Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2015/Impulsive behaviour in children

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Hey just wanted to suggest you might want to look at parenting styles and the influence that might have on child's impulses. All the best ~Iga.leszczynska

Hi! Really cool topic, love the opening sentence in the overview, it really captures a specific audience. You're the first I've seen use animated images too, which look really good! You look like you have a lot to talk about, which is good. One suggestion is maybe to centre your quotes in the coloured boxes, that way it centres the focus on it a bit more, rather than having them to the left of the box, other than that, well done :) Bt1718 (contribs) 4.22, 15 October 2015 (UTC)

Hey! Solid effort so far, few things I would suggest is to make sure your captions underneath your images are in the correct APA formatting, as well as adding the year that some of the quotes you have in coloured boxes were said/written. Your image of Nick Kyrygios does relate to the paragraph you have inserted it within, however I would suggest to make that link more clear to the reader by either mentioning 'see image' at the end of the paragraph or writing a sentence to demonstrate that Kyrygios is an example of what you're trying to explain and provide the evidence of this research. Other than that keep up the good work :) User:U3097062 12:35, 16 October 2015

Hi, I think it looks great, your interactive images are also a nice touch! Maybe include how impulses are differ for children with disabilities or medical conditions? U3040525 (discuss • contribs) 11:35, 16 October 2015 (UTC)u3040525

Hey there, great work so far! I love the quotes at the beginning of each heading. I made some small edits, which were just really tiny grammatical/spelling errors. Some of your sentences are a little lengthy and difficult to follow - maybe see if you can break them up a little? It's looking great though well done!--Sgerstenberg (discuss • contribs) 09:43, 17 October 2015 (UTC)

Hello! What an interesting topic. Your book chapter is good and has lots of colour and pictures which break up the content a bit. I would suggest using an example and adding it throughout so you can apply your theories and research into a real life example case. i feel that would make your book chapter amazing and help you explain some more things in detail! hope this helps and looking forward to reading this! --U3034876 (discuss • contribs) 01:07, 20 October 2015 (UTC)

Heading casing

FYI, the convention on Wikiversity is for lower-cased headings. For example, use: ==Cats and dogs== rather than ==Cats and Dogs== -- Jtneill - Talk - c 10:28, 20 October 2015 (UTC)

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Overall Overall, this is an excellent chapter - it makes full use of the wiki environment, embraces the book theme, and shows indepth understanding and integration of relevant theory and research. For more feedback see these copyedits and the comments below. Theory Theory is very well selected, covered, explained and integrated with research and practical examples. The Overview could be improved to provide a clearer outline of the content. Research Research is well described and integrated with theory. Critical thinking is evident. Written expression Written expression is generally excellent. Some areas for improvement: The chapter was over word count. Some sentences are overly long. Be wary of overstatement e.g., "Self-control failure due to nutrient deficiency will shed light on what is really happening to our children when they behave impulsively." Layout is simple, yet engaging. Mastery of the Wikiversity environment is evident. Tables, Figures, and colour are used effectively. Learning features The chapter makes excellent use of interwiki linking. Quiz questions are used effectively to encourage reader engagement. APA style is excellent.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 12:42, 18 November 2015 (UTC)

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Overall Overall, this is an excellent all-round presentation. Structure and content Theory was well covered and explained. Perhaps consider using more illustrative examples. A conclusion slide summarising the take-home messages could be helpful. Communication Clear and well-paced. The combination of images and text is effective. Production quality Fill out the description field (e.g., include link back to the book chapter, and possibly include references and image attributions) Audio has some white noise and is a bit echoey - review microphone set-up. The copyright license for the images used is not indicated - there may have been copyright violation. A copyright license for the presentation is not indicated (e.g., in the description or in the presentation slides).

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 09:33, 25 November 2015 (UTC)