Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2015/Laughter and emotion

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Hi, I've made a few minor corrections to typos and punctuation errors however overall its a very interesting topic. Two small things. Text under the title Different types of laughter doesn't make sense. It might just be me but I read it three times and it is still off, might be the repeat of words but even without them I think it could use tighening. An example is being told of this is bring told off by a boss and for an unexplained reason you decide to have a giggle.

Second you dont have anything under the see other resources link heres a few things you might like to consider including http://www.readersdigest.ca/fun/jokes/laughter-best-medicine/
https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Laughter
http://www.helpguide.org/articles/emotional-health/laughter-is-the-best-medicine.htm

goodluck- u116040

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Hey! Your topic is very interesting! I've made a few minor adjustments to your headings so they comply with the wikiversity standards. I would suggest putting in some more links with your definitions to other pages such as emotion and some other related book chapters from previous years. Also, your references should also be APA formatting with a hanging indent rather than a numbered list which can be done with this code:

insert references here

Other than that, your information looks great and I like that you have defined a lot of the key words. Good luck! --U3096825 (discuss • contribs) 11:54, 25 October 2015 (UTC)

Comments

Hey! your content sounds great just some feedback that some pictures or diagrams would make your book chapter a lot more appealing to look at. --U3083568 (discuss • contribs) 02:54, 25 October 2015 (UTC)

Heading casing

FYI, the convention on Wikiversity is for lower-cased headings. For example, use: ==Cats and dogs== rather than ==Cats and Dogs== -- Jtneill - Talk - c 03:22, 25 October 2015 (UTC)

References

Hey just letting you know quickly before due date that some of your references are missing the volume numbers in the references. And you need the volume numbers of at least the DOI's! Good Luck! Ccgmjb (discuss • contribs) 11:39, 25 October 2015 (UTC)

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-- Jtneill - Talk - c 22:12, 20 November 2015 (UTC)

Multimedia feedback

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Overall Overall, this is a basic, but sufficient presentation. Structure and content A good balance of theory and research is presented using text and audio. Include citations. Communication Text is on the small side (consider increasing font size). How about some laughter (or something to make the viewer laugh)? (or at least greater variation in intonation to increase engagement/interest). Consider including some images. Audio is perhaps slightly too fast - consider slowing down. Production quality Audio is a little fuzzy/distorted - review microphone set-up. Title is clear/descriptive. Description is minimal but sufficient.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 23:02, 25 November 2015 (UTC)