: ==Cats and dogs== rather than ==Cats and Dogs== -- Jtneill - Talk - c 08:44, 29 November 2015 (UTC)

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Overall Overall, this is a promising chapter which could be improved by improving the quality of written expression and making use of the interactive potential of the wiki environment. For more feedback see these copyedits and the comments below. Theory The neurochemistry of MDMA is well described. Ideally, incorporate images to help illustrate the text. However, this material could also be abbreviated, with links provided to MDMA for more detail, to allow greater focus on theory about the combined use of MDMA in psychotherapy. I think that this claim is highly problematic: "If the substance MDMA was addictive, every individual who has ever tried it, would be an addict." because, for example, alcohol is addictive, but not everyone is addicted to alcohol etc. Research Research is reasonably covered, however there was more research that could have been reviewed (e.g., Greer). Some statements were unreferenced (e.g., see the tags) Written expression The quality of written expression could be improved (e.g., see where clarification templates have been added to the page). Use default heading styles; remove bold The chapter is well-structured. The layout is minimal. No images or tables were used. Add Interwiki links (e.g., to relevant Wikipedia articles and other Wikiversity book chapters) to make the text more interactive. Quiz questions could be used to encourage reader engagement. Spelling could be improved - see the tags. The grammar of many sentences needs to be improved for the written expression to be of professional standard (e.g., see the tags). APA style Check and correct the APA style for how to report numbers (Numbers under 10 should be written in words (e.g., five); numbers 10 and over should be written in numbers (e.g., 10)). When there are three or more authors, subsequent citations should use et al. (e.g., Smith, Bush and Western (2001) first and and then Smith et al. (2001) subsequently). Check and correct matching of in-text citations with the reference list (e.g., Greer and Tolbert (1990) is cited, but is not in the reference list). The reference list is not in full APA style.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 08:44, 29 November 2015 (UTC)

Multimedia feedback

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Overall Overall, this is a basic, but sufficient presentation. Overall, this is a solid presentation. Structure and content Overall, the content is well organised and presented. Include citations. Perhaps consider using more illustrative images. Abbreviate the description of MDMA and its psychological effects and expand the material about theory and research into the use of MDMA with psychotherapy. Long-term effects slide was skipped? A Conclusion slide summarising the take-home messages / key points could be helpful. Communication Audio is clear and well-paced. Visuals are simple, clear and easy to read. Consider using illustrative images. Production quality No link was provided from the book chapter. Rename the title so that it includes the subtitle (and matches the book chapter). Fill out the description field (e.g., brief description of presentation, link back to the book chapter, license details, and possibly include references and image attributions). A copyright license for the presentation is not indicated (i.e., in the description or in the presentation slides). No link is provided back to the book chapter.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 00:27, 3 December 2015 (UTC)